Knight in Tarnished Armor
Based on real life event27 total reviews
Comment from taelyn13
At first, I wasn't too sure about this but when I got to the core, especially the conversation between the two about love, I loved it. I believe that what her grandmother says to Jimi was really well written. There were a few grammar issues that could be improved, but over all I think this story holds a very strong lesson.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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At first, I wasn't too sure about this but when I got to the core, especially the conversation between the two about love, I loved it. I believe that what her grandmother says to Jimi was really well written. There were a few grammar issues that could be improved, but over all I think this story holds a very strong lesson.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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taelyn13,I apologize for such a late response. I am rarely on this site anymore. Thank you ever so much for this review. I am truly humbled..jls
Comment from Japan4ever
It had a very deep emotional meaning to it that could only be seen through eyes that have a clear definition of what "love" is to themselves. I'm way too young to understand the concept but I can still dream:) I don't have any helpful tips because I see nothing wrong. I just wanted to give my opinion.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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It had a very deep emotional meaning to it that could only be seen through eyes that have a clear definition of what "love" is to themselves. I'm way too young to understand the concept but I can still dream:) I don't have any helpful tips because I see nothing wrong. I just wanted to give my opinion.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Japan4ever, thank you ever so much for reading something that is not even promoted. I am humbled. and thank you for becoming a fan. I apologize for just responding. jlsavell
Comment from Barry1000
This tells a story but more importantly, it has a message and a moral that reveal something about true life and reality that should be embraced. As a "bleeding heart liberal" or a sucker for stories and excuses, I find it affirming to hear of the grandmother that convinced her granddaughter to give her ex another chance and to appreciate what the trauma he has suffered. Too many people I know are overwhelmed with their own traumas to recognize that young people who make big mistakes and live poorly may have seen or experienced trauma and their problems and bad behavior come from pain, rather from being "spoiled" or over-indulged. I think this author knows that we all have an obligation to those we have loved or made commitments to, to do our best to help them get through the difficult times and to reassure them of our commitment, while asking where the pain comes from and foregoing self-righteousness at least until there is truly no forgiveness or hope of rehabilitation. The scenes are vivid and the love shared between grandmother and granddaughter is indelibly impressed upon the reader with great skill.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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This tells a story but more importantly, it has a message and a moral that reveal something about true life and reality that should be embraced. As a "bleeding heart liberal" or a sucker for stories and excuses, I find it affirming to hear of the grandmother that convinced her granddaughter to give her ex another chance and to appreciate what the trauma he has suffered. Too many people I know are overwhelmed with their own traumas to recognize that young people who make big mistakes and live poorly may have seen or experienced trauma and their problems and bad behavior come from pain, rather from being "spoiled" or over-indulged. I think this author knows that we all have an obligation to those we have loved or made commitments to, to do our best to help them get through the difficult times and to reassure them of our commitment, while asking where the pain comes from and foregoing self-righteousness at least until there is truly no forgiveness or hope of rehabilitation. The scenes are vivid and the love shared between grandmother and granddaughter is indelibly impressed upon the reader with great skill.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Barry1000, I apologize for just responding. Thank you ever so much for reading this work, especially since it was not promoted. again thank you... jlsavell
Comment from MM lives on :)
Dear talented writer, this was one of the best stories I have read on this site and not only a romance story but one we all can share and take home a message.
You are a talent and exceptional writer unlike any other I have read. Be proud and bless you!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Dear talented writer, this was one of the best stories I have read on this site and not only a romance story but one we all can share and take home a message.
You are a talent and exceptional writer unlike any other I have read. Be proud and bless you!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Poetic Prison, I apologize for the delay in responding to your exceptional review and compliment. It humbles me greatly.. thank you ever ever so much... jlsavell
Comment from Father Flaps
Dear Jimi, This story should be published in Reader's Digest or some other well-read magazine. It is priceless, and well-written. I could find nothing wrong with it. It's rich in imagery. Your vocabulary is, as usual, impeccable. I would offer just one small thing... "cricket choirs" instead of "choir of crickets".
It seems to me that you wrote about Emma and Edwin before in a beautiful poem I reviewed. Am I imagining that? It seems so familiar.
This is just a wonderful romantic story. But then you are the Queen of Romance, Jimi!
Excellent!
your ardent fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Dear Jimi, This story should be published in Reader's Digest or some other well-read magazine. It is priceless, and well-written. I could find nothing wrong with it. It's rich in imagery. Your vocabulary is, as usual, impeccable. I would offer just one small thing... "cricket choirs" instead of "choir of crickets".
It seems to me that you wrote about Emma and Edwin before in a beautiful poem I reviewed. Am I imagining that? It seems so familiar.
This is just a wonderful romantic story. But then you are the Queen of Romance, Jimi!
Excellent!
your ardent fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Kimbob, how so very very kind of you! I always look forward to your reviews and of course, your postings. thank you so very much wonderful friend... jimi
Comment from Eleanor Buron
This is a wonderful story filled with deeply felt emotion. I felt I was in Emma's house searching with you for the Grandmother's secret. I love the way her story and your's come together in the end. Knights in shining armour . . .;) beautifully written and the ending is a heart warmer worth a few tears.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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This is a wonderful story filled with deeply felt emotion. I felt I was in Emma's house searching with you for the Grandmother's secret. I love the way her story and your's come together in the end. Knights in shining armour . . .;) beautifully written and the ending is a heart warmer worth a few tears.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Ellie, thank you so very much. I am always so very delighted when you stop by to read my work. jimi
Comment from Aussie
Your story touched my heart in memories of my own grandmother and the smell of lilac. I wish you had submitted this for the biographical true story contest. A wonderful telling of the life and death of your dearest. What a wise woman she was, the part that really polished the story was her advice to you about John and the acting upon it. I wish I had six stars to give you. One of your best stories - when you write from memory and with love your story touches the heart of the reader. ******* seven virtual stars!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Your story touched my heart in memories of my own grandmother and the smell of lilac. I wish you had submitted this for the biographical true story contest. A wonderful telling of the life and death of your dearest. What a wise woman she was, the part that really polished the story was her advice to you about John and the acting upon it. I wish I had six stars to give you. One of your best stories - when you write from memory and with love your story touches the heart of the reader. ******* seven virtual stars!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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And to you sweet sweet Kace, I am humbled, truly,, thank you ever so much. I do understand about stars and what I really care about is your friendship and support of my work. I will submit another story in that contest, just because of your encouragement. thank you sweet sweet friend... jimi
Comment from Hitcher
Nice Jimi, very nice friend, I think the truth of your words and the story you have told hinges on the power of true love, too many give up on there dreams far to easily these days friend, or they were simply never truly in LOVE, I couldn't imagine not being with Moana or my children...EVER. Lets hope some of your readers take time to reflect and take stock after reading this one friend. This one is priceless :)
Have you ever seen the movie;When love is not enough, The Lois Wilson story. I think you would enjoy this one friend and it redifines the meaning of true love, plus it is based on a true story, not normally something I would watch but then Moana picked it. Hitch
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Nice Jimi, very nice friend, I think the truth of your words and the story you have told hinges on the power of true love, too many give up on there dreams far to easily these days friend, or they were simply never truly in LOVE, I couldn't imagine not being with Moana or my children...EVER. Lets hope some of your readers take time to reflect and take stock after reading this one friend. This one is priceless :)
Have you ever seen the movie;When love is not enough, The Lois Wilson story. I think you would enjoy this one friend and it redifines the meaning of true love, plus it is based on a true story, not normally something I would watch but then Moana picked it. Hitch
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Hitcher, sweet sweet friend, thank you ever so much. Yes, I know how much you love your wife, it spills in your work. Anyone who cannot see it is blind. No, I have not seen the movie, but I will research it.. take care my sweet friend and thank you ever ever so much... jimi
Comment from saychirah
This is lovely. I enjoyed your flow with words and the sad but interesting nature of your story. You are a good writer. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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This is lovely. I enjoyed your flow with words and the sad but interesting nature of your story. You are a good writer. Keep it up!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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saychirah, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am humbled by your review and compliment... jlsavell
Comment from Joe Hudson
What a romantic story....and I usually don't like such material. But this is great! Our service men come back bearing scars and baggage we can't begin to understand. The turmoil they experience and the demons that accompany them back is beyond most of our imaginations. Well done! Great piece of work. Joe
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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What a romantic story....and I usually don't like such material. But this is great! Our service men come back bearing scars and baggage we can't begin to understand. The turmoil they experience and the demons that accompany them back is beyond most of our imaginations. Well done! Great piece of work. Joe
Comment Written 09-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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Joe, once again a big big thank you!!If ever I believed angels walked this Earth, I would have no doubt my Grandmother was one, eerie. And yes, you are right about a veterans demons. thank you once again sweet friend.... jimi