My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 101 "Senryu (Children's laughter)"All of my poems of release.
6 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
What an adorable photo to pair with your poem
Your poem is in perfect 5/7/5 form
I like the alliteration in day draws
and your appeal to the sense of sound with the laughter of children
What a wonderfully celebratory, delightful look at Christmas Eve :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
  |
What an adorable photo to pair with your poem
Your poem is in perfect 5/7/5 form
I like the alliteration in day draws
and your appeal to the sense of sound with the laughter of children
What a wonderfully celebratory, delightful look at Christmas Eve :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
-
Thank you so very much Brooke, much appreciated :) Jaq x
Comment from BeasPeas
Delightful photo and presentation. Without kids' anticipation and laughter, a lot of traditional Christmas would be lost. On the other hand, the holiday/holyday gives all of us a chance to reflect on the meaning of the day.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
|
Delightful photo and presentation. Without kids' anticipation and laughter, a lot of traditional Christmas would be lost. On the other hand, the holiday/holyday gives all of us a chance to reflect on the meaning of the day.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
-
Thanks so much for your kind review. x
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. It reminds me of the magic found on Christmas day. I love the poem. A child's glee is what makes Christmas Day. Great work.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
|
I love the picture. It reminds me of the magic found on Christmas day. I love the poem. A child's glee is what makes Christmas Day. Great work.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
-
Thank you elliejean for your kind review.
Comment from Galactia
Children's laughter sounds 5
Christmas day draws ever near 7
Santa's on his way 5
Lovely little senryu poem, perfect 5'7'5 17 syllable structure, love the pic.
GL in the contest and have a great xmas
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
|
Children's laughter sounds 5
Christmas day draws ever near 7
Santa's on his way 5
Lovely little senryu poem, perfect 5'7'5 17 syllable structure, love the pic.
GL in the contest and have a great xmas
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
-
Thank you so much and have a great Christmas too.
Comment from expressions9
This is a well-written 5-7-5 with an excellent photo to match the theme expressed in the words, and the red colour background is very fitting.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
|
This is a well-written 5-7-5 with an excellent photo to match the theme expressed in the words, and the red colour background is very fitting.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
-
Thanks for your very kind review.
-
You're welcome.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Simple in the best way festive and uplifting write.
Since Chrismas has in many ways lost it's original religious meaning, at least kids can have great fun, and parents too...so long as they can afford to.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
|
Simple in the best way festive and uplifting write.
Since Chrismas has in many ways lost it's original religious meaning, at least kids can have great fun, and parents too...so long as they can afford to.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
-
Thank you my friend for your lovely review.
