My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "Original Sin. "All of my poems of release.
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Comment from teafor2
Jaq Cee--As one who loves the written word(s), I am at a
loss to explain how sny human being could do something as
horrific as what you've penned here to another human being.
The age referenced makes it even more sober and morbid.
You are to be commended for the stoic, brave, candid and poetic way you've related your story. IMHO, castration is
too good or humane for the animal that does a deed like
this. I hope by memorializing this, attending counseling/
group therapy, being with family and friends and sharing
this with FanStory, it serves as a cathartic respite.
This, I can't smile away. teafor2
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Jaq Cee--As one who loves the written word(s), I am at a
loss to explain how sny human being could do something as
horrific as what you've penned here to another human being.
The age referenced makes it even more sober and morbid.
You are to be commended for the stoic, brave, candid and poetic way you've related your story. IMHO, castration is
too good or humane for the animal that does a deed like
this. I hope by memorializing this, attending counseling/
group therapy, being with family and friends and sharing
this with FanStory, it serves as a cathartic respite.
This, I can't smile away. teafor2
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Ahhh t42 thanks for reading this. It was a catharsis indeed. My parents and one brother are still in the dark about it all. I couldn't tell them. My parents are too old now to cope with it. I did eventually have counselling and it did help. Infact I started writing because of it. You words are much appreciated my friend. I am healing now. Jaq xx
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You just made my day, NO my WEEK! t
Comment from ruminative scribbler
Dear Jaq Cee
This is a dreadful read...
The first two stanzas describe well how it feels when a child is being violated and no-one appears to notice or care...there is no-one to protect her, which is more than sad, that a fundamental right of her's is not being fulfilled...how can they not see? Why do they not stop it?
This despicable act will affect her for the rest of her life. It will cloud her reality and define who she is for a while, but hopefully not forever.
The evil lowlife who did this...did he realise the life-long implications of his actions...that he was killing a child inside...why is this abuser not treated as a murderer because that's what he is.
Thank you for sharing. Love & Peace Be Upon You,
Donna x
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Dear Jaq Cee
This is a dreadful read...
The first two stanzas describe well how it feels when a child is being violated and no-one appears to notice or care...there is no-one to protect her, which is more than sad, that a fundamental right of her's is not being fulfilled...how can they not see? Why do they not stop it?
This despicable act will affect her for the rest of her life. It will cloud her reality and define who she is for a while, but hopefully not forever.
The evil lowlife who did this...did he realise the life-long implications of his actions...that he was killing a child inside...why is this abuser not treated as a murderer because that's what he is.
Thank you for sharing. Love & Peace Be Upon You,
Donna x
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Hi Donna, thanks so much for your review. They do realise the long-term implications but they don't care. They are wired differently from the rest of us, or they wouldn't do it. Peace n Love to you too xx
Comment from Rondeno
You've written a masterly and important poem, my friend. It speaks with the eloquence which comes from having suffered. It's beautiful.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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You've written a masterly and important poem, my friend. It speaks with the eloquence which comes from having suffered. It's beautiful.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for all you do. Your words mean so much. The rating is much appreciated too Meehal mo chara. Jaq xx
Comment from Galactia
excellent written poem, so tragic and sad to here what happened to you and to loose it at 8 in such manner.
Hopefully 2013 will bring love and good things your way.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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excellent written poem, so tragic and sad to here what happened to you and to loose it at 8 in such manner.
Hopefully 2013 will bring love and good things your way.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thanks Tia I am so much stronger these days and thank you for your kind review Jaq xx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh my friend this is very well written and oh so sad no one should have experienced this well done on being able to write this regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Oh my friend this is very well written and oh so sad no one should have experienced this well done on being able to write this regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks Jill it's better to get it out as it only eats you up. I know this now. Much appreciated my friend xx
Comment from October21
So well expressed Jaq!! Sexual abuse in general, ESPECIALLY to a child of eight, must be stopped. If only we could teach them that what happened wasn't their fault- they were the victim, not the sinner- they would take life on with a different perspective, perhaps not feeling as bad or letting it control them. It is awful what happened to you and I am SO glad that you are strong enough to have become a great person regardless. Well done Jaq this one yet again deserves a six that I don't have. Beautiful work, so sad and a deep topic that is yet to fully be explored. And eradicated!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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So well expressed Jaq!! Sexual abuse in general, ESPECIALLY to a child of eight, must be stopped. If only we could teach them that what happened wasn't their fault- they were the victim, not the sinner- they would take life on with a different perspective, perhaps not feeling as bad or letting it control them. It is awful what happened to you and I am SO glad that you are strong enough to have become a great person regardless. Well done Jaq this one yet again deserves a six that I don't have. Beautiful work, so sad and a deep topic that is yet to fully be explored. And eradicated!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Cheers Shenel for a wonderful review. The more people face it the better for our children xxx
Comment from elgone
To have innocence wrested away at age eight. This is a poem that expresses the crux of an all too real problem in society that unfortunately some do not consider a serious enough issue to eradicate. When the victim of sexual assault is a child it makes it ten fold wrong.
E
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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To have innocence wrested away at age eight. This is a poem that expresses the crux of an all too real problem in society that unfortunately some do not consider a serious enough issue to eradicate. When the victim of sexual assault is a child it makes it ten fold wrong.
E
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading E. It is something that should be eradicated indeed xx
Comment from GarthL
There is definitely one instance, and only one, where I would be very happy to be the executioner and it is when it's time for the perpetrators of such vile actions are brought to pay for their deranged behaviour. Children are our treasures and should never be subjected to such perverted and damaging defilement. Although a very dark subject you have presented it in a very clearly written poem Jaq. Rhyming couplets are consistent and make for a free flowing read. Very well expressed, I feel the pain and confusion. Remember always you are you and your beautiful essence will always shine forth. My heart is firmly aching for you this morning. Thanks for sharing this from the heart poem Jaq. StayStrong, love'n'peace to you, Garthxox
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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There is definitely one instance, and only one, where I would be very happy to be the executioner and it is when it's time for the perpetrators of such vile actions are brought to pay for their deranged behaviour. Children are our treasures and should never be subjected to such perverted and damaging defilement. Although a very dark subject you have presented it in a very clearly written poem Jaq. Rhyming couplets are consistent and make for a free flowing read. Very well expressed, I feel the pain and confusion. Remember always you are you and your beautiful essence will always shine forth. My heart is firmly aching for you this morning. Thanks for sharing this from the heart poem Jaq. StayStrong, love'n'peace to you, Garthxox
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks Garth your words mean a lot xx
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xox!!
Comment from Indie Skreet
well Jaq, this chilled me to the bone and I for once am a little speechless. A hauntingly beautiful poem, conveying sadness I wholly empathise with. lets hope many have sixes left as you know I am all out, warmest regards, Indie xx
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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well Jaq, this chilled me to the bone and I for once am a little speechless. A hauntingly beautiful poem, conveying sadness I wholly empathise with. lets hope many have sixes left as you know I am all out, warmest regards, Indie xx
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks Indie the rating means nothing it's what you say that counts to me. Jaq xx
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yup, I realised that too, but is always nice hey :)
Comment from angelface2
I can feel the pain in this piece. If it happened to you, I am so very sorry. At 8 it can be remembered all your life. I was about 3 when it happened and until I was about 15 I thought it was a dream. But dreams do not last like that. I don't even know who it was, for sure. I have an idea. A neighbor at the time. You've captured the awful thing,in you poem. Hopefully that will help you forgive and move in a new direction. If we do not forgive, God will not forgive us. Hugs, my friend. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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I can feel the pain in this piece. If it happened to you, I am so very sorry. At 8 it can be remembered all your life. I was about 3 when it happened and until I was about 15 I thought it was a dream. But dreams do not last like that. I don't even know who it was, for sure. I have an idea. A neighbor at the time. You've captured the awful thing,in you poem. Hopefully that will help you forgive and move in a new direction. If we do not forgive, God will not forgive us. Hugs, my friend. Miss Sally
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Miss Sally sorry to hear it happened to you also. God bless you, Jaq xx
