My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Who do you think you are?"All of my poems of release.
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Comment from mikenbel
What a very well written piece. I thought the rhyme structure flowed very well. The language use was strong...interesting...and variegated.
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What a very well written piece. I thought the rhyme structure flowed very well. The language use was strong...interesting...and variegated.
Comment Written 07-May-2013
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Thank you so much for another great review. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
someday life will return
to you
the hurt you took
too far
And this WILL happen, and they'll grow old all alone, miserable curs with not even a jar of hearts, as those stolen ones return to their owners as they find REAL love with someone worthy of their affection.
Bravo! Good write!
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someday life will return
to you
the hurt you took
too far
And this WILL happen, and they'll grow old all alone, miserable curs with not even a jar of hearts, as those stolen ones return to their owners as they find REAL love with someone worthy of their affection.
Bravo! Good write!
Comment Written 07-May-2013
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Thank you so very much Phyllis. Much appreciated. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written this is a problem that is spreading due to the modern society mind you I met Erick on line but it wasn't a dating site one day I will tell everybody how it happened I am indeed one of the lucky ones regards Jill
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Hello my friend this is well written this is a problem that is spreading due to the modern society mind you I met Erick on line but it wasn't a dating site one day I will tell everybody how it happened I am indeed one of the lucky ones regards Jill
Comment Written 07-May-2013
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Glad to hear that Jill, we all deserve to find that special person. Thanks for your review :) Jaq xx
Comment from NicciFaye
This was very deep. I can't say I experienced this online but in life generally. So eye opening and truthful. The sad thing about being a human with a heart is that all yearn to be loved....
Lovely poem
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This was very deep. I can't say I experienced this online but in life generally. So eye opening and truthful. The sad thing about being a human with a heart is that all yearn to be loved....
Lovely poem
Comment Written 07-May-2013
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Thanks so much Nicci for your fab review xx
Comment from Galactia
This is a great poem, Have not encounter a sick person from this site. Thank GOD. it's pretty crazy to think, on a poetry site. Good to be aware and be cautious though.
thanks for the heads up, lovely poem.
regards
Tia
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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This is a great poem, Have not encounter a sick person from this site. Thank GOD. it's pretty crazy to think, on a poetry site. Good to be aware and be cautious though.
thanks for the heads up, lovely poem.
regards
Tia
Comment Written 07-May-2013
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Tia they are all over. Thanks for the review xx
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, jaq cee, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the empty promises made by internet lovers. i enjoyed reading this one
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this is very well written, jaq cee, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the empty promises made by internet lovers. i enjoyed reading this one
Comment Written 07-May-2013
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Thanks SWJ I guess we all fall for sweet words when we are looking for love xxx
Comment from closetpoetjester
Ah yes, the predator. I can say I've encountered a few of those in my time here mate and its not long before you can see through the fascade. I think perhaps it takes longer for women to be unfooled than men in the same situation is because women want so hard to believe it, they tend to ignore all the warning signs. Well, your poem is eloquently scathing and I admire your pluck! We live and learn JC. This was perfect in its execution of "I know who the FUCK and WHAT the FUCK you are now...and I'm walking away!".
Can't say I disagree with a single word of this and I'm sure many relate, including me. Thankyou for sharing your hurt and humiliation but for inspiring others not to take the same road. There are WAY too many sleeze bags out there with just the right pitched verse to knock us for six.
I must go read your other one. I'm thinking about writing something similar. This is most deserving of a sixer for your tenacity of character and deft skill with the virtual pen. I'm on your page girlie. Start a club. LOL
Cheers P xx
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Ah yes, the predator. I can say I've encountered a few of those in my time here mate and its not long before you can see through the fascade. I think perhaps it takes longer for women to be unfooled than men in the same situation is because women want so hard to believe it, they tend to ignore all the warning signs. Well, your poem is eloquently scathing and I admire your pluck! We live and learn JC. This was perfect in its execution of "I know who the FUCK and WHAT the FUCK you are now...and I'm walking away!".
Can't say I disagree with a single word of this and I'm sure many relate, including me. Thankyou for sharing your hurt and humiliation but for inspiring others not to take the same road. There are WAY too many sleeze bags out there with just the right pitched verse to knock us for six.
I must go read your other one. I'm thinking about writing something similar. This is most deserving of a sixer for your tenacity of character and deft skill with the virtual pen. I'm on your page girlie. Start a club. LOL
Cheers P xx
Comment Written 06-May-2013
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Women 'mostly' want a 'happy ever after'. An escape from whatever pens them in. Men however 'mostly' want a quick fix to a sexual occurrence. Not all men tho' I hasten to add. There are some lovely one's on here also. Thanks for a cracking review girlie. Jaq xx
Comment from reconciled
Geez I don't know Jaq...you might be being kind a hard on the guy...I would imagine flocks of woman...would be hard to contend with...I mean trust me when I tell you...just one pissed off woman can cripple a man....-smile- Okay...seriously....I never was on the computer till I joined...this is where I learned how to type...-wink- But...I have heard some horror stories...but...I've heard and know of many more...happy endings. Very sorry you had a bad experience...Alright ,love you Michael
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Geez I don't know Jaq...you might be being kind a hard on the guy...I would imagine flocks of woman...would be hard to contend with...I mean trust me when I tell you...just one pissed off woman can cripple a man....-smile- Okay...seriously....I never was on the computer till I joined...this is where I learned how to type...-wink- But...I have heard some horror stories...but...I've heard and know of many more...happy endings. Very sorry you had a bad experience...Alright ,love you Michael
Comment Written 06-May-2013
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Lmao Michael you seem to manage the flocks of adoring women well ;-)... Thanks for the great review xc
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Boy.....I wish...lmbo-
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:) lmao, you're one of the good guys, love n hugs, Jaq xxx
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yea yea..."one of the good guy's"....you, ..you mean...one of the thick black rimmed glasses, bright white pocket protected, cow licked goofusess.....K...lol....ya know, I been thinkin' about this flock thing...and I find it amazing that the only hot meal I seem to get these days...is when one the "flock" writes a poem about somthin' they've whipped up the night before....-headscratch- Anyway food for thought...lmbo- love you-
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LMBO too, if I had any :).
Catch ya later mister, love n hugs to you and Linda :) xxx
Comment from Zinnia48
What a great description of a predator. I recognized this guy from the first couple of lines. I am myself a spiritual "seeker" and cannot count how many of these bozos exist in faith communities. I humbly add that if I had been smarter and more discerning I wouldn't have been reeled in. The 6 stars initially was for the boldness of your description. But also--it's written really, really well! Your images are dynamic and to the point. You go, Girlfriend! Caroline
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What a great description of a predator. I recognized this guy from the first couple of lines. I am myself a spiritual "seeker" and cannot count how many of these bozos exist in faith communities. I humbly add that if I had been smarter and more discerning I wouldn't have been reeled in. The 6 stars initially was for the boldness of your description. But also--it's written really, really well! Your images are dynamic and to the point. You go, Girlfriend! Caroline
Comment Written 06-May-2013
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Thank you so much for your great review and wonderful rating Zinnia. I agree they are in all walks of life and tend to be charismatic and easy to fall for. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Jaq,
sad , but a reality of today's issues concerning on-line conery...susceptible Hearts being taken for a ride. I'm truly glad you have chosen such an issue to champion....these Predators should be tattooed on their fore-heads... You have written a powerful message and it sounds like you are vested into doing something positive to bring the awareness of such acts....bravo For that Jaq...fight The good fight. Great poem written passionately with heaps of heart, really enjoyed the read.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
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Hi Jaq,
sad , but a reality of today's issues concerning on-line conery...susceptible Hearts being taken for a ride. I'm truly glad you have chosen such an issue to champion....these Predators should be tattooed on their fore-heads... You have written a powerful message and it sounds like you are vested into doing something positive to bring the awareness of such acts....bravo For that Jaq...fight The good fight. Great poem written passionately with heaps of heart, really enjoyed the read.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 06-May-2013
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Cheers James
I've been bitten a couple of times, but there will never be a 3rd. If you have a loving heart and a sad story it is easy to fall for the charsima and false fondness of some. :) Jaq xx
