Forever Soon
We'll be.... (rhyming free verse - Jaq Cee)15 total reviews
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
NICE WORK LOVE HOW YOU CAN GET ONES PASSION FLOWING I HAVE A COUPLE ON THE RISQUE SIDE BUT HAVE MY DOUBTS IF TO POSTING OR NOT..HOPE YUR WEEK END WENT WELL ITS 10 30 PM HERE ON THE ISLANDS YOU MIGHT ALREADY BE UP AND STARTING YOUR DAY
TK
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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NICE WORK LOVE HOW YOU CAN GET ONES PASSION FLOWING I HAVE A COUPLE ON THE RISQUE SIDE BUT HAVE MY DOUBTS IF TO POSTING OR NOT..HOPE YUR WEEK END WENT WELL ITS 10 30 PM HERE ON THE ISLANDS YOU MIGHT ALREADY BE UP AND STARTING YOUR DAY
TK
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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I was at work by the time I noticed your review :). You must be quite a bit behind/ahead of us.
Thanks for this lovely review and get yours posted. :) Jaq xx
Comment from adewpearl
stunning presentation of your poem
good consonance of P sounds in passion seeps/pre
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
I like the rhyme in each stanza
nice alliteration in warm winds/caress core
excellent sensory and sensual appeal - I like, how in keeping with contest directives, you hint at the passion without getting all yucky graphic about it :-)
Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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stunning presentation of your poem
good consonance of P sounds in passion seeps/pre
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
I like the rhyme in each stanza
nice alliteration in warm winds/caress core
excellent sensory and sensual appeal - I like, how in keeping with contest directives, you hint at the passion without getting all yucky graphic about it :-)
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much Brooke appreciated as always xx
Comment from Gungalo
my heart does
beat in rapid
tune
as I know we'll
be 'forever'
soon
Forever soon, MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM. JC you are waxing romantic again and I love it.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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my heart does
beat in rapid
tune
as I know we'll
be 'forever'
soon
Forever soon, MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM. JC you are waxing romantic again and I love it.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Many thanks G, it, it means a lot from you ;-) Jaq xxx
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Anytime sweetie.
Comment from Matoshka
What a wonderful poem of love to be and to come. I enjoyed the flow and the passion yet to come. Great picture with your words. Blessings and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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What a wonderful poem of love to be and to come. I enjoyed the flow and the passion yet to come. Great picture with your words. Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Many thanks M, I didn't get many votes but your words mean more :) Jaq xx
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Many thanks M, I didn't get many votes but your words mean more :) Jaq xx
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You are so welcome Jaq, I thought it was great. At least you tried. Blessings
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Many blessings to you also :) Jaq x
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:)
Comment from RPFoster
So beautifully written, it flowed well. Gave me the feeling of a love that never dies, but a person would die without. Well Done!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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So beautifully written, it flowed well. Gave me the feeling of a love that never dies, but a person would die without. Well Done!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Very many thanks RPF for your insightful review xx
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery wirter, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the love that will be yours forever. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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this is very well written, mystery wirter, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the love that will be yours forever. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Cheers SWJ, many thanks for a great review. xx
Comment from wierdgrace
when I read this, my hair stood on my arms, I read it again, as it says so s o much, great entry for the contest, and I am wishing you lots of votes.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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when I read this, my hair stood on my arms, I read it again, as it says so s o much, great entry for the contest, and I am wishing you lots of votes.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Many thanks Grace your words mean a lot. xx
Comment from BeckyW
This is a wonderful poem and very well presented. Rhyme and tone fit nicely. The colors and artwork are perfect and I like the way you implemented black and white to the piece to represent the prompt 'passionate love in black and white' even though it wasn't part of the requirement. I like this piece a lot:)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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This is a wonderful poem and very well presented. Rhyme and tone fit nicely. The colors and artwork are perfect and I like the way you implemented black and white to the piece to represent the prompt 'passionate love in black and white' even though it wasn't part of the requirement. I like this piece a lot:)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thanks for a wonderful review Becky. xx
Comment from RYME4U
Nice rhythm and beat to this poem. I like the way you have presented it and the descriptive phrases make your words come alive.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Nice rhythm and beat to this poem. I like the way you have presented it and the descriptive phrases make your words come alive.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Many thanks RYME4U much appreciated.
Comment from Jackarrie
This Is a passionate love poem, the words flow so sensual and almost erotic. Very well written. I love it.
your passion seeps
through every
pore
like warm winds
that caress my
core
to feel your body
so close and
warm
makes me feel
safe
no worry or
harm
well done, good luck in the competition. Mary
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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This Is a passionate love poem, the words flow so sensual and almost erotic. Very well written. I love it.
your passion seeps
through every
pore
like warm winds
that caress my
core
to feel your body
so close and
warm
makes me feel
safe
no worry or
harm
well done, good luck in the competition. Mary
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for a great review and your best wishes.