senyru(silver snowflakes fall)
senyru something you love16 total reviews
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
This is a great 5-7-5 Senyru poem. The emphatic last line places emphasis on the first two lines without being an extension of them. The reader can almost feel the snowflakes through the well describe words in each line. The artwork goes with the theme of this work and is fascinating in itself. Great job!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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This is a great 5-7-5 Senyru poem. The emphatic last line places emphasis on the first two lines without being an extension of them. The reader can almost feel the snowflakes through the well describe words in each line. The artwork goes with the theme of this work and is fascinating in itself. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Thank you - I love the snow. It brings the child out of all of us
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from Stephen Wolff
Gave me a delicious cold shiver. Everything right about this for me! I'll have to try one of these- never written a Senryu!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Gave me a delicious cold shiver. Everything right about this for me! I'll have to try one of these- never written a Senryu!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Thank you
Comment from l.raven
Winter is my favorite season. I love the first snow too!!!It makes Winter get on it's way. This is a beautiful poem and the picture is perfect.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Winter is my favorite season. I love the first snow too!!!It makes Winter get on it's way. This is a beautiful poem and the picture is perfect.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much
Comment from iloveharpandviolin
A wonderful glimpse to the season to come! I thought it was wonderful how you gave the feeling of the cold with the ...cheeriness and warmth of the experience. And the alliteration worked lovely; I thought it intersting how you even wove the second line more closely, with frosty and face. Good luck in the contest(though you probably won't need it)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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A wonderful glimpse to the season to come! I thought it was wonderful how you gave the feeling of the cold with the ...cheeriness and warmth of the experience. And the alliteration worked lovely; I thought it intersting how you even wove the second line more closely, with frosty and face. Good luck in the contest(though you probably won't need it)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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You'd be suprised what wins in some of these contests, none the less a lovely review. Snow is such a magical "thing" everyone loves it, at first anyway LOL Thank you once again
Comment from Dylan Riley
I thought this was beautiful, we don't get snow this side of the world that often, but the first thing I did when we had this year was go and stand in the snow and your senryu described that perfectly,well done!!!!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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I thought this was beautiful, we don't get snow this side of the world that often, but the first thing I did when we had this year was go and stand in the snow and your senryu described that perfectly,well done!!!!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Dear Dylan, this is such a beautiful review. First snow is such a magical "thing," even to those of us that see it more than once a year. Thank you for reading this senyru, as wished it would be read by all. Hugs
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Pleasure!!!
Comment from Topher Phaestus
I really, really like your alliteration. I think, often, people don't make proper use of poetic devices in poems like these. You did so wonderfully.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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I really, really like your alliteration. I think, often, people don't make proper use of poetic devices in poems like these. You did so wonderfully.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for the lovely compliment and the woodruff review.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
I love snow and the flakes faling and touching my face. So I think your poem has a beautiful feel of winter and yet a beautiful feel of the warmth of an experience gentle as a kiss.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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I love snow and the flakes faling and touching my face. So I think your poem has a beautiful feel of winter and yet a beautiful feel of the warmth of an experience gentle as a kiss.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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Snow is a magical experience, even for those that deplore it. The first snow always enchants and delights. Thank you so much for this lovely review.
Comment from steevie
I can't believe that you would sully this site by introducing a poem about snow this early in the year! LOL
I think this is a well thought out senryu. (please check your spelling of this word atop your poem title line)
Icy seduction works so very well
bravo on this mini masterpiece
all the best in the contest
steve
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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I can't believe that you would sully this site by introducing a poem about snow this early in the year! LOL
I think this is a well thought out senryu. (please check your spelling of this word atop your poem title line)
Icy seduction works so very well
bravo on this mini masterpiece
all the best in the contest
steve
Comment Written 20-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much, and sorry to bring the fact that "winter is in my blood" into this beautiful Fall. I'm not sure what word you speak of that has been misspelled? If it is the title line, they only give me so much space.
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You're very welcome!
Senryu, not Senyru
unless of course there is two ways to spell this word that I am not aware of, and if so, I apologize
I will think happy thoughts when the first snow flies and I promise not to think bad thoughts of you LOL
steve
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
You've written an excellent senryu with romantic imagery painted in an economy of words.
The art work you used is stunning.
You used marvelous allitetation with the S & F words.
Your satori line is great.
I enjoyed your lines:
silver snowflakes fall
icy kisses touch my face...
frosty seduction
I wish you good luck in the Senryu You contest.
I'd recommend your creative Senryu poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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Poet,
You've written an excellent senryu with romantic imagery painted in an economy of words.
The art work you used is stunning.
You used marvelous allitetation with the S & F words.
Your satori line is great.
I enjoyed your lines:
silver snowflakes fall
icy kisses touch my face...
frosty seduction
I wish you good luck in the Senryu You contest.
I'd recommend your creative Senryu poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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Thank you Missy, I'm so glad you liked my senyru!
Comment from alexisleech
This is a lovely senryu to cheer anyone's day. Snow and winter means so many different things to different people, so it was lovely to be reminded how much fun it can be in your poem. Good luck in the contest. Alexis x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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This is a lovely senryu to cheer anyone's day. Snow and winter means so many different things to different people, so it was lovely to be reminded how much fun it can be in your poem. Good luck in the contest. Alexis x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2012
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Thank you, Alexis. I did want to paint a cheerful picture of winter, so glad you saw that.