Haiku (Fall's arrows)
3-5-3 Haiku6 total reviews
Comment from steevie
Rose, your poem was well penned. I liked how you incorporated the geese, the sounds, the direction reference, all to make an enjoyable 5-7-5 on the migratory flight of large birds.
well done
steve
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2012
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Rose, your poem was well penned. I liked how you incorporated the geese, the sounds, the direction reference, all to make an enjoyable 5-7-5 on the migratory flight of large birds.
well done
steve
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. I love watching them as they migrate and I am always amazed at the amount of noise they can make.
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent! This is well done and very descriptive. The picture is awesome!They do form arrows in the sky,,,great metaphor.Good job
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Excellent! This is well done and very descriptive. The picture is awesome!They do form arrows in the sky,,,great metaphor.Good job
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the thoughtful read and review . I do love to metaphor!
Comment from Father Flaps
Very nice, Mystery Author! There is only one poem that comes close to yours, the hibernating bear. I love your choice of words,
"Fall's arrows
geese honk right of way
noisy sky" ......instantly, you put the picture of a noisy flock of geese overhead. Whenever I hear them, I have to stop and look up. "Fall's arrows" is just plain brilliant! You suggest traffic in the sky as "geese honk (the) right of way". I love it!
Good Luck in the contest! I am pleased to offer six stars!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Very nice, Mystery Author! There is only one poem that comes close to yours, the hibernating bear. I love your choice of words,
"Fall's arrows
geese honk right of way
noisy sky" ......instantly, you put the picture of a noisy flock of geese overhead. Whenever I hear them, I have to stop and look up. "Fall's arrows" is just plain brilliant! You suggest traffic in the sky as "geese honk (the) right of way". I love it!
Good Luck in the contest! I am pleased to offer six stars!
Kimbob
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for the thorough and thoughtful review. I appreciate the extra star too!
Comment from DBastian
Very nice description of the scene. Without the picture, your words depict the scene well. And, as geese are so noisy, I can certainly hear them as I read your words. Great conclusion! Lovely Haiku!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Very nice description of the scene. Without the picture, your words depict the scene well. And, as geese are so noisy, I can certainly hear them as I read your words. Great conclusion! Lovely Haiku!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. I appreciate your thoughtful description of how you viewed the piece.
Comment from Deborah Marie
Beautifully written. Nice flow with exceptional imaginary, color scheme and photo all tying the poem together. This makes your poem "pop" (stand out) even more. I enjoyed reading it and love the rhythm of haiku that your poem has.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Beautifully written. Nice flow with exceptional imaginary, color scheme and photo all tying the poem together. This makes your poem "pop" (stand out) even more. I enjoyed reading it and love the rhythm of haiku that your poem has.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my words. I appreciate the sixth star too.
Comment from Angel Blessings
What a cute Haiku! Loved the presentation, the meaning of your poem was very descriptive. Good background, color was good. Thank you for sharing this nice poem.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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What a cute Haiku! Loved the presentation, the meaning of your poem was very descriptive. Good background, color was good. Thank you for sharing this nice poem.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.