Sewn Into the Sky
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Reflected Anything"Collection of Free Style Poetry
8 total reviews
Comment from kmoss
I'm randomly browsing and I found this gem! I do not know if a six will help you out on an old one, but I couldn't give it anything else. Whoa,this is from a real long time ago, I just checked the date.
My favorite parts:
Hands of granite clench my thoughts.
My dreams drift into midnight traps
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Inhale the mechanical pull to continue.
Release---a deliberate stretch to end
each breath chasing a name that is yet to be spoken
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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I'm randomly browsing and I found this gem! I do not know if a six will help you out on an old one, but I couldn't give it anything else. Whoa,this is from a real long time ago, I just checked the date.
My favorite parts:
Hands of granite clench my thoughts.
My dreams drift into midnight traps
and
Inhale the mechanical pull to continue.
Release---a deliberate stretch to end
each breath chasing a name that is yet to be spoken
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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Woe. Again thank you.
I had to go back and read.
'Leer at the face with no face that sits in the glass tonight.'
I remember that. I was on a couch for a year. I'd walk outside at night by myself. Just beat. Alone. Scared. Tired. It was tough.
Thank you for reading this and making me read again. It shows how far I've come. Thank you.
And you get me. I think we have similar styles. Once in a while, usually am older reader, will say I'm too abstract with Mr metaphors. But they make very real sense and all are very deliberate. Never contrived. I like to think about pieces, metaphors. I don't know. But you do it too and I like it. Makes you think you know?
Seriously Thank you. Really thank you
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I really, really like this one! I love metaphors, even if they only make sense to me. Check out my poems Delusional Discord and Absent Guard, I think you will get them, maybe? Hopefully. LOL
Comment from Treischel
Melancholy is too soft a word for this free verse outpouring of anguish. Very colorful images describe the destitution, like: hands of granite clench, midnight traps, life with no living, mechanical pull, deliberate stretch, no moniker, silent clamor, and crusted eyes. You use powerful alliteration to enhance the point, like: dreams drift, hopes to hope, boiling bite, fire forever, end each, no nor nothing, wrestle with the wind, silent say, face with no face, true years, and would where.
That's a lot of poetry in this gem.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Melancholy is too soft a word for this free verse outpouring of anguish. Very colorful images describe the destitution, like: hands of granite clench, midnight traps, life with no living, mechanical pull, deliberate stretch, no moniker, silent clamor, and crusted eyes. You use powerful alliteration to enhance the point, like: dreams drift, hopes to hope, boiling bite, fire forever, end each, no nor nothing, wrestle with the wind, silent say, face with no face, true years, and would where.
That's a lot of poetry in this gem.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Wow. Thank you. This is probably the most insightful and educated review I've received. I'm grateful and humbled. Especially by you friend. Thank you truly. I thought I'd bummed some people out and lost readers bc my last posts have been a little dark. But I've been going through something. Can only write whats inside I suppose. Thank you again for reading.
Comment from rouskin
You left no "Hopes to hope" that it would be
less than perfect write.
Your "feathers of dandelions threaded in webs"
and closing two lines
"These crusted eyes ache for true tears again
For a reflection of anything would show where I've been"
woke me up because for a moment I forgot where am I.
Great. Thank you.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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You left no "Hopes to hope" that it would be
less than perfect write.
Your "feathers of dandelions threaded in webs"
and closing two lines
"These crusted eyes ache for true tears again
For a reflection of anything would show where I've been"
woke me up because for a moment I forgot where am I.
Great. Thank you.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you! I'm very grateful for your review, detailed. That's rare here. Thank you. Truly, you're a rare find. I'd love o follow, you have good insight.
Comment from SteveY
Wow, boy this one was extremely poetic in its language and inner reflections of self and life and everything but then again that's the title isn't it?
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Wow, boy this one was extremely poetic in its language and inner reflections of self and life and everything but then again that's the title isn't it?
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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thank you my friend. God bless you. you are always so kind and get me. I truly love and appreciate it.
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thank you my friend. God bless you. you are always so kind and get me. I truly love and appreciate it.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Greg, I'm always delighted to see you've posted something, and you never disappoint me. You always manage to bring my heart to the surface with the emotion from your words. Your closing two lines are outstanding.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Greg, I'm always delighted to see you've posted something, and you never disappoint me. You always manage to bring my heart to the surface with the emotion from your words. Your closing two lines are outstanding.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you Karyn! I'm humbled and grateful. I literally always wit for your reviews. I'm really happy you liked it. I know they've been a little dark but its just where I am. They will get lighter soon. I appreciate that you can see that. You seem to get my voice so well. That's an amazing compliment. I am just very glad I have people like you in my life.
Comment from ravenblack
Keep writing stuff like this, and the light will be so bright you will need sunglasses at night. "Feathers of dandelions threaded in webs"- wishes of flight, to be away from the darkness still in the web, but visible meaning soon, with a birthday cake breath, you will destroy the web and set them free. Right now still, it seems like emptiness fighting emptiness akin to fighting fire with fire- " wrestle with the wind, then plead to a silent clamour..". The tears of relief will come. Not just saying this, but I have really missed your voice. Excellent poem, and if I had a six it would be yours.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Keep writing stuff like this, and the light will be so bright you will need sunglasses at night. "Feathers of dandelions threaded in webs"- wishes of flight, to be away from the darkness still in the web, but visible meaning soon, with a birthday cake breath, you will destroy the web and set them free. Right now still, it seems like emptiness fighting emptiness akin to fighting fire with fire- " wrestle with the wind, then plead to a silent clamour..". The tears of relief will come. Not just saying this, but I have really missed your voice. Excellent poem, and if I had a six it would be yours.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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That means so much. Really. Your last line touched my heart like nothing I've ever read. It means so much. And your review is poetic in itself. Smart. Insightful. Truly. Thank you so much. You've made me smile. For that I'm so grateful. Thank you thank you thank you.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, fabulous writing here, Gregory. I loved how you wrapped this piece up with those two wonderful stanzas at the end...
"These crusted eyes ache for true tears again
For a reflection of anything would show where I've been"...
Yes, eventually, the fog lifts. then out of the primordial muck rises hope on a sultry sea of salvation and serenity.
Very well done, my friend!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Ah, fabulous writing here, Gregory. I loved how you wrapped this piece up with those two wonderful stanzas at the end...
"These crusted eyes ache for true tears again
For a reflection of anything would show where I've been"...
Yes, eventually, the fog lifts. then out of the primordial muck rises hope on a sultry sea of salvation and serenity.
Very well done, my friend!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Wow Dean thank you. I love your last line. You're so right. You've been there. Kindred spirits. I'm getting there. God has a plan. I'm happy to call you a friend. Thank you Dean really.
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Likewise, Gregory, and you're very welcome...
Comment from amanda98653
Wow. I loved that. Definitely a splendid poem you've written there.
"Hands of granite clench my thoughts
My dreams drift into midnight traps ~
feathers of dandelions threaded in webs"
very good usage of the word "clench"..hard to relinquish
dreams drifting into midnight traps..captured your soul and spirit
feathers of dandelions- a beautiful phrase
Dandelions add a wish of happiness and a promise of complete and utter faithfulness.
the tenderness of hope and love being threaded in webs..can't ever be dispersed.
God bless
Very beautiful
Amanda
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Wow. I loved that. Definitely a splendid poem you've written there.
"Hands of granite clench my thoughts
My dreams drift into midnight traps ~
feathers of dandelions threaded in webs"
very good usage of the word "clench"..hard to relinquish
dreams drifting into midnight traps..captured your soul and spirit
feathers of dandelions- a beautiful phrase
Dandelions add a wish of happiness and a promise of complete and utter faithfulness.
the tenderness of hope and love being threaded in webs..can't ever be dispersed.
God bless
Very beautiful
Amanda
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you so so much. I'm blown away. Words like this are just so inspiring and truly uplifting. I'm so glad you understood everything so well. So well. You're a great person and very insightful. I'm humbled and again I just thank you so much. Truly. I'm so honored for the six.
