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Viewing comments for Chapter 115 "Passion's Feel."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from 9999pool
Feeling passionate and in the heat of the moment without being vulgar as required of lovers in FS. What more can you do? Write more adjectives and verbs and less nouns, I suppose, LOL. The passionate love needs a description of sorts: the love scene, the serenade, the partng and then getting together in the rain, asking the 'marry me' questions while parachuting..wow, all these can add more spice to the passionate couple. Good write and imagery. Needs no changes. Cheers.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Feeling passionate and in the heat of the moment without being vulgar as required of lovers in FS. What more can you do? Write more adjectives and verbs and less nouns, I suppose, LOL. The passionate love needs a description of sorts: the love scene, the serenade, the partng and then getting together in the rain, asking the 'marry me' questions while parachuting..wow, all these can add more spice to the passionate couple. Good write and imagery. Needs no changes. Cheers.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind review 9999pool :)
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. We are very aware of how our body is acting while in a love making session. It heightens the event for us. Great work.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. We are very aware of how our body is acting while in a love making session. It heightens the event for us. Great work.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review elliejean.
Comment from Ekim777
Your poem is a plethora of delicate lust, strong emotions with a touch of the negative, those terrible things, our passions and desire. A potent mix but the last and final word struck me. Synchronicity is loaded with meaning. In the mystical far East, the initiated measure the material world not by cause and effect as demonstrated by our scientific activities but a substance and space it occupies. It is a kind of simultaneous experience. That is the mystical part. If you love indeed reaches these heights there is a hint that your love is infinite. Frankly I do not think that human is infinite. Like life, it ever changing and transforming. -Ekim 777
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Your poem is a plethora of delicate lust, strong emotions with a touch of the negative, those terrible things, our passions and desire. A potent mix but the last and final word struck me. Synchronicity is loaded with meaning. In the mystical far East, the initiated measure the material world not by cause and effect as demonstrated by our scientific activities but a substance and space it occupies. It is a kind of simultaneous experience. That is the mystical part. If you love indeed reaches these heights there is a hint that your love is infinite. Frankly I do not think that human is infinite. Like life, it ever changing and transforming. -Ekim 777
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you Ekim for your very thorough and insightful review. Much appreciated. :)
Comment from Norbanus
You certainly showed the love and passion part but did you meet the black and white requirement? From my perspective I think you did, except for the illustration.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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You certainly showed the love and passion part but did you meet the black and white requirement? From my perspective I think you did, except for the illustration.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thank you Norbanus. I maybe read it wrong I just assumed it was to capture the essence of the time and not the necessarily picture. Thanks again your review means a lot. :)
