My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 159 "My Dad."All of my poems of release.
16 total reviews
Comment from Jamezy
First time i have read this.. a very difficult subject witten so well.I could feel power in the emotion. i truly hope your Dad is on the road to recovery. Thank you for sharing...
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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First time i have read this.. a very difficult subject witten so well.I could feel power in the emotion. i truly hope your Dad is on the road to recovery. Thank you for sharing...
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Just had a call to say he is getting out this afternoon. Much happiness. Appreciate your review as ever. xx
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That is good news. Hope you are well Jaq...xx
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I hope that the pain, so evident in this piece, has eased somewhat. It is so difficult to see those we love so ill. That helpless feeling pours out from your words. I think this is a good use of the form and you have followed the structure well. It is interesting to see all the different styles. Thank you again for entering the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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I hope that the pain, so evident in this piece, has eased somewhat. It is so difficult to see those we love so ill. That helpless feeling pours out from your words. I think this is a good use of the form and you have followed the structure well. It is interesting to see all the different styles. Thank you again for entering the contest.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you for sponsoring it rosehill. I enjoyed trying out the new style. Thanks for your review. Jaq x
Comment from Joannforsberg
It frightened me to see him there,
all huddled down, vulnerable.
If we can take him home I swear,
him, I'll cradle
Understand.. my dad died a few years ago in the hospital, was hard to watch.
Excellent.. blessings
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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It frightened me to see him there,
all huddled down, vulnerable.
If we can take him home I swear,
him, I'll cradle
Understand.. my dad died a few years ago in the hospital, was hard to watch.
Excellent.. blessings
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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It is so hard to watch, thank you for your review and blessings. Jaq x
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is so very touching. I know how this feels. My dad was the same way, and it's hard to see a strong man brought down by illness and age. You have my vote.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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This is so very touching. I know how this feels. My dad was the same way, and it's hard to see a strong man brought down by illness and age. You have my vote.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Aww thanks Phyllis and yes I agree it is a hard thing to watch. Jaq x
Comment from sgalletti
Great free verse. Brought back such vivid memories of my own father on his death bed, four years ago. Well, I'm reviewing all of these poems. I love the contest and love the form, and thank rosehill as well. That said, 8-8-8-4 so invites an iambic or anapestic meter. She has also specified NO author notes except to thank the artist for the art work and invite impressions of the form. You have accepted this well, including a rhyming poem in a free verse style without a specific meter and great enjambment, and only the required author notes. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Great free verse. Brought back such vivid memories of my own father on his death bed, four years ago. Well, I'm reviewing all of these poems. I love the contest and love the form, and thank rosehill as well. That said, 8-8-8-4 so invites an iambic or anapestic meter. She has also specified NO author notes except to thank the artist for the art work and invite impressions of the form. You have accepted this well, including a rhyming poem in a free verse style without a specific meter and great enjambment, and only the required author notes. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thanks to you Sue for your kind and informative review Jaq x
Comment from bard owl
Your poem describes the helpless feeling of seeing a loved one in a bad situation - in this case, being hospitalized. Your imagery is perfect and quite touching. It is a subject most of us can identify with. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Your poem describes the helpless feeling of seeing a loved one in a bad situation - in this case, being hospitalized. Your imagery is perfect and quite touching. It is a subject most of us can identify with. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Many thanks for your kind appraisal Jaq x
Comment from Silverlock
This is a touching little verse with a wealth of emotion in just a few short lines. Your love and worry for your Dad really shines through. Hope he's on the road to recovery.
Regards, Barb
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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This is a touching little verse with a wealth of emotion in just a few short lines. Your love and worry for your Dad really shines through. Hope he's on the road to recovery.
Regards, Barb
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your kind words Jaq x
Comment from Spike the second
Such lovely sentiments Jaq
this bought home the nightmare I had with my Dad 8 years ago now, he looked exactly as per your photo. The drugs affected him and he kept telling me to turn the car around. I always wondered was there a message I missed.
Great poem and I think you will do well in the contest.
Kind Regards
Spike
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Such lovely sentiments Jaq
this bought home the nightmare I had with my Dad 8 years ago now, he looked exactly as per your photo. The drugs affected him and he kept telling me to turn the car around. I always wondered was there a message I missed.
Great poem and I think you will do well in the contest.
Kind Regards
Spike
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much Spike for your very kind appraisal. I hope you are at peace with it now. Jaq x
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It was so long ago and I think it was his confusion. That day was such a shock to us all. The man looked so healthy before he was rushed into hospital. But as they say life goes on.
Kind Regards
Spike
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It does indeed, thoughts and prayers with you. Jaq x
Comment from Eliza M
OMG Jaq, such a powerful and personal write that is incredibly moving. I too have been in a similar situation with my Dad and with my children and the emotion s overwhelming. My heart goes out to you sweetie and to your family at this worrying time. Liz.x
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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OMG Jaq, such a powerful and personal write that is incredibly moving. I too have been in a similar situation with my Dad and with my children and the emotion s overwhelming. My heart goes out to you sweetie and to your family at this worrying time. Liz.x
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Cheers Liz, it's a wee bit hard just now hon. We will get there. He'll get there, he's a strong man usually. Sorry to hear you had to go through it too. Jaq x
Comment from misscookie
The artwork gbrought tears to my eye. thinking how my low one was wasting away. ande there was nothing I could do but hold him gengtly and keep say It;'s okay go home my love I love you.
Thank you fort sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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The artwork gbrought tears to my eye. thinking how my low one was wasting away. ande there was nothing I could do but hold him gengtly and keep say It;'s okay go home my love I love you.
Thank you fort sharing.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Thank you misscookie for your great review. :) Jaq x
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Your very welcome, until next time.
