My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 164 "My Love Hope."All of my poems of release.
10 total reviews
Comment from Eliza M
Love over lust prevails every time, when its meant to be. Hurt and mistrust, certainly can confuse the two though sometimes. I really like this one Jaq, it flows well and your rhymes sit unforced in well structured lines. Liz.x
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Love over lust prevails every time, when its meant to be. Hurt and mistrust, certainly can confuse the two though sometimes. I really like this one Jaq, it flows well and your rhymes sit unforced in well structured lines. Liz.x
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Cheers Liz glad you enjoyed it my friend. Thanks for the very kind review. :) Jaq x
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Hi, Jaq.
I think there's always 'room for lust', thugh as we either get older individually, or grow within a relationship, it's not so important with everything else taken as a package.
On my screen, there's a space between lines 7 and 8, but I keep getting that problem with the site, both when posting and reading.
Excellent word choices and phrases, though the meter is very jumpy. LOL.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Hi, Jaq.
I think there's always 'room for lust', thugh as we either get older individually, or grow within a relationship, it's not so important with everything else taken as a package.
On my screen, there's a space between lines 7 and 8, but I keep getting that problem with the site, both when posting and reading.
Excellent word choices and phrases, though the meter is very jumpy. LOL.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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The meter was meant to be jumpy Ray ;-) (well it is now anyway) LOL. No it wasn't I am joking. Thanks again for your great review. :) Jaq
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:-) XX
Comment from Spike the second
Ah Jaq
You old romantic you.
I can envisage the likely tales of carnel lust though, a Rab C Nesbitt type asking for a quickie and his missus saying she has a headache LOL.
Seriously though, a lovely poem and I cannot fault it at all.
Kind Regards
Spike
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Ah Jaq
You old romantic you.
I can envisage the likely tales of carnel lust though, a Rab C Nesbitt type asking for a quickie and his missus saying she has a headache LOL.
Seriously though, a lovely poem and I cannot fault it at all.
Kind Regards
Spike
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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LOL Spike I am an old romantic at heart. When you've done all the lust and such-like I think Love may be what I need. :) Jaq x
Comment from Sun-E-Day
Oh i really liked this. The flow and the rhymes were great and made it much each to read. And you definitely set up a sensual scene, the picture also adds to the sensual ambiance. And I really enjoyed the change at the ending, the narrators realizing that s/he wants love rather than lust. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Oh i really liked this. The flow and the rhymes were great and made it much each to read. And you definitely set up a sensual scene, the picture also adds to the sensual ambiance. And I really enjoyed the change at the ending, the narrators realizing that s/he wants love rather than lust. Good job.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you Sun-E-Day for your insightful review. :) Jaq x
Comment from Jaiden I.
This is a great poem. Everything is worded great. Everything fits perfectly! A lot of the stuff you said is deep and breathe taking!!! Great job!!!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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This is a great poem. Everything is worded great. Everything fits perfectly! A lot of the stuff you said is deep and breathe taking!!! Great job!!!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you for your kind appraisal Jaiden, much appreciated. :) Jaq x
Comment from bkbehera
Do I accept that lust will suffice?
My hope of love gone in a trice?
Deep inside my worn out psyche
I do want love that's just for me
I shall hold on to lasting trust
love will find me, no room for lust.
The writer has pictured the ultimate desire in love making in a very romantic and poetic style.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Do I accept that lust will suffice?
My hope of love gone in a trice?
Deep inside my worn out psyche
I do want love that's just for me
I shall hold on to lasting trust
love will find me, no room for lust.
The writer has pictured the ultimate desire in love making in a very romantic and poetic style.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Bkbehera thanks for your kind review. :) Jaq x
Comment from Gungalo
Ayyy yi yi girl. No room for lust? You must have it with the love that you find or nothing will ever be any good. Don't say no to lust.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Ayyy yi yi girl. No room for lust? You must have it with the love that you find or nothing will ever be any good. Don't say no to lust.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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LOL Gungalo, ok then a wee bit of lust wrapped up in a blanket of love ;-) Jaq xx
Comment from ronnie k
Thank you, i admire the ability to not just use but as you have, almost interact, become those very words. I UNDERSTAND, (almost) love, lust and of cause being in love. I shared this poem not only with my love motor but every working part of my emotional life. Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you, i admire the ability to not just use but as you have, almost interact, become those very words. I UNDERSTAND, (almost) love, lust and of cause being in love. I shared this poem not only with my love motor but every working part of my emotional life. Thank you.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your very understanding review ronnie, I really appreciate it. :) Jaq x
Comment from THEHISTORYMAKER
Excellent. Yes, lust does feel like that but love wins every time. You can only be bonked senseless for so long before you need the love that missing.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Excellent. Yes, lust does feel like that but love wins every time. You can only be bonked senseless for so long before you need the love that missing.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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You are indeed right there. Thanks for your kind review. :) x
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
We all want to find love in our lives but sometimes we are tempted by lust which has such a different feeling less meaningful well done on this write regards Jill
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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We all want to find love in our lives but sometimes we are tempted by lust which has such a different feeling less meaningful well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 24-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Thank you once more Jill for a lovely review. :) Jaq x
