Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

You decry
unselfish acts,
because
your life's
empty


You said it JC and I'll bet you meant it too. Jealousy is a very vile thing and can ruin a person's very life. It is wise to not have it at all.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012

Thanks so much Gungalo for your great review. Jealousy is a wasted emotion to me. :) Jaq x

Comment from dancerwriter

Good

The brilliant green eye entices-but is startling.Each verse echoes so many angry, desolate feelings, which draw the one conclusion.Hatred of someone who seems to destroy lives and love. A person full of bitter feelings towards some one else but to the point of the theme.Jealousy.rather sad.Lesley.J.

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 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012

Ahh dancewriter I have no hatred in my body whatsoever. I think it's a wasted emotion infact. It's just a poem about how I perceive jealousy. Thanks for your review. :) Jaq x

Comment from Perp Ihebom

Excellent

I wonder why ewe consider jealousy a positive feature in issues concerning love relationships. Like you said in this poem, it consumes the soul and can breed nothing but evil. Love and trust must go together and jealousy should not be allowed to destroy joy. well written

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012

Perp thanks for your kind review. Jealousy is a wasted emotion and best not entertained. :) Jaq x

Comment from eowyn0003

Excellent

Much denser. The words you used counted and you made them work hard for you. It is just very compact now and I feel it reads better.

Lura

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012

Thanks so much for your in-depth and helpful review. I have implemented some.

reply by eowyn0003 on 12-Dec-2012

I'm glad you found some of my remarks helpful. I will review it again.

Lura

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012

Thank you so much for your help Lura :) Jaq x

reply by eowyn0003 on 12-Dec-2012

Your most welcome.

Lura

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Love how you put the words in green. I like the line about the empty life, how true, jealousy is an empty life. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012

Thank you so much mermaids for your kind review.

Comment from angel123

Excellent

Your poem is well written and emotional. I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and good alliteraion of many words. Your artwork choice is wonderful for your poem

Angel123

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012

Thank you so much for your kind review. Angel123 x

Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem.Some jealousy people tear others apart. Not because they want love. They just don't want others to enjoy the love they have for each other. Great work.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012

Thanks again elliejean for another great review.

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

This poem brought to mind a former roommate who was jealous of my steady boyfriend. She came from a broken home and neither her mom or dad seemed to have time for her. (The mother busy trying to attract a husband while the dad had remarried and started a new family.) I could picture the scenario. T2

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012

Thanks for your kind review T2.

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hello. I have to completely agree with envy as one of the seven deadly sins which is so much responsible for breaking apart relationships. This is so true. An envious person having so much of a void that they feel like filling it or having everyone else share in this void. As people, I think we've all been there before, but I wish I could say most of us know how to keep it in check as to not actually carry out something that would hurt others. Really enjoyed your poem. Kind regards and cheers.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012

Thank you so much as always Benjamin.

Comment from Starlit Ink

Exceptional

This poem describes jealousy and the evil behind it. Jealousy can wreak havoc in many ways. The presentation is artistic and amazing, and goes well with the emotion you are conveying. Jealous people gain satisfaction in ruining lives. You relayed that perfectly. Good luck.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012

Thank you so much for that wonderful review and for your very generous rating Starlit. Very much appreciated.