Pain
Depressing4 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Hi luuluu, I am not quite sure what to say. First of all, thank you for writing. It is a great way of expressing ourselves, be it from inner turmoil, inspiration or just for absolute fun. Your piece is not a 5-7-5 poem, but they are very fun to write. They are short and hold a lot of message in a few words. Secondly, I did not find your story to be particularly leaning toward strong violence, but keep the thought of that knife away from the wrist. Keep on writing, Best to you always, Carolyn
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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Hi luuluu, I am not quite sure what to say. First of all, thank you for writing. It is a great way of expressing ourselves, be it from inner turmoil, inspiration or just for absolute fun. Your piece is not a 5-7-5 poem, but they are very fun to write. They are short and hold a lot of message in a few words. Secondly, I did not find your story to be particularly leaning toward strong violence, but keep the thought of that knife away from the wrist. Keep on writing, Best to you always, Carolyn
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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thanks for the tips and im soryr it wasny a 5-7-5 poem im new and 14 srry would you be willing to help me?
plz
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I would love to follow your work. Would you like to be fans? Carolyn
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yes but i dont exactly know how 2 do that haha
Comment from RodG
Your poem "cut" to a nerve because I am writing a novel in which three different characters commit suicide. Understanding the mindset is helpful. Thank you.
But I rated you low because this is not a 5-7-5 poem.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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Your poem "cut" to a nerve because I am writing a novel in which three different characters commit suicide. Understanding the mindset is helpful. Thank you.
But I rated you low because this is not a 5-7-5 poem.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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im srry im new and thanks
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This is prose. Even a prose poem has rhythm, uses devices like alliteration and contains imagery. Your work has none of these. It's simply a centered paragraph. What is "IT"? Death? Life? You haven't made yourself clear. Sorry. :] Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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This is prose. Even a prose poem has rhythm, uses devices like alliteration and contains imagery. Your work has none of these. It's simply a centered paragraph. What is "IT"? Death? Life? You haven't made yourself clear. Sorry. :] Nancy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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thanks
Comment from Anisa-
You express yourself well in this poem, and I hope this isn't how you're actually feeling... It reads more like prose and the reason I marked it down is because you have it listed as a 5-7-5. Which it most certainly is not. A 5-7-5 is five syllables in the first line, seven in the second and five in the last.
Best to you,
Anisa
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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You express yourself well in this poem, and I hope this isn't how you're actually feeling... It reads more like prose and the reason I marked it down is because you have it listed as a 5-7-5. Which it most certainly is not. A 5-7-5 is five syllables in the first line, seven in the second and five in the last.
Best to you,
Anisa
Comment Written 23-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2013
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im sorry im just new at this and i dont really know my way around and im actually only 14
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No reason to be sorry. Welcome to the site :-)
