My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Adam and Eve."All of my poems of release.
10 total reviews
Comment from Rondeno
Women'll get you in trouble every time. This double nonet is fantastic. You've even added rhymes! Only a poet of real ability and self-assurance would take on (let alone make a triumph of) such a difficult poetic challenge.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Women'll get you in trouble every time. This double nonet is fantastic. You've even added rhymes! Only a poet of real ability and self-assurance would take on (let alone make a triumph of) such a difficult poetic challenge.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Thanks you so much for your very kind words. They are much appreciated indeed. x
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
You told the story of Adam and Eve's fall from grace very well, my friend. I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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You told the story of Adam and Eve's fall from grace very well, my friend. I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for your very kind review. x
Comment from emjaihammond
There is a good story within a poem here and it is also spiritual in nature. I think you did a good job of writing a poem that rhymes and that tells a good story. Nice!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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There is a good story within a poem here and it is also spiritual in nature. I think you did a good job of writing a poem that rhymes and that tells a good story. Nice!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Many thanks for your kind words, much appreciated. x
Comment from teafor2
Author--Although, the title is a biblical/historical give-
away and the artwork captures Eve red-handily plucking the
"forbidden fruit from the tree of knowledge," poet's tell-tale rhymes and allits of "F's"; "O's"; "T's"; "I's," not only seal the deal, but also provide sonorous harmony for this pious entry for the contest. Good luck. teafor2
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Author--Although, the title is a biblical/historical give-
away and the artwork captures Eve red-handily plucking the
"forbidden fruit from the tree of knowledge," poet's tell-tale rhymes and allits of "F's"; "O's"; "T's"; "I's," not only seal the deal, but also provide sonorous harmony for this pious entry for the contest. Good luck. teafor2
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your lovely and detailed review. :).
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Not my fault...:)) t
Comment from RYME4U
Very well done nonets. They cover the entire story. I like that you rhymed these clever lines. The way you have presented this with the art to match is great!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Very well done nonets. They cover the entire story. I like that you rhymed these clever lines. The way you have presented this with the art to match is great!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Many thanks for a glowing review. xx
Comment from Indie Skreet
ooh very clever write which flows well and is altogether enjoyable. Yup, no choking on my words here ...... wish you best of luck for this one, best Indie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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ooh very clever write which flows well and is altogether enjoyable. Yup, no choking on my words here ...... wish you best of luck for this one, best Indie
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Ahhh my muse was with me on this ;-). Thank you so much for you lovely words. xx
Comment from mauial
I like the way you used a nonet in the first part and reversed it in the latter. My one criticism is not related to poem form but to what the actual account in Genesis says. Read it and nowhere will you find it says what the fruit was.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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I like the way you used a nonet in the first part and reversed it in the latter. My one criticism is not related to poem form but to what the actual account in Genesis says. Read it and nowhere will you find it says what the fruit was.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Ok mauial I'll check that out thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Good evening. Exceptionally written and beautifully lamented in a format depicting an hour glass as to highlight the passage of time how we all suffer today, all of born in what appears to be original sin. Great job and cheers.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Good evening. Exceptionally written and beautifully lamented in a format depicting an hour glass as to highlight the passage of time how we all suffer today, all of born in what appears to be original sin. Great job and cheers.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Benjamin, much appreciated :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem describes what was--has always been--human nature, to want the one thing we aren't supposed to have in lieu of the many good things we have free access to.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Your well-written poem describes what was--has always been--human nature, to want the one thing we aren't supposed to have in lieu of the many good things we have free access to.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thanks Janice lovey to hear your thoughts. :)
Comment from lorijean
Still teaches us all those lessons, which we still choose to ignore, written with a little fun to, which is what life is all about....
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Still teaches us all those lessons, which we still choose to ignore, written with a little fun to, which is what life is all about....
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Ahhh Lorijean we will learn at some point... maybe :) Thanks for your review.
