Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. I love the subject. It is sad and hard when one disorder can take over your life. You feel you are normal in every other way. Great work.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012

It is so debilitating for the sufferer. Thanks for your kind review ellie.

Comment from mtnspirit

Excellent

Hi,

Well written with good rhyme and rhythm and the requirements met for this contest. I hope this poem isn't from true experience as anxiety is a difficult thing to deal with. Best wishes in this contest.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012

Thanks again mtnspirit, you reviews are always appreciated.

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hello. Excellent job writing about facing anxiety. I enjoyed your rhyming pattern and the delivery of your voice especially, in the anticipation of trying again on a new day. Good luck and cheers.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012

Thanks once again Benjamin, always a pleasure to have you review.

Comment from prayingpoet

Excellent

Anxiety is very difficult to deal with and you captured the feelings of sadness and sorrow a person feels when going though this emotion. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thank you for your kind words.

Comment from Bayberry

Excellent

I've only had a couple of mild anxiety situations and they weren't comfortable at all because of the additional feeling of lack of control. Your writing is very strong and meaningful.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thank you so much Silhouette Effect for your lovely review.

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

The poem vividly describes anxiety and the horrors it brings. It is a condition we cannot rationalize nor understand the cause. It gives one much to think about. You have stated it well.

"Another day's upon us,
I'll try again today.
This fear I'll will dispel,
I truly hope and pray."

In the last stanza, I'll will is awkward. I suggest you change I'll to I.

Godspeed,
Curtis

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thank you so much Curtis, much appreciated. I missed that typo and I thank you for pointing it out to me.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This well-written, heart-wrenching poem conveys the emotions of one whose fears of past and present have rendered her agorophobic. Very good

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thank you Janice, I appreciate your time reviewing my poem.

Comment from phill doran

Good

Hello there
Directly written - easy enough rhyme scheme although I found 'mooted' a bit contrived...still a small point as I enjoyed this read.
You might want to consider the ABAB rhyme scheme when working on pieces like this (as there is an ABAB competition on the site shortly)Just an idea.
I would suggest you look at the third line of the last verse - you have "...I'll will..." and I am sure you did not mean this.
I wish you well with your writing
cheers
phill

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012

Thank you for point that out Phil i did miss that when reading it over. Thanks also for your kind and honest review.