senryu (after the dust up)
A 5-7-5 claiming Senryu status...apparently16 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
LMAO! You are a cheeky gal! LOL Great play on words and perfect justice served for the crime of being WRONG. :) Great 's' alliteration. Clever wit and a great laugh. Did you take this triumphant photograph?
Hugs - :) Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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LMAO! You are a cheeky gal! LOL Great play on words and perfect justice served for the crime of being WRONG. :) Great 's' alliteration. Clever wit and a great laugh. Did you take this triumphant photograph?
Hugs - :) Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Haha thanks so much Lovi, I enjoyed your sixer review.
Hope you are well. No, this is NOT my photograph...to be honest in twenty two years I don't think I have EVER seen him drag out the vacuum...then again, of course he is NEVER wrong. Bahaha
Cheers P
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LOL!
Ah yes, THEY are NEVER WRONG! How much of my lifetime have I spent convincing THEM of the opposite? Hehehe! Well, I have only vacuumed HALF the time .... equality rules!
Keep safe and well. Happy Hols! Hugs - :) Lovi xoxo
Comment from amada
Oh dear, I'm giggling all over your Senryu entry here. For sure only the mind of a woman could write this one. I love the satori line!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Oh dear, I'm giggling all over your Senryu entry here. For sure only the mind of a woman could write this one. I love the satori line!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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For sure yes, only the punishing mind of a woman. Haha.
Thanks for the beaut review amada.
Cheers P
Comment from visionary1234
well my hubbie hasn't never obviously been THAT penitent - he wouldn't know one end of a vacuum cleaner from the other! I do, however, detect penitence when the dishwasher gets emptied! fun senryu! :) Sharyn
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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well my hubbie hasn't never obviously been THAT penitent - he wouldn't know one end of a vacuum cleaner from the other! I do, however, detect penitence when the dishwasher gets emptied! fun senryu! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Haha, thanks for your delightful review.
Most appreciated.
Cheers P
Comment from Connie C
My, oh my, what implication do we have here? Poor husband must be disappointed as he drags out the vacuum. I'm so glad I didn't miss this one--very clever and allows one's imagination to go to work. Great third line. Thank you for sharing and giving this reviewer, and her husband, a chuckle or two. By the way, I like your little note at the very top.
Connie
xoxoxo
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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My, oh my, what implication do we have here? Poor husband must be disappointed as he drags out the vacuum. I'm so glad I didn't miss this one--very clever and allows one's imagination to go to work. Great third line. Thank you for sharing and giving this reviewer, and her husband, a chuckle or two. By the way, I like your little note at the very top.
Connie
xoxoxo
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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LOL thanks so much for the enchanting review. I can't say it's ever happened in this house but I would enjoy watching him vacuum to be honest. He has NEVER been that wrong, according to him! LMAO
Cheers and thanks again
Hugs
Phillippa
xoxoxo
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your Senryu is extremely well written with colorful imagery painted in a minimal of words.
In your Senryu you used excellent alliteration with the S 8 T words.
Your satori line is great.
after their dust up
sorry spouse drags out vacuum
time for his suck job
I'd recommend your comical Senryu to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck with your naughty Senryu.
"May The Force Be With You."
Missy.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Poet,
Your Senryu is extremely well written with colorful imagery painted in a minimal of words.
In your Senryu you used excellent alliteration with the S 8 T words.
Your satori line is great.
after their dust up
sorry spouse drags out vacuum
time for his suck job
I'd recommend your comical Senryu to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck with your naughty Senryu.
"May The Force Be With You."
Missy.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Thanks very much missy, I enjoyed your delightful review.
Cheers P
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your humorous poem. It flows well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed reading your humorous poem. It flows well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2012
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review.
Cheers P
Comment from MAMONIA
Well that is one way for him to "suck up"
as you say. I would, however, give him a few
other alternatives.
I saw that "smirk" on your face and can just
imagine how you were lying on the couch enjoying
his efforts.
Great entry for the contest. Best of luck.
Marie
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Well that is one way for him to "suck up"
as you say. I would, however, give him a few
other alternatives.
I saw that "smirk" on your face and can just
imagine how you were lying on the couch enjoying
his efforts.
Great entry for the contest. Best of luck.
Marie
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Many thanks Marie. Most appreciated.
Comment from Galactia
after their dust up 5
sorry spouse drags out vacuum 7
time for his suck job 5
Perfect little senryu, perfect syllable count of 5'7'5 great 3rd line.
well done
GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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after their dust up 5
sorry spouse drags out vacuum 7
time for his suck job 5
Perfect little senryu, perfect syllable count of 5'7'5 great 3rd line.
well done
GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thanks Tai, most appreciated.
Comment from EMB
Hmm. I'm not quite getting this. I'm experiencing a forest behind the tree moment, I guess. If they've dusted, they didn't dust the floor did they? So why not break out the vacuum to gather all of the dust that hit the floor? LOL
I'm too close to this. Nice job with the format. :)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hmm. I'm not quite getting this. I'm experiencing a forest behind the tree moment, I guess. If they've dusted, they didn't dust the floor did they? So why not break out the vacuum to gather all of the dust that hit the floor? LOL
I'm too close to this. Nice job with the format. :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thanks for trying Forest! LOL The play on words in the first line with "dust up" is actually a fight between spouses. He loses, hence he grovels by doing the vaccuming (something the ladies love)...thus explaining my last line.
Like I said, nice try.
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LOL Ladies love vacuuming? (I'll have to inform my wife.)
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No, no, no...that reference meant that we love it when YOU guys do the vacuuming.
Haha
Cheers
Comment from Slythytove2
One can not challenge the wisdom of these words or the way in which they were so cleverly set out.You should try your hand at a limerick, I have a feeling you might be really well equipped.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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One can not challenge the wisdom of these words or the way in which they were so cleverly set out.You should try your hand at a limerick, I have a feeling you might be really well equipped.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thankyou and yes I have written the odd limerick. Haha *smirk*
Much appreciate your review.
