Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
I am blown away by your writing! This is fabulous! Your characters are so well described, I feel I know each of them personally. The details of the dream are so visible, like a movie image in front of my face. This is worth ten stars!!!!
Sorry I'm so slow reading the chapters, but I'm relishing each one! You are a stellar writer!
Off topic: I found a second-hand copy of Hanta Yo. I should receive it in several weeks. I can't wait to read the book.
Have a great night!
Bye my friend!
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2014
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Hi, Bev.
I am blown away by your writing! This is fabulous! Your characters are so well described, I feel I know each of them personally. The details of the dream are so visible, like a movie image in front of my face. This is worth ten stars!!!!
Sorry I'm so slow reading the chapters, but I'm relishing each one! You are a stellar writer!
Off topic: I found a second-hand copy of Hanta Yo. I should receive it in several weeks. I can't wait to read the book.
Have a great night!
Bye my friend!
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2014
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Hi, Rosalyne. Thanks so much for taking time to read this chapter. I'm getting all excited again about my story thanks to you! What a doll you are. Don't apologize at all, it's a really nice gesture that you're taking time to read from the beginning.
I'm thrilled you found a copy of Hanta Yo! It's a bit slow reading because it's so authentically written by Ruth Beebe Hill.
I look forward to hearing your thoughts on it.
So appreciate you!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from wordsfromsue
A crow dropped unto (onto?) the step below....
Holy Moly, what a spooky, scaring me chapter! Jana surely has some awful dreams. :-( I don't know that I'd think of that as a gift either!
Really riveting chapter, Bev!!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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A crow dropped unto (onto?) the step below....
Holy Moly, what a spooky, scaring me chapter! Jana surely has some awful dreams. :-( I don't know that I'd think of that as a gift either!
Really riveting chapter, Bev!!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Hi, Sue. What a lovely and generous review. I really appreciate you taking time to read the chapter and send along your insights. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
My daughter had a friend in school named Tanika. not sure if it was spelled the same. They pronounced it Ta nee kah.
Well it appears that I have reached the final chapter until you write and post the next one. I can't wait to read on.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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My daughter had a friend in school named Tanika. not sure if it was spelled the same. They pronounced it Ta nee kah.
Well it appears that I have reached the final chapter until you write and post the next one. I can't wait to read on.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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I've got a chapter coming out Wed. or Thursday, I hope. The last few have taken longer due to the emotional content. Thanks so much for the encouragement, Joy. A Big Hug, Bev
Comment from Alexmi1984
I loved reading this story. I loved your characters, your descriptions and the sense of rising suspense that came out of this story. I can't wait to read more.
Alex :)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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I loved reading this story. I loved your characters, your descriptions and the sense of rising suspense that came out of this story. I can't wait to read more.
Alex :)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Hi, Alex. Thank you so much for choosing to read my chapter! I appreciate your generosity and support. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Misrael
This was a very good and interesting story but also very weird and gory as well. It will be interesting to find out what happens next. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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This was a very good and interesting story but also very weird and gory as well. It will be interesting to find out what happens next. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you much, Misrael. I appreciate the time you took read and review my chapter! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from EMB
I'm not sure what the italics is supposed to represent with her dreaming, but I think it was a bit much. Somewhat distracting for so much italics. I'm not familiar with what's going on, but I enjoyed the realism of your characters. Is Jana someone who has the powers of a shaman or something? It was difficult to tell, but it was interesting. A Ghost Whisperer? :)
Here are my notes:
...when the remains of a murdered child were returned at long last. (This is wonderful realism of how police work really is. I appreciated this illustration.)
"No, Sir. Upon arriving here...(Lowercase "sir.")
"Thank you, Sir." He tipped his cap and smiled. (Same here.)
...the shadow people that hovered around her bed. (Didn't expect the supernatural in a mystery and crime novel. Interesting.)
Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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I'm not sure what the italics is supposed to represent with her dreaming, but I think it was a bit much. Somewhat distracting for so much italics. I'm not familiar with what's going on, but I enjoyed the realism of your characters. Is Jana someone who has the powers of a shaman or something? It was difficult to tell, but it was interesting. A Ghost Whisperer? :)
Here are my notes:
...when the remains of a murdered child were returned at long last. (This is wonderful realism of how police work really is. I appreciated this illustration.)
"No, Sir. Upon arriving here...(Lowercase "sir.")
"Thank you, Sir." He tipped his cap and smiled. (Same here.)
...the shadow people that hovered around her bed. (Didn't expect the supernatural in a mystery and crime novel. Interesting.)
Great job.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi, Edward. I'm going to think on your comment about the 'distracting' quality of the italics. I appreciate you mentioning that.
Jana has inherited her uncle's spiritual abilities, but has not fully embraced it due to her work in the white man's world of law enforcement.
I really appreciate you taking time to read and review so generously.
Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Curly Girly
I read it slowly right through. I could find no problems with SPAG anywhere. You must have edited this very well already. No problems here. Best wishes with it. CG
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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I read it slowly right through. I could find no problems with SPAG anywhere. You must have edited this very well already. No problems here. Best wishes with it. CG
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you much, Curly Girly. Like the name! Regards, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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Hi, Bev - so pleased to get back to your story - have been taking care of my older sister and I never settle well in someone elses home - I did manage to get some editing done on my book I finished last Dec - had Colin's lap top with me and my memory stick.
Hope all is well.
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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rage."Before -- space after period
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Hi, Bev - so pleased to get back to your story - have been taking care of my older sister and I never settle well in someone elses home - I did manage to get some editing done on my book I finished last Dec - had Colin's lap top with me and my memory stick.
Hope all is well.
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi, Margaret. Sounds like you got some good work done while on your forced sabbatical. Hope you sister is doing well.
Thanks for the grand review. I'll bet your inbox is crazy! Don't envy you, my friend. Will change that SPAG. Great to hear from you and see you back posting.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from mr elis
The reader-found this mystery paper intrigued from the very fist line to the last one, the reader kept on asking-if this was real drama of life or a night mare Jan was experiencing.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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The reader-found this mystery paper intrigued from the very fist line to the last one, the reader kept on asking-if this was real drama of life or a night mare Jan was experiencing.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi, Mr. Elis. Thank you for choosing to read my chapter. I really apprecite your support and generosity. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Eleanor Buron
I immediately was drawn into the setting. The characters appear realistic with distinctive personalities. The dialogue and thought processes move the story along at a fast clip. There's a sinister foreshadowing taking place during the dream and when Jana awakes remembering the words of the raging entity with the dragon-tattoo - I am invincible - This is a well written chapter that held my interest from beginning to end! (system would only let me give a 5)
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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I immediately was drawn into the setting. The characters appear realistic with distinctive personalities. The dialogue and thought processes move the story along at a fast clip. There's a sinister foreshadowing taking place during the dream and when Jana awakes remembering the words of the raging entity with the dragon-tattoo - I am invincible - This is a well written chapter that held my interest from beginning to end! (system would only let me give a 5)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi, Elly. Thank you so much for your wonderful review and supportive insights. I sure appreciate you taking time to read my chapter. You are most kind -- appreciate the thought for a six, too. Kindest regards, Bev
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Bev, You're welcome. Kindest regards back. Elly
