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Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
good assonance in light does shine
I am not a big fan of putting do and does in front of verbs in poems
Other than that, your poem is thoughtfully expressed
nice closing alliteration in God's grace :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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solid use of abab rhyming
good assonance in light does shine
I am not a big fan of putting do and does in front of verbs in poems
Other than that, your poem is thoughtfully expressed
nice closing alliteration in God's grace :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you Brooke I see what you mean. Your review is very much appreciated indeed. :) Jaq x
Comment from Spike the second
Hello Jaq
I love this poem and I believe you stand a great chance with it. I like the flow and apart from the double take a Rumi (I thought it said Rum, but that's Christmas starting early for me LOL).
Well worth my six stars my friend and I wish you the best of British luck and if that doesn't work the luck of the Irish.
Blessings
Spike
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Hello Jaq
I love this poem and I believe you stand a great chance with it. I like the flow and apart from the double take a Rumi (I thought it said Rum, but that's Christmas starting early for me LOL).
Well worth my six stars my friend and I wish you the best of British luck and if that doesn't work the luck of the Irish.
Blessings
Spike
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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LOL thank you so much Spike it was just a wee go at rhyming again. Not sure what I'm enjoying the most at the minute. Free verse or rhyme. :) Jaq x
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How about rhyming free verse? Whatever feels right go with it and sod the rest LOL
Spike
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That's the answer Spike. LOL :) Jaq x
Comment from lakeport
Celestial Love indeed, that's a beautiful expressed story poem, very nice rhyming, I enjoyed reading it, God bless you.lakeport.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Celestial Love indeed, that's a beautiful expressed story poem, very nice rhyming, I enjoyed reading it, God bless you.lakeport.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for review and for taking the time to read it. Much appreciated :) Jaq x
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Your welcome,Lakeport.
Comment from Rondeno
Hello again, Jacqueline!
You've written a lovely, lovely devotional poem. I particularly adored "veiled tether". There's a gentleness about you that is ... well, special.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Hello again, Jacqueline!
You've written a lovely, lovely devotional poem. I particularly adored "veiled tether". There's a gentleness about you that is ... well, special.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Michael your review means a lot to me. :) Jacqueline x
Comment from elpsog
I have re rated "Celestial Love?" to five stars as promised.
You should amend also (just a suggestion) quatrain #1 verse 4, drop the will and add an "s" to show.
Ray
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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I have re rated "Celestial Love?" to five stars as promised.
You should amend also (just a suggestion) quatrain #1 verse 4, drop the will and add an "s" to show.
Ray
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Of course I'll sort it in the morning. Thank you so much Ray xx
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inform me when done so I can see
then I'll give the star I promised thee.
Ray
Comment from Gungalo
God is definitely behind true love, there is no doubt about it. A wonderful feeling su os that cannot be put off or taken for granted.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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God is definitely behind true love, there is no doubt about it. A wonderful feeling su os that cannot be put off or taken for granted.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Too true my friend Gungalo. The whirling dervish who's words take my breath away...LOL xx
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Smile you.
