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Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Melt into me."
All of my poems of release.

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Comment from Indie Skreet
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uhu, glad you can enjoy yourself too ;) the flow on this is perfect and you illustrate the gift of enjoying the best in life has to offer love/lust together :) best Indie

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Hidden depths ;-) LOL. I now just need a conduit for my passion :) Jaq xx

    Or maybe I have one...
Comment from Spike the second
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Hi Jaq

Sorry old Spikey, is having his birthday today 25 reversed LOL. But had to work and only just finished 23:00. I am so glad I managed to read your poem before they disappear.

What a great poem my friend. I am glad I get to read your work, as you like me do this for a kick and not to score points and climb tables.
Power to the Peeps!

Blessings

Spike

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
    Aww Happy Birthday Spike. Thanks fot taking time out on your special day to read some of my poems. You know I appreciate it xxx
Comment from adewpearl
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stunning illustration
strong alliteration throughout
effective use of listing in the touching...passage
mingle/bathe/feel - effective use of strong verbs in your imperative statements
a wonderfully passionate and romantic poem :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
    Thank you so much Brooke, always a pleasure. xx
Comment from Eliza M
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Hi Jaq. This is my first review in ages and what a pleasure!
Your lovely free verse is almost like a recipe for love, with word choices like - melt,essence,heat, blend and sweetness. Tasteful, sensual and sensuous. The structure and rhythm build the sense of anticipation for the reader, mirroring that feeling of exctement in passionate love-making.
HOT HOT HOT girl! Well done!
Liz.x

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
    Awww Liz many thanks and it is great to see you again. I miss your poems. Thanks for the phone call the other day, it was a pleasant surprise. I'll call you soon, just struggling a wee bit. Jaq xxx
reply by Eliza M on 06-Mar-2013
    Sweetie, I hope you are Ok. Hang on in there. I'm here if you need to talk. Only popped in for a brief visit, to try and ease myself back in gently. The last couple of months have been eaten up with depression and I'm hauling myself out of it slowly but hopefully. Just know that I'm thinking of you. No pressure. Liz.xxx
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
    Thank you xx
Comment from Galactia
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WOW hot, i wish I had a six to grant this beautiful written free verse full of vibrant imagery, such a delight to read tonight

Great job

Regards
tia

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
    Thank you so much Tia xx
Comment from reconciled
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Hi Jaq...Smokin' Hot sweety -smile- Sounds like super glue love...the best kind -smile- Great write love you Michael

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
    Thanks so much Michael great to hear your thoughts. :) Jaq xx
reply by reconciled on 05-Mar-2013
    alright...-smile-
Comment from Gungalo
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infuse my soul
with yours

Hi JC. Omit these two lines girl as they make the beginning redundant. The rest is a gorgeous write and meant for lovers. Mmm...

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
    Thanks so much for your very helpful and lovely review G. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Hi Jaq,

This is a lovely work to read. It sort of holds all love pulled together to share with the one we trust to melt into.

Nicely penned I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
    Thanks so much Maureen your reviews are always appreciated :) Jaq xx
Comment from Earl of Oxford
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Hi, jaq.

The artwork is fascinating as it shows BOTH faces.

I really like this a lot, and reckon free verse expression may be your forte.

Excellent presentation of your words spiralling down the page in dramatic short lines without the restriction of structure or that rotten meter. LOL.

A little cliche in parts, but that WORKS here.

Very romantic and passionate read.

Excellent!

Cheers, Ray

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
    Lol meter schmeter...

    Thanks Ray it was just an experiment. Seen the picture first and tried to mould the words around it. :) Jaq xx
reply by Earl of Oxford on 05-Mar-2013
    You did a great job, Jaq. xx
Comment from October21
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Lovely write as always Jaq:-) The two becoming one is well - described and loved your descriptions throughout the piece. Beautiful write one I really enjoyed and loved how it flowed on the page kind of like the love:-)

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
    I saw the picture first then wrote the words around it Shenel. Thanks for your lovely words. :) Jaq xx
reply by October21 on 05-Mar-2013
    You're very welcome, and great picture too!:-)