My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Charismatic man-child"All of my poems of release.
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Comment from closetpoetjester
Yep this sounds like the smooth talker fooling a few with his cleverly worded wiles.
Usually its the smooth talkers you should stay wary of. Most of the time they've worked out what they need to say to a women to bring on a gammut of adoration. I'm sure most ladies have fallen for a smooth talker or two. Well rhymed throughout JC and this lamented in being used up and treated like one of the crowd inspite of feeling like the only one in the room at the time. This should serve as a warning to all those fools right? LOL Last stanza finishes it off nicely and I liked the way it questioned the author about what they would do. Hopefully not fall back into the same cycle again. Once a smooth talker, always a smooth talker I'm afraid. Been there, had that, a couple of times. Words can be very beautiful and beguiling, but they are arranged with sleight of hand and deft skill...
Choice write. Cheers P x
PS Think I'm ALL caught up now...LOL Chow for a bit...Great writing JC. Emotionally charged! Well penned.
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Yep this sounds like the smooth talker fooling a few with his cleverly worded wiles.
Usually its the smooth talkers you should stay wary of. Most of the time they've worked out what they need to say to a women to bring on a gammut of adoration. I'm sure most ladies have fallen for a smooth talker or two. Well rhymed throughout JC and this lamented in being used up and treated like one of the crowd inspite of feeling like the only one in the room at the time. This should serve as a warning to all those fools right? LOL Last stanza finishes it off nicely and I liked the way it questioned the author about what they would do. Hopefully not fall back into the same cycle again. Once a smooth talker, always a smooth talker I'm afraid. Been there, had that, a couple of times. Words can be very beautiful and beguiling, but they are arranged with sleight of hand and deft skill...
Choice write. Cheers P x
PS Think I'm ALL caught up now...LOL Chow for a bit...Great writing JC. Emotionally charged! Well penned.
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Thanks Pip, I seem to fall for the words every time. Never learning, until now. I'm done with it tho'. I WILL learn. LMAO. It sounds good when I say it anyway. Thanks for this Pip, your reviews are open, honest and fun. Now to read the other 5 :) xxxx
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LOL Yep, I've been a sucker for the words too at times. But they are getting easier to see through. We live and learn for sure.
hang in there mate.
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I am Pip. I'm worth more. :) xxxx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written my friend a sad story that is sometimes true women just fall for the wrong type of guys well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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This is well written my friend a sad story that is sometimes true women just fall for the wrong type of guys well done regards Jill
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thanks once again for your kind review my friend, :) Jaq x
Comment from 9999pool
He loves me, and he loves me not. many will pluck the petals of a bloom and repeat this question. Finally the answer came with the last petal. Not convinced, we picked another bloom and then started all over again. Then the answer came out different. Which one do we want to believe?
The answer lies in our heart. Others who played with our tender hearts will know one day about karma (if it exist! LOL).
Good write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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He loves me, and he loves me not. many will pluck the petals of a bloom and repeat this question. Finally the answer came with the last petal. Not convinced, we picked another bloom and then started all over again. Then the answer came out different. Which one do we want to believe?
The answer lies in our heart. Others who played with our tender hearts will know one day about karma (if it exist! LOL).
Good write and well penned.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thanks Ritchie and I'm sure Karma exists. :-) JAq x
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Glad you believe Karma exist and so karma will return to get them hopefully, LOL. Cheerio, Ritchie :))).
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One day Ritchie. I live in hope too lol :) xx
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Hi Jaq,
That day had arrived. For all the pain and suffering highlighted in th epoem, you might want to consider contributing a chapter to our Multi-author book "We will survive!" .
This is a multi-author book entitled â??We will survive!â?? - shared and written by FanStorians to provide a glimmer of hope and encouragement for those who are at the cross-roads of suffering in pain or mental anguish either directly or indirectly from terminal illnesses, mental torture, disabilities or conflicts, etc . Life is a journey of thorns not roses at times.
Everyone is welcome to contribute a chapter as a tribute to a family member or friend whom we care or even someone we hardly know.
To add a chapter, please click on the multi-author book â??We will survive!â?? and then â??Add chapterâ?? at the top right hand side. Post your writing as usual to get reviews. Do put in the authorâ??s note if you want to add in a dedication to someone or something (e.g. Mother earth).
The poem can be in any format and there are no rules. Thank you for your support.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
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Is it ok to pm you after my work please? Jaq xxx
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Sure thing. Cheers, Ritchie.
Comment from reconciled
Hi Jaq..... he has a throng? Man...hmm... Anyway, Marvelous write of the dastardly deeds of some dude and the lies that he feeds the throng of woman he leads astray. hmm... okay... love you Michael
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Hi Jaq..... he has a throng? Man...hmm... Anyway, Marvelous write of the dastardly deeds of some dude and the lies that he feeds the throng of woman he leads astray. hmm... okay... love you Michael
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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LMAO Michael you always make me smile my friend. It was a wee while ago now. All's good these days. :) Love ya, Jaq xxx
Comment from J. Dark
This is brilliant poetry, Jaq, and you cleverly tell the story of a lothario that women should avoid at all costs. I love the strength and the sense of dignity within the words. Awesome rhyme and rhythm make this read wonderfully smoothly. Great complementary artwork too.
Kindest of och aye the nu regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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This is brilliant poetry, Jaq, and you cleverly tell the story of a lothario that women should avoid at all costs. I love the strength and the sense of dignity within the words. Awesome rhyme and rhythm make this read wonderfully smoothly. Great complementary artwork too.
Kindest of och aye the nu regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Och aye the noo there Mrs Dark :) Thank you for another wonderful review. Much love and hugs, Jaq xxx
Comment from lorijean
A great poem telling of a lost love very well written it flows off the page and is very easy to read, well done .. thank you for sharing....
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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A great poem telling of a lost love very well written it flows off the page and is very easy to read, well done .. thank you for sharing....
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thanks once again lorijean for your lovely review. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Rondeno
Everything about this poem is perfect. I love the "virtual wall" of self-preservation. The rhyme is fine, the meter spot-on and the vocabulary varied, but always appropriate. The art work is to die for!
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Everything about this poem is perfect. I love the "virtual wall" of self-preservation. The rhyme is fine, the meter spot-on and the vocabulary varied, but always appropriate. The art work is to die for!
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you so much, I appreciate your words, as you know. :) Love n hugs Jacquie xxx
Comment from Indie Skreet
excellent Jaq - perfect I would say ........... fucking bastard I would also say if I was allowed to ... oops, too late lol luv ya, Indie xx
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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excellent Jaq - perfect I would say ........... fucking bastard I would also say if I was allowed to ... oops, too late lol luv ya, Indie xx
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Indieeeeeeeee lmao. Hello honey. Think I may have used that same phrase a time or two in my life. :) Love ya, Jaq xxxx
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lol - I soooooooo rarely swear, but just couldn't help myself :) xx
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:) hahahahahaha xxxx
