Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Yes we can all feel lost but its up to us to find our new destination. No one can do it for us and I saw you pick yourself up and set off with your new assertive self and it sounds very much like you are heading in the right direction.
At least it sounds good in theory...haha
Good luck with the practical and I loved the closer. Clever rhymes and I loved the short punchy format.
Cheers P
x

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

I am going in the right direction now thanks Pip ;-) xxx

Comment from reconciled

Excellent

Jaq?....is that you Jaq?... wow so good to see ...you....I thought I was here all alone.....-bigsmile- Wonderful poem....love you and your style Michael

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

lmao -smiling widely- thanks once again Michael, you're a wee gem. Much love Jaq xx

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent use of enjambment to contribute to the smooth flow of your poem
good use of rhyme
evocative expression of genuine emotion
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

Cheers Brooke, as always you give a spot on review. :) Jaq xx

Comment from jppoet

Excellent

BRAVO, ANOTHER POETICAL TRIUMPH, STRAIGHT FROM THE HEART
AS WAS THE OTHER ONE I JUST REVIEWED. CONGRATS ALSO ON YOUR HIGH #81 RANKING. BLESSINGS, JOHN

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Once again thank you so much. I'm off to sleep now but will look in on you tomorrow xx

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hi there,

I loved this little poem. It's little but filled with big thoughts. I especially enjoyed your use of big words like - inclination, destination, transition, juxtaposition, intention, intervention, inspiration, and creation. The picture helps us feel the mood.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Thank you so much Joy. Sometimes you just have to write down how you feel at that exact minute. :) Jaq xxx

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

lovely poem, to get on that paralleled road which leads to the right path-of fulfilling your dreams instead off the other mis-fortunate path.

great job

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Thanks again Tia I always appreciate your reviews :) Jaq xx

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

A fast paced jaunt with excellent word choices and blends that make the read a truly unique journey. Rhyme is not forced and makes good sense.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Thank you so much GracieAnn xx

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Very expressive and well penned free verse with tight phrasing, polished style ad fine random, well-timed rhymes.

A sad state to be in, but perhaps a chrysalis state awaiting transformation...I hope so. Longing for the Divine... brings it...

Interesting closing-

need Divine
intervention
where to find
the inspiration
has to be my
own creation

As the divine lives within, it can be both divine intervention and your won creation, methinks...

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Awww rd thank you so very much for your wonderful review my friend. It means the world xx

reply by rama devi on 17-Apr-2013

Huge hugs and healing thoughts to you,d ear Jaq. Blessings, rd

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

That is so kind of you rd. You're a special person and friend xxx

reply by rama devi on 17-Apr-2013

Aw, that's sweet of you to say. Big hugs and healing thoughts...rd

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

I must admit to hiccupping on 'juxtaposition' which is a superb word, but interrupted the flow just a little. Don't change though - it is great! best Indie xx

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Lol Indie, it was there for a reason so but I can see where it might be a stumbling block. :). Cheers for always being there, love n hugs, Jaq xx

reply by Indie Skreet on 17-Apr-2013

a good reason Jaq, that's why i said 'not' to change it! This one is a stunner too - you just get better :) xx

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Thanks Indie, I always appreciate your input. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written my friend with good strong words used and rhyming throughout well done it does have the feel of a person lost and on a journey regards Jill

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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Thanks Jill, sometimes I really feel this way about my life and poetry. :) Jaq xx