FATE -- Fortune Admission Test Exam
No escape from the FATE. Please read Notes. 262 words65 total reviews
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I like this monologue. A non fiction, for self improvement.
Love the structure, the color, how it flows... And easy to read. Very enjoyable!
Well done!
:)
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I like this monologue. A non fiction, for self improvement.
Love the structure, the color, how it flows... And easy to read. Very enjoyable!
Well done!
:)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from lancellot
Okay, I see. This was taken from a dream you had and you relating it to the reader as close to "as is" without adding to it or embellishing it in anyway.
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Okay, I see. This was taken from a dream you had and you relating it to the reader as close to "as is" without adding to it or embellishing it in anyway.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Spitfire
This makes me of think of Jonathan Edwards Calvanistic preaching. A formal style except you use the informal "yeah" in the first sentence which spoils the mood. For me, you need concrete examples and more defined concepts of heaven and hell. I did like the last paragraph.
But the rest seemed to just repeat itself. I felt I was in a circle and couldn't get out.
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This makes me of think of Jonathan Edwards Calvanistic preaching. A formal style except you use the informal "yeah" in the first sentence which spoils the mood. For me, you need concrete examples and more defined concepts of heaven and hell. I did like the last paragraph.
But the rest seemed to just repeat itself. I felt I was in a circle and couldn't get out.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Selina Stambi
I kind of think I know what you are trying to say here, but the syntax and grammar is awry, Al
You write in four languages - is English your first?
I'm curious to know what makes this writer tick and keep persisting.
Bless you, my friend. :)
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I kind of think I know what you are trying to say here, but the syntax and grammar is awry, Al
You write in four languages - is English your first?
I'm curious to know what makes this writer tick and keep persisting.
Bless you, my friend. :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from Deniz22
John 6:27-29
New International Version (NIV)
27 Do not work for food that spoils, but for food that endures to eternal life, which the Son of Man will give you. For on him God the Father has placed his seal of approval."
28 Then they asked him, "What must we do to do the works God requires?"
29 Jesus answered, "The work of God is this: to believe in the one he has sent."
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John 6:27-29
New International Version (NIV)
27 Do not work for food that spoils, but for food that endures to eternal life, which the Son of Man will give you. For on him God the Father has placed his seal of approval."
28 Then they asked him, "What must we do to do the works God requires?"
29 Jesus answered, "The work of God is this: to believe in the one he has sent."
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from GaryCecil
Rightly, I am glad to answer to follow explanation onto your concluding phase of the question. You are about to land at Heaven. You will see how infinite Heaven is and know the state and status of Heaven dwellers there.
I think you wrote another through provoking article here.
Great job!
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Rightly, I am glad to answer to follow explanation onto your concluding phase of the question. You are about to land at Heaven. You will see how infinite Heaven is and know the state and status of Heaven dwellers there.
I think you wrote another through provoking article here.
Great job!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from amahra
Now I loved this writing. I understood what you were attempting to convey. I thought your author notes were funny. Really? Born in a cab? So was my brother. LOL.
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Now I loved this writing. I understood what you were attempting to convey. I thought your author notes were funny. Really? Born in a cab? So was my brother. LOL.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from marijmd
Your overall writing style confuses me at times - I am not sure if you are brilliant - or that English is not your first language.
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Your overall writing style confuses me at times - I am not sure if you are brilliant - or that English is not your first language.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from Dustybones
This is good! Would you mind if I made it into a poem? We could say it was your idea as a story and My collaboration with your permission. I like to write poems is all, and I like your ideas. You would have final rights of course and post it under the Almighty.
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This is good! Would you mind if I made it into a poem? We could say it was your idea as a story and My collaboration with your permission. I like to write poems is all, and I like your ideas. You would have final rights of course and post it under the Almighty.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
Comment from God's Writer
Fiction or not it is another grand treat from your pen. You are one of the best writers on Fanstory. Keep on writing. I am waiting for the next treat.
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Fiction or not it is another grand treat from your pen. You are one of the best writers on Fanstory. Keep on writing. I am waiting for the next treat.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
