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Boys go to carnival to see wolfman.

30 total reviews 
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Exceptional
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Absolutely did not see this coming. Magnificent. Amazing. Beautiful. Clever. Dangerous. Exciting.Fevered.Great. You carried us along in your special secret adventure. A brothers will be brothers will be brothers tale. You blew it out of the park. I told RicMyWorld that you and him were the two best writers in here. And if you don't read each other you should. Great Story. Karen

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
    Thank you for this. Been following Ric for years. Absolute stunning story teller. Fan Terry Broxton and Jay Squires. Also Sandra Mutchell. You will learn so much from them. Thank you again for this. Gretchen
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 21-Sep-2023
    I already have terry and jay in my clutches, I have never heard of Sandra Mutchell. I will check her out. Is there a story of her's that sticks in your brain? I will check, Karen
Comment from DonandVicki
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Thank you for sharing this , you brought me back with your story when I was a kid and went to see the "Freak Shows" as they were then called. I will never forget the terror I felt.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
    Thank you so much for your kind review and the nice words. Gretchen
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Hi Gretchen,

This kind of story could turn cheesy, but you did a great job with it! I didn't expect the ending.

I enjoy unpredictable reads. Well done! :)

Love,

Sonali

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
    Thank you for the wonderful review and the nice words. Gretchen
Comment from Zinnia48
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I really, really like this--the ending was a huge surprise. However, that last line seems a bit flat. I have no other suggestions, but it's a bit anti-climactic. I still really enjoyed it, and enjoyed seeing your writing in a different light. Caroline

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
    Thank you so much for your kind review and the helpful critique. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
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Excellent flash piece, Gretchen. Is this for the WD contest?

Only one thing, generally, I should point out. Make sure the voice is consistent for the characters. I kept having the feeling Harry was battling between being hickish and literary. I asked myself if one who says: "Women, they was faintin'," would also say, "I embellished some, left a part or two out, . . ."

The voice belongs to Harry. [I think this is unnecessary, Gretchen. Let the reader fill in the gaps. He learns who it is in the next line and all the clues were leading to it.

Good job, my friend. You're really getting into the vignettes, aren't you?

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
    Thank you for your wonderful review and the helpful critique. Gretchen
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Gretchen

= Carnivals and a wolf-man.
= Things make a good thriller story come to life.
= I enjoyed the read. I bet it was a fun write.

* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie <> Jax (*>*)

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
    Thank you so much for your kind review and the helpful critique. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I remember reading this story, I guess I must've missed this post. I am glad you reposted so I could catch it. It was a great story. Thank you again.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
    Thanks for the nice words and the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
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Wow! Funny I have not seen this before. Kind of funny but of course STRANGE, hehe. I am not a kid and it scared me a bit too hehe. Thanks for sharing with us again.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
    Thanks so much. It's a post from a couple of years ago. Thank you for the kind feedback. Gretchen
Comment from prettybluebirds
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Excellent. This is quite a story. Did you win the contest with this? If not, you should have. this is a truly unique and well written story. Good work

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
    No win, but I sure had fun writing it. Thank you so much for your nice words. Gretchen
Comment from Titanx9
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This is very good writing and quite suspenseful; however, the part that describes Harry's and Joe's entry into the tent could be a bit more descriptive to rev up the suspense bit more. It's an enjoyable read. I wish you luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
    I was under word count restraints. I didn't win, but it was a fun prompt to write. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen