Ghosts of the Canyon
Memories of a Canyon Too Wide8 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
Great work! The prose and the poem blended in so well I thought I was reading a simple love story full of wants and needs and those moments of could have been.
The canyon was beautifully painted with a dash of white moonlight.
Excellent write and the emotions and feelings were so real, it could have been a true story out on a date in many ways than one.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Great work! The prose and the poem blended in so well I thought I was reading a simple love story full of wants and needs and those moments of could have been.
The canyon was beautifully painted with a dash of white moonlight.
Excellent write and the emotions and feelings were so real, it could have been a true story out on a date in many ways than one.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Thanks for the great review, Ritchie! I am grateful for the kind words and understanding of Ghosts. Your words mean a lot to me and are very, very encouraging.
Gratefully,
VK
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Welcome VK. It is definitely a good write and thanks for sharing.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from Slythytove2
Too many rules for me, and for what- ? Good thing you told us what smudging was, I thought it might have been a botched "rub out". Don't know whether you did a good job or not since I'm not familiar with this type of poetry.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Too many rules for me, and for what- ? Good thing you told us what smudging was, I thought it might have been a botched "rub out". Don't know whether you did a good job or not since I'm not familiar with this type of poetry.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thanks for the read and review. You made me laugh about the rules--because it's true. I'm not even sure who won! Have a great night. I appreciate the stars!
vkmack
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, vkmack, you did an excellent job writing this haibun poem about the differences that tore you apart, i never heard of smudging before. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, vkmack, you did an excellent job writing this haibun poem about the differences that tore you apart, i never heard of smudging before. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thanks SWJ. I appreciate the read and the review. You are kind, and I am grateful for your time and the compliments. And thanks, too, for all those stars! I was afraid I had better explain smudging! lol Glad I did.
VK
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet shares experiences of reflections, and he states clearly how are the Ghosts of the Canyon, cultural or traditional practices referred to well about removal of the dark or bad effects of the ghosts, this is a nice metaphysical poem, I liked. 67/124
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Poet shares experiences of reflections, and he states clearly how are the Ghosts of the Canyon, cultural or traditional practices referred to well about removal of the dark or bad effects of the ghosts, this is a nice metaphysical poem, I liked. 67/124
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thanks again, Alcreator. You are on the ball tonight and helping me out a lot! Wow. I am grateful for your kind reviews and that you like my work. Glad Ghosts worked for you.
VK
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a very good prose and poem entry. You did great with both haiku and prose. Some don't seem to know what prose means. Good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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This is a very good prose and poem entry. You did great with both haiku and prose. Some don't seem to know what prose means. Good luck.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, TAB. I am so happy that you liked Ghosts. You are so kind, and I embrace those compliments! Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Gratefully,
VK
Comment from words
This is so beautifully told. I wish I had the six left that it deserves. You have used this complex form masterfully.
Love the repeat of ... not so much ... it is very effective.
The last line is perfect:Maybe we should have stayed in the canyon. Maybe we just should have smudged our hearts.
Such a gentle and sad poem.
Bravo!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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This is so beautifully told. I wish I had the six left that it deserves. You have used this complex form masterfully.
Love the repeat of ... not so much ... it is very effective.
The last line is perfect:Maybe we should have stayed in the canyon. Maybe we just should have smudged our hearts.
Such a gentle and sad poem.
Bravo!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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You made my life a lot brighter today! Thank you for the fantastic reviewing of my entry in the contest. It is so nice to know that you liked it so much, and I definitely accept that virtual sixth star. It's as good as the real thing!
Comment from lorijean
A very descriptive poem of lovers, doing what lovers do, written with lots of memories and regrets that it was all lost... very nice...
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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A very descriptive poem of lovers, doing what lovers do, written with lots of memories and regrets that it was all lost... very nice...
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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I am happy to know that you like my contest entry so much, lorijean. Your review is wonderful. Thank you!
Comment from djsaxon
Absolutely love it. Evocative write. Pithy and poignant prose grabs that totally capture the moment. Supported equally well by the two 5-7-5 inserts. I immediately knewwhat 'smudging' was, but was glad that you qualified in your author's notes. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Absolutely love it. Evocative write. Pithy and poignant prose grabs that totally capture the moment. Supported equally well by the two 5-7-5 inserts. I immediately knewwhat 'smudging' was, but was glad that you qualified in your author's notes. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thrilled to find someone out there who knows about smudging! Thanks for the magnificent review, my friend! Wow! I'm blown away. I appreciate your kind words and the comments about the prose being pithy and poignant. Made my week. Wonderful. :)
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Even though I live in the land down under(OZ) I have an affintiy for the Native Americans.Truly good write. I am miserly with my sixpacks. DJ
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Land down under here, too--Texas! lol
Thanks again for the sixer. It is accepted with a grateful heart. Love the boy from OZ--orginal (Peter) and imitation (Hugh). Never got the whole Peter and Liza thing though. hmmmm
Have a great night.
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Liza is as loopy as her mother was! No one has ever worked out why that marriage happened. Peter Allen was patently gay from the get go. Not so Hugh. LOL
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No, Hugh seems to be a bit macho, and I'm fine with that! Loopy Liza? Absolutely. The world does not need a female Judy Garland impersonator, but we have one anyway. lol Not sure what else her purpose in life could be. Ah, when we run the world . . .
Smile.
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Lisa is gonna keep croaking out Caberet until she falls off the perch, bless her talented ass. Hugh rocks, but he should stop making crappy movies.
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Agreed--on all points! LOL
