This Emptiness in Heart
Free verse17 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi ameen,
I really do like this excellent poem. You should have entered it in the Love poetry contest as I know it would have done very well. The ending is sad, to me, that our hero is in the wilderness. You have used expressive words that are most compelling. Well done...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi ameen,
I really do like this excellent poem. You should have entered it in the Love poetry contest as I know it would have done very well. The ending is sad, to me, that our hero is in the wilderness. You have used expressive words that are most compelling. Well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hello again my friend, I am pleased you like this write, I appreciate the encouraging review and the kind rating, thank you very much.
Comment from steevie
Sometimes we need to rely on faith, as it can carry us through tough times, even when we think there is no more hope in store for us.
well done
steve
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Sometimes we need to rely on faith, as it can carry us through tough times, even when we think there is no more hope in store for us.
well done
steve
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hello Steve, my friend I appreciate your visit and the insightful review, thank you very much.
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you're very welcome, Ameen
steve
Comment from Peter@Poole
IHHO, this poem is more like the free verse I try to encourage writers to execute, though I'm no authority on this genre. It is clearly not prose, reads more like the Bible I know, which is largely written in poetry though not of this kind. It is the tone, the reverence for God that strikes me as poetic. There's a respectful awe and a childlike questioning. We only use this language in church or mosque, I think.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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IHHO, this poem is more like the free verse I try to encourage writers to execute, though I'm no authority on this genre. It is clearly not prose, reads more like the Bible I know, which is largely written in poetry though not of this kind. It is the tone, the reverence for God that strikes me as poetic. There's a respectful awe and a childlike questioning. We only use this language in church or mosque, I think.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Peter my friend, I am honored and delighted that you like the write, I am highly encouraged by your wonderful comments, appreciate the time and the insightful review, thank you very much.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
It seems to me that we all must travel in the wilderness. Must be our challenge we face to find our path to salvation. Just my thoughts. This is a very good thought provoking poem in which the writer is trying to achieve an answer. Great artwork to enhance your poem,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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It seems to me that we all must travel in the wilderness. Must be our challenge we face to find our path to salvation. Just my thoughts. This is a very good thought provoking poem in which the writer is trying to achieve an answer. Great artwork to enhance your poem,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hello Jim, my friend I appreciate your time and the wonderful, insightful review, thank you very much.
Comment from juliedickson55
Nice image and your words show your deep faith.
I like:"All across the sun's domain"
Always questions of purpose and understanding.
We cannot know the eternal plan of the universe.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Nice image and your words show your deep faith.
I like:"All across the sun's domain"
Always questions of purpose and understanding.
We cannot know the eternal plan of the universe.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Julie my friend, I appreciate your visit and the wonderful reflections, thank you very much.
Comment from cvcopac
You've got some alliteration going and some nice rhythm, a cadence. I guess all we can expect is an ocasional reprieve now and then, Ameen, and be thankful if we get that. cvc
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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You've got some alliteration going and some nice rhythm, a cadence. I guess all we can expect is an ocasional reprieve now and then, Ameen, and be thankful if we get that. cvc
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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cvc my friend, I am honored and delighted that you stopped by, appreciate your time and the insights, thank you very much.
Comment from TammyGail
What a poem this was ameen indeed well written and expressed like always - you weave with wit and soul this one falls more in the soul category - thanks for sharing pleasure to read -
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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What a poem this was ameen indeed well written and expressed like always - you weave with wit and soul this one falls more in the soul category - thanks for sharing pleasure to read -
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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You are very kind my friend, I am pleased you like the writer, thank you very much, God bless you.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, ameen, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the cries of God's children as they wander in the wilderness. i give you my last six star of the week
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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this is very well written, ameen, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the cries of God's children as they wander in the wilderness. i give you my last six star of the week
Comment Written 13-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hello again my friend, very kind of you, I am humbled and pleased you like the write, thank you very much.
Comment from artemis53
I.m not sure if I understand this, Ameen. If you're speaking to God, you're not regally in the wilderness if you have Faith. It can seem like it but it truly isn't.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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I.m not sure if I understand this, Ameen. If you're speaking to God, you're not regally in the wilderness if you have Faith. It can seem like it but it truly isn't.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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I hear you my friend, thank you very much for the insightful review, God bless you.
Comment from Gungalo
Beautiful free verse Ameen and the content of this one is very personal to you. I really liked this:
Why my Beloved
Am I
In
Wilderness?
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Beautiful free verse Ameen and the content of this one is very personal to you. I really liked this:
Why my Beloved
Am I
In
Wilderness?
Comment Written 13-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Gunga my friend, I am pleased you like the write, thank you very much.
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Oh yeah Ameen.
