My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Coloured Existence"All of my poems of release.
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Comment from MM lives on :)
So pleased I can give you a six for this well deserved poem and for a contest at that which I indeed wish you the best of luck.. Amazing work crafting this verse it made for a stick to the matter kind of read.. Thank you ever much for sharing.. Best of luck..
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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So pleased I can give you a six for this well deserved poem and for a contest at that which I indeed wish you the best of luck.. Amazing work crafting this verse it made for a stick to the matter kind of read.. Thank you ever much for sharing.. Best of luck..
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, you are amasing :) Jaq xx
Comment from October21
Jaq! BRILLIANT poem! Sometimes we have to not let our pasta influence our presents. I always say how we must value not the past or future but the present, which determines the future and blurs the past. Always live in the now. Quote at the end was just fantastic. We must come to the realisation that we deserve better than what we always get. And if someone wants our heart they must treat us so:-) There are times where we just have to put ourselves first, even for a moment, and realise that we deserve better:-) Great work:-) rhyming was fab!
Xx
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Jaq! BRILLIANT poem! Sometimes we have to not let our pasta influence our presents. I always say how we must value not the past or future but the present, which determines the future and blurs the past. Always live in the now. Quote at the end was just fantastic. We must come to the realisation that we deserve better than what we always get. And if someone wants our heart they must treat us so:-) There are times where we just have to put ourselves first, even for a moment, and realise that we deserve better:-) Great work:-) rhyming was fab!
Xx
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely and insightful review Shenel, as always your words are appreciated. :) Jaq xxx
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You're welcome Jaq! Loved your poem, and the one I just read now:-) All so great:-) xx
Comment from GarthL
Well said Jaq, draw the line in the sand mate and stand strong. I enjoyed your frank admission but even more your new found wisdom. Good occassional and internal rhymes in this free verse. Good luck in the contest! LiveLove'n'Peace and have a Happy Easter, Garth
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Well said Jaq, draw the line in the sand mate and stand strong. I enjoyed your frank admission but even more your new found wisdom. Good occassional and internal rhymes in this free verse. Good luck in the contest! LiveLove'n'Peace and have a Happy Easter, Garth
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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A happy Easter to you too my friend. Thank you for your very kind words and review. God bless you and yours, Jaq xxx
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Cheers!!!
Comment from Keri353
I love the picture, it is perfect with your poem. Most definitely, you need to love yourself. That is the best lesson you could teach your daughter. Somehow we have a tendency to put ourselves last in line. Glad to hear you are raising the bar. You above all are most worth of your own love. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Keri
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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I love the picture, it is perfect with your poem. Most definitely, you need to love yourself. That is the best lesson you could teach your daughter. Somehow we have a tendency to put ourselves last in line. Glad to hear you are raising the bar. You above all are most worth of your own love. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Keri
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Keri, lovely to hear from you. I did make sure my daughter knew her worth. I had to. :) Jaq xxx
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Good for you! Somehow, sadly, a couple of mine missed the point. And your daughter is very lucky :)
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Awwww that's sad. Although I'm sure you will keep trying to instill it in them. All our children are lucky Keri. They have someone that understands :) xxx
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Yep, I still keep trying even though she is almost 40.... lol.
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Lol good for you. It's bed time here so goodnight God bless xxx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written you are right I am glad you are seeing your worth and raising the bar well done on this write regards Jill
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Yes my friend this is well written you are right I am glad you are seeing your worth and raising the bar well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Jill, loving your new name :) xxx
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to increase the flow of your poem
good internal rhyme in part with my heart
also in used me/abused me
effective imagery in the angel fish among the sharks and in being the handle to his knife
good respect/neglect rhyme
you convey a thoughtful message in good poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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excellent use of enjambment to increase the flow of your poem
good internal rhyme in part with my heart
also in used me/abused me
effective imagery in the angel fish among the sharks and in being the handle to his knife
good respect/neglect rhyme
you convey a thoughtful message in good poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Brooke, much appreciated as ever :) Jaq xx
Comment from Supe
This is nicely done and portrays a sad story but with a profound ending. Well done and good luck in the contest. I see you are already an accomplished poet so this is another accomplishment. The picture you chose is perfect.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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This is nicely done and portrays a sad story but with a profound ending. Well done and good luck in the contest. I see you are already an accomplished poet so this is another accomplishment. The picture you chose is perfect.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Supe. You good luck wishes are much appreciated. :) xx
Comment from Alexmi1984
I really loved your poem, Jaq! As far as I'm concerned, this short post has more impact than these thick, bland and overjoyful self-improvement books. Since you rose the bar, I guess I'll have to raise my glass and send you my warmest cheers.
Alex :)
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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I really loved your poem, Jaq! As far as I'm concerned, this short post has more impact than these thick, bland and overjoyful self-improvement books. Since you rose the bar, I guess I'll have to raise my glass and send you my warmest cheers.
Alex :)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much as always Alex xxx
Comment from lorijean
Yes, storm ahead and don't be beaten down, you are worth more than that and it sounds as though at last you are coming back... well written
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Yes, storm ahead and don't be beaten down, you are worth more than that and it sounds as though at last you are coming back... well written
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much lorijean, your words are appreciated :) Jaq xx
Comment from Indie Skreet
well done Jaq for showing your fighting spirit. You definitely deserve to be treated with respect - you are a great woman and I count myself very lucky to have met via f/s. this is powerful - so are you girl, so keep your head high, luv'n'hugs my friend, Indie xx
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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well done Jaq for showing your fighting spirit. You definitely deserve to be treated with respect - you are a great woman and I count myself very lucky to have met via f/s. this is powerful - so are you girl, so keep your head high, luv'n'hugs my friend, Indie xx
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you Indie, your words meana lot. I am so glad to have met you too. I will catch up on my reviewing when I get home tonight, Jaq xx
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have a good day my sweet and make sure no one pisses you off today :D xx
