Comment from snemes

Excellent

You did a great job on this! Your wick burns quickly just like mine. Excellent choice of words to get your point across. Nice flow and rhyme in this serious poem. The picture is sobering. All young people should see this. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012

Thanks much

Comment from Craigitar

Excellent

Good poem, tough message. Well written, poignant and right to the heart. Picture is perfect accompaniment for poem. Good job and luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

Thanks Craig

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Poet,
Your Septolet poem is extremely well written with superb imagery.
The art work is priceless you used.
You used very fine alliteration with the B words.
You used excellent rhyme of rock block & wick quick.
I enjoyed all 14 words:
Smoke the rock
Chop the block
Fine

Your wick
Burns Quickly
Just like
Mine
I'd recommend your Septolet poem with food for thought to other reviewers
Or smoke for brain rot.
I wish you good luck in the Septolet contest.
Please have a smoke free day.
Missy.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

LOL thanks Missy

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hello. Nicely crafted together. Good symmetry and good moral message built in. I liked your picture too for added resolution on capturing the full message. Wick I believe is being used in two contexts. Wick as in the cigarrette/light and the body. Great job and cheers.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

Cheers mate

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Smoke the rock
Chop the block
Fine

Your wick
Burns Quickly
Just like
Mine


This septolet poem has perfect 14 words, reflecting drugs and the short life span we have.

GL in the contest
Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

Thanks Much Tia

Comment from prayingpoet

Excellent

Scary but a sad truth you have captured in this short piece. Not just jail time, but emotional time as well. Good luck with the contest!

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

thanks much Janice

Comment from LenSive

Excellent

Yeoh! this is scary. I don't know exactly what these drug terms mean, but I get the overall impression thanks to the v graphic pictures. If only we could substitute the drug of cretivity, of learning, of slef-giving, how wonderful that would be!

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

Thanks much Len

Comment from EMB

Excellent

So true. Especially when you're burning it on both ends like these people choose to do. The picture isn't needed. It's an unnecessary crutch. Your words tell it all.

Nicely done.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

Thanks Much Edward

Comment from 4tulips

Good

I understood your attempt in writing a Septolet while you told of the powdery drug of cocaine. I wasn't expecting the picture you chose to go with the poem. The picture brings a different connotation to the words of powder (snow)& perhaps the falling down image due to smoking it. It is my opinion that perhaps another picture would have benefited for your poem. My suggestion only.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

alright...

Comment from phill doran

Excellent

Hello there
Very good this - limited form and yet you do get the message over.
The idea of rhyming fine and time also makes it easier to read and engage: I could only suggest that in the second set you consider maybe dropping "due" and starting with "the" powder;

"...The powder
sucks you
dry in
time..."

This might run better? Just a thought, nothing special
I wish you well with this
cheers
phill

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2012

Good idea