My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Cradle to the Grave"All of my poems of release.
12 total reviews
Comment from October21
Hi Jackie!
Loved your spiritual piece. It seems many of us have certain paths we wants to take, dreams we aspire to follow, and when we near the end of the road we reflect and wonder why those dreams never came true, and we never got what we wanted. I guess it went against God's plan and all we did have was what was meant to be ours x we need to accept our fate an appreciate that what we have was made for us and its OK that way.
"like a small fish in a giant see"- brilliant!
Amazing work:-) Really worth the six xx
Xx
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Hi Jackie!
Loved your spiritual piece. It seems many of us have certain paths we wants to take, dreams we aspire to follow, and when we near the end of the road we reflect and wonder why those dreams never came true, and we never got what we wanted. I guess it went against God's plan and all we did have was what was meant to be ours x we need to accept our fate an appreciate that what we have was made for us and its OK that way.
"like a small fish in a giant see"- brilliant!
Amazing work:-) Really worth the six xx
Xx
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Aww many thanks Shenel. You:re a wee gem xxxx ;) Jaq
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No worries my friend:-)
Hugs and kisses,
Shenel xx
Comment from Rondeno
Very, very nice. You use a loose verse form which is perfect for the doubtful, pondering tone of the poem. As a reviewer I, for one, can see a real growth in your sureness and self-belief.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Very, very nice. You use a loose verse form which is perfect for the doubtful, pondering tone of the poem. As a reviewer I, for one, can see a real growth in your sureness and self-belief.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Awww Meehal you are a darling. Thank you so much for your fantastic review. :) Jacqui xxx
Comment from adewpearl
good use of occasional rhyme
excellent use of enjambment to create flow
this is bound to resonate with many readers who also realize all their life's plans haven't fallen into place
a strong spiritual one
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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good use of occasional rhyme
excellent use of enjambment to create flow
this is bound to resonate with many readers who also realize all their life's plans haven't fallen into place
a strong spiritual one
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Brooke once again thanks for a lovely and in-depth review. Always a pleasure; :) Jaq x
Comment from GarthL
There's many times in life when it all seems so confusing and no answers can be found that satisfy, no goals found that will elevate. I can feel the angst Jaq and pray you'll find the spark that will lift you out of the mire. You're a beautiful woman who will surely find the love that will relieve all. Well written outpouring from your heart mate, staystrong, Garth
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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There's many times in life when it all seems so confusing and no answers can be found that satisfy, no goals found that will elevate. I can feel the angst Jaq and pray you'll find the spark that will lift you out of the mire. You're a beautiful woman who will surely find the love that will relieve all. Well written outpouring from your heart mate, staystrong, Garth
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much Garth, some days it seems possible, others not so. Your reviews are always appreciated. PeaceNLove Jaq xx
Comment from teafor2
Jaq Cee--What a fast smooth free flowing teaching of a
bible lesson via angst and humble queries and request
by speaker. This all done while using excellent poetics:
Alliterations of F's; T's, S's and W's combine with mas-
culine rhymes along with title and artwork help to get scribe's point across. Consciously undertaken. teafor2
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Jaq Cee--What a fast smooth free flowing teaching of a
bible lesson via angst and humble queries and request
by speaker. This all done while using excellent poetics:
Alliterations of F's; T's, S's and W's combine with mas-
culine rhymes along with title and artwork help to get scribe's point across. Consciously undertaken. teafor2
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much for your in depth and lovely review t. :) Jaq x
Comment from Gungalo
in God's great plan
I must appear
like a small fish
in a great sea
All I want is to
shed some light
from worries please
set me free
Exceptional JC. You really lot it all out and told what it is you want. How wonderful to be able to do that.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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in God's great plan
I must appear
like a small fish
in a great sea
All I want is to
shed some light
from worries please
set me free
Exceptional JC. You really lot it all out and told what it is you want. How wonderful to be able to do that.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Gungalo as always it's appreciated xx
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Comment from Earl of Oxford
Hi, Jaq.
Do you mean 'out OF my reach', or is this some sort of Jock phrase? :-)
I would de-capitalise 'Yet' and maybe delete all capitals and punctuation.
Maybe split last stanza after 'sea'.
Heartfelt message of frustration and maybe isolation - certainly feeling unloved and lonely.
Very sincerely and naturally written.
Most of us feel like this sometimes. At least you have your lovely daughter. You're a sweet lady who deserves more, and I'm sure will find it.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Hi, Jaq.
Do you mean 'out OF my reach', or is this some sort of Jock phrase? :-)
I would de-capitalise 'Yet' and maybe delete all capitals and punctuation.
Maybe split last stanza after 'sea'.
Heartfelt message of frustration and maybe isolation - certainly feeling unloved and lonely.
Very sincerely and naturally written.
Most of us feel like this sometimes. At least you have your lovely daughter. You're a sweet lady who deserves more, and I'm sure will find it.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thanks Ray I'll have a wee look at that. Always appreciate your thoughts and insightful review :) jJaq xx
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No it was 'outwith my reach' I wanted. "outwith (Ë?aÊ?tË?wɪθ) â?? prep ( Scot ) outside; beyond"
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what's with the Scots writing? LOL. I THINK I understand. :-) xx
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Jeezo this site's capabilities are sometimes left wanting. :) Jaq xx
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You could write a haiku using those site symbols and pretend they're Japanese. That should impress Alvin. Haha! xx
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Hahahahaha I will try that one xx
Comment from Galactia
Well written poem, cradle to the grave, yep sad but true, we certainly have our life mapped out in the palm of our handss, but we do make our choices creating our fate.
great poem
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Well written poem, cradle to the grave, yep sad but true, we certainly have our life mapped out in the palm of our handss, but we do make our choices creating our fate.
great poem
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thanks Tia, as always your words are spot on. :) Jaq x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Jaq - this is well penned and laid out. Quite thought provoking, pausing with the reader is powerful.
Excellent work and as always great writing.
Thanks for sharing this one.
Maureen
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Hi Jaq - this is well penned and laid out. Quite thought provoking, pausing with the reader is powerful.
Excellent work and as always great writing.
Thanks for sharing this one.
Maureen
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Maureen as always your words mean a lot :) Jaq xx
Comment from beccabootie123
very well written and formatted. the color palate plays in here as well. we all think this at some point or another. but like I have always told my children. a reason for everyting, everything a reason and it all works out in the end. good writing
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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very well written and formatted. the color palate plays in here as well. we all think this at some point or another. but like I have always told my children. a reason for everyting, everything a reason and it all works out in the end. good writing
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much becca much appeciated :) Jaq x
