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Comment from Callyope
Well after reading this, I realize that I'm going to need all the luck in the world if this is my competition. This is just gorgeous, superbly written and invokes a multitude of emotion! Very well done, and the format seems impossible, which makes it that much more brilliant...
How neat that we both interpreted this photo in similar ways!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
Well after reading this, I realize that I'm going to need all the luck in the world if this is my competition. This is just gorgeous, superbly written and invokes a multitude of emotion! Very well done, and the format seems impossible, which makes it that much more brilliant...
How neat that we both interpreted this photo in similar ways!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thanks Callyope. That expressive artwork leads in that direction.
Comment from 9999pool
We will lament each day until the desolation, pollution and destruction stop.
We cannot go on ignoring the harm on preservation and conservation.
We must act now and show we care about His creations and mankind.
Excellent write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie. Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
We will lament each day until the desolation, pollution and destruction stop.
We cannot go on ignoring the harm on preservation and conservation.
We must act now and show we care about His creations and mankind.
Excellent write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie. Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thanks Ritchie, I appreciate your exuberant enthusiasm.
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Tom,
This wrtie got a chance to win. mark my word. usually my prediction comes true - call it uncanny.
The theme had universal appeal and told in a very tender and loving way and asking - can we change our mindset(?).
My exuberant enthusiasm comes from your story, smiles.
Cheerio, your friend, Ritchie.
Comment from NicciFaye
I've seen this picture so many times with the creative poems that have crossed my sight. You've added to this collection. I personally like the
Blue Planet filled with open scars,
Deprivation.
Our fish are full of mercury,
Resources are not luxury.
Need much more consideration!
OH Creation!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
I've seen this picture so many times with the creative poems that have crossed my sight. You've added to this collection. I personally like the
Blue Planet filled with open scars,
Deprivation.
Our fish are full of mercury,
Resources are not luxury.
Need much more consideration!
OH Creation!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Thank you Nicci. Yes, this is about the third contest with this picture connected.
Comment from Darkhorse555
so much colour in this creation it all needs mans care rather than destruction for his own greed I really enjoyed this piece
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
so much colour in this creation it all needs mans care rather than destruction for his own greed I really enjoyed this piece
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thank you Darkhorse.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a wonderful contest entry, Treischel, very imaginative. I looked at this one, and thought it gave a person a great idea for a creation. You have written it so well. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
This is a wonderful contest entry, Treischel, very imaginative. I looked at this one, and thought it gave a person a great idea for a creation. You have written it so well. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thank you Sandra. Are you going to submit one.
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I have reserved a spot, I will have to see what time I have. We move to England next week and then have lots of decorating and gardening to do. At our ages, it takes a little longer!! LOL xx
Comment from mshirachot
Good start at the octogram style in the first stanza, but in the second one instead of four counts you've got five on two of the lines. I figured you would go back and fix them...or else explain your choice in your author's notes, so I did not take off. It is otherwise a "creative" poem!
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings to you!
Marsha
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
Good start at the octogram style in the first stanza, but in the second one instead of four counts you've got five on two of the lines. I figured you would go back and fix them...or else explain your choice in your author's notes, so I did not take off. It is otherwise a "creative" poem!
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings to you!
Marsha
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thank you Marsha. You must mauve read an earlier version. I've fixed that now.
Comment from Selina Stambi
You have such a grand, sweeping, majestic way with words, Treischel.
It's such an abominable deprivation that I have neglected to fan you!
I really admire your style. :)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
You have such a grand, sweeping, majestic way with words, Treischel.
It's such an abominable deprivation that I have neglected to fan you!
I really admire your style. :)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thank you reachingfortestars I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from steevie
You are so correct about what we are doing to this planet!
If God ran the earth as though we were tenants and He was the landlord, we would have been evicted a long time ago!
And yet He gives us time to try and sort out what we've done the precious earth, but unlikely we will rise to the challenge, so He will soon step in and correct our error.
super write, T
steve
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
You are so correct about what we are doing to this planet!
If God ran the earth as though we were tenants and He was the landlord, we would have been evicted a long time ago!
And yet He gives us time to try and sort out what we've done the precious earth, but unlikely we will rise to the challenge, so He will soon step in and correct our error.
super write, T
steve
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thank you very much steevue. I think you ate right.
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you're welcome
steve
Comment from Lise Deangelo
I love this octogram and the theme. I'm tired, but I'm sure I count 5 syllables in line 2 and 4 of 2nd stanza. Easy fix. Thanks so much for sharing and best wishes for the contest :) Lise
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
I love this octogram and the theme. I'm tired, but I'm sure I count 5 syllables in line 2 and 4 of 2nd stanza. Easy fix. Thanks so much for sharing and best wishes for the contest :) Lise
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thanks Lise. Your right. Fixed.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the way we are desecrating God's creation by our insensitivity to the harm we are doing to it. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the way we are desecrating God's creation by our insensitivity to the harm we are doing to it. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Thank you very much, sweetwoodjax.