The Killer
Free Verse - Story Poem44 total reviews
Comment from wordsareus
Your story in a poem had me on the edge of my seat. I never would have guessed it was a mosquito. What a surprise ending! Simply wonderful!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Your story in a poem had me on the edge of my seat. I never would have guessed it was a mosquito. What a surprise ending! Simply wonderful!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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LOL I gotcha eh Diane? Just a little fun for a change of pace.
Comment from lakeport
The killer, indeed a suspenseful thriller, that's a dramatic, suspenseful story with a humorous end,I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Hugs!lakeport.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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The killer, indeed a suspenseful thriller, that's a dramatic, suspenseful story with a humorous end,I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Hugs!lakeport.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Oh than you so much Erich for a wonderful review and all the stars.
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your welcome Pami!!!!!!!!!
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Smile
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keep smiling!!!
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Okay guy.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend I enjoyed the fun element to this poem you built the scene so well and then bang lol well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend I enjoyed the fun element to this poem you built the scene so well and then bang lol well done regards Jill
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much Jill. It was fun to write too.
Comment from G.B. Smith
OH MY Sweet P
You little dickens you. I was so sure you were nailing a normal sized assailant. I have to admit that I have seen mosquito's that were the size of a B-52 up in Alaska. Very, very clever girl
Bear
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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OH MY Sweet P
You little dickens you. I was so sure you were nailing a normal sized assailant. I have to admit that I have seen mosquito's that were the size of a B-52 up in Alaska. Very, very clever girl
Bear
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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A B-52??? God I'd be flying right back outta there fast. Heheh. Thanks Bear for an excellent review of this one.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!! I am right there with this city girl. I happen to be allergic to mosquitos so rarely go outside in the summer because of it. I wish they were all dead.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Oh my!! I am right there with this city girl. I happen to be allergic to mosquitos so rarely go outside in the summer because of it. I wish they were all dead.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Me too Barb. They are awful. Leave it to her, she'll get them.
Comment from bayoupoet
One
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Two
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BANG!
Her arm slammed
down on top of the
biggest mosquito
ever with a
flyswatter.
This city girl would suffer no more!
You really had me going For a while, Gungalo!
sandra
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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One
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Two
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BANG!
Her arm slammed
down on top of the
biggest mosquito
ever with a
flyswatter.
This city girl would suffer no more!
You really had me going For a while, Gungalo!
sandra
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I did Sandra? LOL thanks for a great review girl.
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You are very welcome! Yes you did, Gungalo!
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LOL girl.
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Yeah!
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LOL girl. We rock!!!
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Yeah!
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
Oh my god.... you devilish fiend!!!!! I mean what on earth has that Mossy ever done to you, you brutal beast, silent slayer and mosquito murderer!!!!!!!! Lol I expect a twist in this one and was wondering what it was building to but I didn't expect this!!!! Ha ha ha!!! Edge of seat thriller that has you falling off your chair as you laugh :) Superb six star rating poem if only I could give!!!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Oh my god.... you devilish fiend!!!!! I mean what on earth has that Mossy ever done to you, you brutal beast, silent slayer and mosquito murderer!!!!!!!! Lol I expect a twist in this one and was wondering what it was building to but I didn't expect this!!!! Ha ha ha!!! Edge of seat thriller that has you falling off your chair as you laugh :) Superb six star rating poem if only I could give!!!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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LOL Dale, I gotcha eh? Seems to me that mossy deserved killing. LOL thanks so much guy.
Comment from Jaq Cee
LOL... well that's a relief G. I thought we were getting an insight into the darker you. :) Brilliant build up girlie and I didn't expect the mosquito at all. Fab story/poem. :) Jaq x
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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LOL... well that's a relief G. I thought we were getting an insight into the darker you. :) Brilliant build up girlie and I didn't expect the mosquito at all. Fab story/poem. :) Jaq x
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Great review JC and a surprise at the end eh?
Comment from robina1978
You built it up slowly and with certainty. Thrilling indeed. She planned the kill in advance, You told it all. And did she kill a mosquito then? LOL
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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You built it up slowly and with certainty. Thrilling indeed. She planned the kill in advance, You told it all. And did she kill a mosquito then? LOL
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Yep she did Ine. Murderer that she is. LOL
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welcome and yes she is:)
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi G,
you trickster!!! You sucked me in all the way... Got me a beauty. I was thinking... Hope Jade doesn't read this and get some ideas... Just a great story with a great twist... snorter!!!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi G,
you trickster!!! You sucked me in all the way... Got me a beauty. I was thinking... Hope Jade doesn't read this and get some ideas... Just a great story with a great twist... snorter!!!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thanks JJ, LOL. Glad you got caught I am. Hehehe.
