Comment from L. Sherman

Excellent

Nice and simple free verse. A quick read with great rhyme between neck/peck. Really gave the poem a good pace and flow. It's a stunning picture of what should be rather plain bird, but the color in his feathers is really spectacular. Love the line describing them. Eps, 'mottled' - awesome word.

 Comment Written 25-May-2013

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reply by the author on 27-May-2013

Thanks Lisa. Nice detailed review. I really appreciate it.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

Enjoyed your free verse of the the wild turkey. I'm amazed at the
beauty of this species. Not at all like the turkeys we see being raised
for food. This bird has such a true natural beauty which you skillfully captured
in your lens. Smiles, Robin :)

 Comment Written 24-May-2013

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reply by the author on 24-May-2013

Thank you Robin. Yes, they are quite magnificent in the wild.

Comment from Nottoway

Excellent

Descriptive and humorous!. Brings the turkey to life and takes the reader through its actions!.

I do admire your creative way and thanks for really great posts that create both thought and sometimes bring laughter.

 Comment Written 24-May-2013

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reply by the author on 24-May-2013

Thank you Nottoway. I try to mix it up a bit. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

This is a beautiful bird; you are fortunate to have spotted one so near;
Nice alliteration--(I particularly like "bronze and brown") incorporated with good audio imagery richly complement the photograph

 Comment Written 24-May-2013

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reply by the author on 24-May-2013

Thank you Capricorn. The are plentiful around here.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

This is excellent free verse. It has rhythm and a non-conventional structure. It has no rhyme at the end of sentences. It has excellent imagery. The picture perfectly illustrates the poem.

 Comment Written 24-May-2013

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reply by the author on 24-May-2013

Thank you Preston.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Nicely penned Tom. I have some wild turkey's up at my cottage and the males always seem to be strutting their stuff.:D

I liked this one - great sensory appeal with a bit of gobble gobble humor too:D
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 23-May-2013

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reply by the author on 23-May-2013

Thank you Maureen. There seem to be more around lately.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Your turkey is easy to visualize.
Good use of rhyme in lines 3 $ 4.
I especially like how you use "gobble" two different ways.
A perfect picture chosen.
Kids should love this poem. RodG

 Comment Written 23-May-2013

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reply by the author on 23-May-2013

Thank you Rod. I am pleased.

Comment from trimple

Excellent

Wow you have these things running about your home town!
Great picture Tom.

the title needs a little adjusting I think Tom, spag in the title reads Trukey Trot.

I read this allowed a couple times, and felt that the line..

"The turkey trotted across the park" would perhaps read better as..
"The turkey "trots" across the park"

tis your poem, who am I! but for me trots sounded better :)
Fun to read and review
kind regards
tracey

 Comment Written 23-May-2013

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reply by the author on 23-May-2013

Thanks Tracey. I fixed the title and took your suggestion. Thanks for the suggestion. Yes, they are quite plentiful.

Comment from mikenbel

Excellent

I did not know that is how you distinguish the male! What a fun and playful poem you wrote, somewhat out of character for you!

 Comment Written 23-May-2013

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reply by the author on 23-May-2013

Thanks mikenbel. I never know what my Muse will come up with.

Comment from 4tun81

Excellent

This has great imagery and alliteration. The title shows signs of a malady I have. I call it manual dyslexia. LOL
Thanks for posting!

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 Comment Written 23-May-2013

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reply by the author on 23-May-2013

Thanks 4tun81. I fixed it. Yup, happens too frequently.