My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 167 "Hapless Thief."All of my poems of release.
11 total reviews
Comment from gramalot8
Mystery Poet, yahoo for the snarling dog. It's so nice to think that she was saved by her loyal canine. Great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012
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Mystery Poet, yahoo for the snarling dog. It's so nice to think that she was saved by her loyal canine. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind appraisal.
Comment from TammyGail
Lol.. ever funny and perfect for the contest - well written and expressed - perfect use of imagery and great closing lines - thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Lol.. ever funny and perfect for the contest - well written and expressed - perfect use of imagery and great closing lines - thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much as always girlie.
Comment from mommerry
Hooray for you! I loved your poem, it had rhythm, told the story and did a good job with the rhymes. I found no SPAG issues so nothing I can say would help your work.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Hooray for you! I loved your poem, it had rhythm, told the story and did a good job with the rhymes. I found no SPAG issues so nothing I can say would help your work.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind appraisal.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is excellently written with colorful imagery painted by your humorous words.
The art work you used is amazing.
You used fabulous alliteration.
Your rhyme and meter are great.
I enjoyed your second and third stanzas:
In he came to her abode,
with mayhem on his mind.
Sneaking silently about,
for what loot he could find
With stealth he looked around,
his mind was on the prize.
Much too late he looked down,
he couldn't believe his eyes.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your funny poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Poet,
Your poem is excellently written with colorful imagery painted by your humorous words.
The art work you used is amazing.
You used fabulous alliteration.
Your rhyme and meter are great.
I enjoyed your second and third stanzas:
In he came to her abode,
with mayhem on his mind.
Sneaking silently about,
for what loot he could find
With stealth he looked around,
his mind was on the prize.
Much too late he looked down,
he couldn't believe his eyes.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your funny poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much missy. Very much appreciated.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. I like the twist. This time the intruder got the worse end of it. Maybe he can learn unlocked doors don't always mean it is safe to enter. Great work.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I like the twist. This time the intruder got the worse end of it. Maybe he can learn unlocked doors don't always mean it is safe to enter. Great work.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much elliejean, much appreciated.
Comment from terry drake
Those pesky pets can foil a good robbery. Your poem was funny and used good rhymes to enhance your story line and message. Good cadence as we observed the thief in action.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Those pesky pets can foil a good robbery. Your poem was funny and used good rhymes to enhance your story line and message. Good cadence as we observed the thief in action.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Thank you Terry, much appreciated as ever.
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi the author
A clever poem that reads and flows very well. Love the way you have turned the, 'locking of the door' upside down. Have always loved a bit of, 'topsy turvy'.
Kind regards, Pete
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Hi the author
A clever poem that reads and flows very well. Love the way you have turned the, 'locking of the door' upside down. Have always loved a bit of, 'topsy turvy'.
Kind regards, Pete
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2012
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Thank you s much for your very kind review.
Comment from Flamingbush
This is absolutely fantastic. I love the turnaround at the end "Thought foremost on his mind: I wish she'd locked that door!"
"did not foresee her plight" makes it sound as if we know what will happen from the outset, but we don't!"
"he came to her abode with mayhem on his mind" - things are getting scary now
"snarling teeth shone so bright, drool bounced off his denim" - what a great way to introduce the dog!
Nice work, Cujo!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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This is absolutely fantastic. I love the turnaround at the end "Thought foremost on his mind: I wish she'd locked that door!"
"did not foresee her plight" makes it sound as if we know what will happen from the outset, but we don't!"
"he came to her abode with mayhem on his mind" - things are getting scary now
"snarling teeth shone so bright, drool bounced off his denim" - what a great way to introduce the dog!
Nice work, Cujo!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Thanks Flamingbush so glad you liked it. It was a bit of fun to write.
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I'll bet.
Comment from 4tulips
Aha, this is so cute of a poem! I don't know how you came up with such a great little story, but I really enjoyed reading it. The picture helps say it all!! Good choice. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Aha, this is so cute of a poem! I don't know how you came up with such a great little story, but I really enjoyed reading it. The picture helps say it all!! Good choice. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind review.
Comment from Paulina08
I really liked your poem because it wasn't boring and it was funny! The guy was probably suprised when he looked down to see a dog growling at him. Next time he'll probably remind her to lock the door.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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I really liked your poem because it wasn't boring and it was funny! The guy was probably suprised when he looked down to see a dog growling at him. Next time he'll probably remind her to lock the door.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2012
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I'm so glad you got it Paulina, I just wanted to write a light-hearted poem. Thanks for your kind review.
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Thank you for creating this maaster piece. You are truly talented!
