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Fade-out

Narrowing our world.

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Comment from Benjamin Valencia
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Hello TwistedZepher...Cool poem..Just some input. How about " is a map narrowing our world. Instead of fade out how about, fade away. Hope the input helps and good luck in the contest. Cheers.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2012

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
    Last word has to be one syllable. I am not twisted Zepher. This is a blind contest.thanks for reviewing.
reply by Benjamin Valencia on 19-Nov-2012
    Hello, dear apologies for calling you twistedZepher. I could have sworn I saw the handle name written. The name almost sounds like a bad word too. Again sorry and hey, good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
    No problem, thanks again for reviewing.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
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Great artwork it compliments this very unique piece. The flow is really good the colors blend well. you did a good job with this. Well done. Deorre

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2012

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
    Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Gungalo
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A very good comparison of aging to the streets of life. You mights want to put pot and holes together for potholes though. Other than that I can find nothing to correct.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2012

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
    Thanks for the heads up.
reply by Gungalo on 18-Nov-2012
    Smiles.
Comment from Galactia
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This is a great little nonet poem reflecting societies way of life and thinking.

perfect syllable count of 9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1.

well done and good luck in the contest
Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2012

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
    thank you for the kind review.