Comment from MM lives on :)

Exceptional

Dear poetess, you have crafted a beautiful poem with both format, imagery and meaning. The emotion pours in our hand, the sand forgotten, lest not be the final grain as your friends dearly adore you. Loved this my friend.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012

Once again many thanks for your kind words and rating. So very much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Chanphy

Excellent

I like your poem. Writing it in the shape of an hourglass is great. I like the "grain
by
grain"
effect. I just visualize the sand slowly moving down the hourglass. This is well written and well structured.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Thanks Chanphy, your words are much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Jaq Cee,

To be so short, this poem has some deep imagery. It paints a verbal picture for the mind's eye. Life is truly short and slowly slips away like sands in the hourglass. We lose so much of our lifeblood as the sands shift one grain at a time.

Curtis

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Thanks Curtis your review is much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Ekim777

Excellent

Is not time our own mind's conception. We have created time and this is the limitation of our conscious mind. So how adequately do the sifting sands in an hour glass symbolize time or life. Surely your life does not seep away unless death is near. Blood is the surest symbol of life. THe finality of your last couplet does indeed suggest that we all live within the shadow of death and maybe death gives our lives glory. So my conclusion that we must live life as if every day is our last day. -Ekim777

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Thank you so much for your detailed review as always Ekim :) Jaq x

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Most appropriate shaping of your poem about the sands of time in an hourglass
I like the consonance of grain and sluggish
and the alliteration in sluggishly sleeps and sluggish creates just the right tone
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Thanks for your great review as always Brooke :) Jaq xx

reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Thanks for your great review as always Brooke :) Jaq xx

reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Thanks for your great review as always Brooke :) Jaq xx

Comment from anarchist12

Excellent

Stellar work once again Jac Cee..
how very happy i am to have
run into such a talent
with ink spinning
thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012

Anarchist, thank you so much for your very kind review. Much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend well done you have incorporated so much feeling into your thoughts in this poem and the shape works to well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012

Thanks for another lovely review Jill :) Jaq x

Comment from October21

Excellent

Hiya! I love the idea of life being an hourglass. This poem speaks truth with such short words. I love how the words layout on the page to look like an hourglass! It's so clever:)

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Thanks Shenel much appreciated xxx

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Well penned and thought provoking. Sometimes I feel much the same...then the sun comes out again.

Thanks for sharing it.
Happy Holidays and sending smiles & hugs
Maureen

Edit check:
"nears it's end."// its

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Thanks so much Maureen for your help I'll sort that xxx

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Thanks so much Maureen for your help I'll sort that xxx

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Thanks so much Maureen for your help I'll sort that xxx

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Lol looks like I have a stutter, don't know why that repeated. :) xx

reply by Maureen's Pen on 20-Dec-2012

Evil Eddy sometimes does that:)
Even for me.
Merry Christmas:)

Comment from Spike the second

Excellent

Hi Jaq

This is a great poem and I was just thinking, after seeing Top of the Pops on BBC4 from 1977, where the hell has that time gone. I was still at school.

Super poem Jaq, made me feel old....ish.

Blessings

Spike

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Lol know what you mean Spike. Thanks for your review xx