Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend a sensual poem with very strong imagery and beautiful presentation which adds to the feeling of the work well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012

Thank you so much my friend xx

Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

This is excellent, vivid, expressionate, romantic and erotic in the nicest way, Jaq.

Your words of passion tumble down the page just right, with line spaces cleverly placed.

I'm not sure about the squiggles. :-)

Top free verse, IMO.

Best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012

Thanks Ray, happy you enjoyed it. Always appreciated :) Jaq x

Comment from Eliza M

Excellent

Steamy! Wow Jaq! This is very sensual without being too overtly sexual. A beautifully composed and structured poem, with breaks in all the right places. Its rhythm mirrors the movements of lovemaking. The reader can really sense the longing and need. Really enjoyed this one. Liz.x

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Liz, good to see you back :) Jaq x

Comment from Spike the second

Excellent

Oo er Jaq

Blimey I'll have to go on that naughty step again. thith the wicked thoughts I get :)
It started with something trickling down your hot hard body. Blimey matron get out the sraight jacket.

Great poem Jaq I love the fact a lady can make a dopey old sod like me feel uneasy. Bucking! We used to stretch open our mouths with our forefingers and thumbs as kids and try saying that word. It came out really rude. LOL Like a Ventriloquist that cannot say B :)

Spike

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

LOL so did we Spike, it certainly didn't sound like 'bucking' :)

Awww I didn't mean to make you feel uneasy. Glad you enjoyed it tho'. :) Jaq x

reply by Spike the second on 15-Nov-2012

Jaq I led a very sheltered life LOL

Spike

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Wow this was great girl. You managed to get across the unsung feelings of desire and very well I might add. To feel this:

Our bodies dance
with gay abandon,
bucking
grabbing
sliding
forth.

is fantastic!!!!

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Gungalo, means a lot from you. :) Jaq x

reply by Gungalo on 15-Nov-2012

Smile.

Comment from ocruickshank

Excellent

ooooowwwww!!! that was steamy hot. Sounded more like lust than love but enjoyable just the same. The flow was great, loved the imagery chosen, and the placement of lines ( structure)...very enjoyable!

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for your great review. :) Jaq x

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Jaq,

This poem paints a story of deep passion and love. The protagonist does a good job of expressing the feelings. The imagery is vivid and easy for the mind's eye to see. It is further enhanced by the graphics and format.

Godspeed,
Curtis

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012

Thank you very much for your kind appraisal Curtis, much appreciated indeed. :) Jaq x