Comment from Earl of Oxford

Exceptional

Hi, Jaq.

I'm afraid I have nothing constructive to say to improve this chillinc, captivating and dramaic description of hell.

Excellent alliteration throughout.

Amazing imagination and apt strong and eloquent vocabulary.

This place sounds like fun, and the heating bills are low. ;-)

Seriously, this is captivating and a pleasure to award one of my meanie sixers to.

Best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012

Wow thank you so much Ray. It always means so much when the more established writers take time out to review my work too. Although all critique is greatly appreciated. :) Jaq x

reply by Earl of Oxford on 18-Sep-2012

No probs, Jaq. This was a treat to read and even scared me a bit - and I'm not easily scared by words. Ray x

Comment from terry drake

Excellent

The final hours are approaching as we watch the anti-Christ on TV. We struggle with our past in hopes that all transgressions have been forgiven as we look toward the end of days the Myans say.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012

The Mayan calendar is indeed coming to an end. Will it be the end of life as we know it? Or is it just the 'Great Shift'? The world changing? We will know soon enough.

Comment from wiljacro

Excellent

HI! Jaq Cee. This is certainly a very dramatic description of Hell and your Artwork is perfact for this piece. Iread this with great interest, then strangely, a totally different scene sprang to mind. It was of the Home fans at a local derby match and their reaction when there team lost 5 nil. Amazing what can stir the imagination.It is still a really great poem. wiljacro.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. The power of imagination is a wonderful thing. :) Jaq x

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I liked your picture and horror-like poem a lot. Something a bit different from the usual. Quatrains with good flow and no rhyme. You created a picture of demons and Hell.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012

Thanks for your kind words robina it's always nice to try something different. :) Jaq x

reply by robina1978 on 16-Sep-2012

Yes, very nice. Ine

Comment from Eliza M

Excellent

Wow Jaq! You have created some very vivd and effective imagery in this powerful poem. It brings to mind Milton's Paradise Lost epic, that I studied for 'A level' English, along with Queen's Bohemian Rapsody!LOL!
Beelebub and his minions etc!
Good assonance with 'lights bright' and alliteration with 'Demon's dance' and 'straddle Satan's'
Well done! Liz.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012

Thanks for your great review Liz, I always enjoy reading what you think of my writing. It means a lot. :) Jaq x

Comment from TammyGail

Exceptional

Love your creative use of wording in this poem indeed I wish more would adapt use of such - you weaved in ink in a fashion that wasn't weak nor too over the top and when writing on this subject it can be tricky not to fall into the same old over played words you did ever well by not falling in the boring ink well of doom lol - thanks for sharing always a pleasure

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012

Thanks so much for your review Tammy always grateful for your thoughts. :) Jaq x

Comment from doris1022

Excellent

The subject gave me the creeps right from the start...but Over all the poem is well written and to the point. You describe your subject great and enough to be emotionally scary. The artwork is great for the subject also...gruesome!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012

Thanks for your appraisal Doris. I do enjoy a bit of scary poetry
:) Jaq x

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend well I hope to know the difference but at time I do wonder the ways things go sometimes in the world today . This is well written with strong images painted well done my friend regards Jill

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012

Me too Jill, but as you say, this world today does make you doubt things you've always thought clear. Thanks again for reading and commenting, means a lot. :) Jaq x