My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Noah's Ark."All of my poems of release.
11 total reviews
Comment from Spike the second
Hi Jaq
This is so good. Wasn't Ham also the Boar and the Pig LOL
Have you ever seen the Ricky Gervias show called Science. He got a book on Noah and the Ark when he went to Sunday School and it was a sort of mickey take of the picture of the giraffes taking up all the space on the ark. At the back of the queue was the elephants and two crows. He said if there was little space when the giraffes were on there can you imagine when those fat gits got on LOL
Fantastic poem
Blessings
Spike
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Hi Jaq
This is so good. Wasn't Ham also the Boar and the Pig LOL
Have you ever seen the Ricky Gervias show called Science. He got a book on Noah and the Ark when he went to Sunday School and it was a sort of mickey take of the picture of the giraffes taking up all the space on the ark. At the back of the queue was the elephants and two crows. He said if there was little space when the giraffes were on there can you imagine when those fat gits got on LOL
Fantastic poem
Blessings
Spike
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thanks my dear for another lovely review. Blessings Spike xx
Comment from Indie Skreet
hey, excellent girl - best of luck for the competition, but I know what I would have had some of those animals doing lol. glad we found each other :) best Indie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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hey, excellent girl - best of luck for the competition, but I know what I would have had some of those animals doing lol. glad we found each other :) best Indie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Lol yea Indie would have made the days go by quicker :) x Thanks for the review and good wishes. Jaq xx
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oh, I haven't finished yet cos I need some fs currants - just got interrupted :)
Comment from Galactia
A wonderful ABC poem you have composed reflecting Noah's ark and the animals he saved in order to reproduce more after the flood.
GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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A wonderful ABC poem you have composed reflecting Noah's ark and the animals he saved in order to reproduce more after the flood.
GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Cheers Tia, it was just a bit of fun this one. Thanks for taking the time to review my poems. :) Jaq xxx
Comment from October21
Hi Jaq! I'm trying out a new formatting for reviewing. Hope it's not too confusing:-)
- Really liked this piece.
- Endless nights to get through... Great wording... Really showed us how cooped up they were.
- Loved the Jackals having dread, they knew they wouldn't make it on board... LOL!!!
- Learning a lot of new stuff here. I never even knew Noah had a son.
- It's really clever what you did with "ham" and "the slice of bread."
- You used the ABC form really well- liked that you wrote who stanzas.
- Rhyme scheme was just fantastic- aaabb, from what I know, in both stanzas. So catchy and flows well when read:-)
- Also loved the artwork:-)
- Overall, well done!!:-)
Love Shenel:D x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Hi Jaq! I'm trying out a new formatting for reviewing. Hope it's not too confusing:-)
- Really liked this piece.
- Endless nights to get through... Great wording... Really showed us how cooped up they were.
- Loved the Jackals having dread, they knew they wouldn't make it on board... LOL!!!
- Learning a lot of new stuff here. I never even knew Noah had a son.
- It's really clever what you did with "ham" and "the slice of bread."
- You used the ABC form really well- liked that you wrote who stanzas.
- Rhyme scheme was just fantastic- aaabb, from what I know, in both stanzas. So catchy and flows well when read:-)
- Also loved the artwork:-)
- Overall, well done!!:-)
Love Shenel:D x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Lovely review Shenel. Places all points out clearly for people to read. Thank you so much for taking the time. :) Jaq xxx
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You're welcome Jaq:D I think I am taking on a new obsession with reviewing, maybe because the work I read is so good:-) I'm happy to hear the review form works, might use it all the time now:-)
:-)
Shenel x
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:) xx
Comment from GarthL
Hi Jaq, keep going down the alphabet and you've got an ABCderian!? Well done, very creative, great overall presentation, a very harmonious page with image and color palette choice!! I liked the rhyming stanzas concept.
I'd think about changing 'they'd no bed' to 'they had no bed', it sort of feels better to me but..?
Never doubt your creativity Jaq, it's in there to be released as you've indicated with this effort. Good luck in the contest. Blessings and many regards, Garth
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Hi Jaq, keep going down the alphabet and you've got an ABCderian!? Well done, very creative, great overall presentation, a very harmonious page with image and color palette choice!! I liked the rhyming stanzas concept.
I'd think about changing 'they'd no bed' to 'they had no bed', it sort of feels better to me but..?
Never doubt your creativity Jaq, it's in there to be released as you've indicated with this effort. Good luck in the contest. Blessings and many regards, Garth
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thanks ever so much Garth. I kind of chickened out on the ABCderian. I will try one soon. Great to have your review as ever. PeacenLove my friend. :) Jaq xx
Comment from gazzagodbod
would have been quite a cruise wouldnt it surrounded by all of Gods creatures trying not to eat the chickens lol great work my friend xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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would have been quite a cruise wouldnt it surrounded by all of Gods creatures trying not to eat the chickens lol great work my friend xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Cheers gazza LOL always nice to hear your thoughts. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Well, this is a different take on Noah's ark...very interesting for sure. I'm not a poet but this reads and feels like a poem so I'd say you've got it made. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Well, this is a different take on Noah's ark...very interesting for sure. I'm not a poet but this reads and feels like a poem so I'd say you've got it made. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Evelyn much appreciated. :) Jaq xx
Comment from mumsyone
A cute ABC poem about Noah and the ark, and a good entry for the contest. Good rhyme and meter.
Animals trouped (trooped) in two by two
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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A cute ABC poem about Noah and the ark, and a good entry for the contest. Good rhyme and meter.
Animals trouped (trooped) in two by two
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Cheers mumsyone appreciated as ever. Will sort it tomorrow thanks :) Jaq x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very wel lwritten, jaq cee, you did an excellent job writing this abc poem about Noah's ark, i enjoyed reading it. we were told a riddle at church yesterday that stumped one of our deacons when he was in the hospital.
What bible character was born without a soul, received a soul, lost a soul but doesn't live in Heaven or hell?
the whale that swallowed Jonah.
good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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this is very wel lwritten, jaq cee, you did an excellent job writing this abc poem about Noah's ark, i enjoyed reading it. we were told a riddle at church yesterday that stumped one of our deacons when he was in the hospital.
What bible character was born without a soul, received a soul, lost a soul but doesn't live in Heaven or hell?
the whale that swallowed Jonah.
good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Lol thanks SWJ, I may catch a few people out with that one. Blessings :) Jaq x
Comment from Rondeno
It makes a change, Ham deciding on the sliced bread! Very good. The versification is nice and even and unforced. Why stop at "J"? Why not go on?
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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It makes a change, Ham deciding on the sliced bread! Very good. The versification is nice and even and unforced. Why stop at "J"? Why not go on?
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Lol thanks Meehal, I was thinking about going on then I wimped out. :) Lovely to hear your thoughts as ever. :) Jaq xx
