My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 204 "Touching Love."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from terry drake
5-7-5 syllable count verse format challenge successfully accomplished with your three line poem. Congratulations on your poem and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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5-7-5 syllable count verse format challenge successfully accomplished with your three line poem. Congratulations on your poem and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thanks Terry it's heartening when people like yourself take the time to comment. Much appreciated. :) Jaq x
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your 5-7-5 love poem is beautifully written with rich imagery painted by your three lines.
The art work is gorgeous you used.
You used excellent alliteration with the L words.
You used great metaphor.
You used very good rhymes.
I like your satori line.
I enjoyed all three lines:
Enchantment abounds
My heart rhythmically pounds
At last, love I've found
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your lovely 5-7-5 love poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Poet,
Your 5-7-5 love poem is beautifully written with rich imagery painted by your three lines.
The art work is gorgeous you used.
You used excellent alliteration with the L words.
You used great metaphor.
You used very good rhymes.
I like your satori line.
I enjoyed all three lines:
Enchantment abounds
My heart rhythmically pounds
At last, love I've found
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your lovely 5-7-5 love poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind review. :)
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. The stage when you first feel love is so great. You feel like you are in heaven. The stages of love changes but the love grows stronger. Great work.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. The stage when you first feel love is so great. You feel like you are in heaven. The stages of love changes but the love grows stronger. Great work.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you Elliejean, it it a special moment indeed. :)
Comment from MAMONIA
I'm so happy for you. No one should ever
have to go through life with "love" and
knowing the good feelings of loving.
This is very beautiful and the artwork is
stupendous.
Great entry.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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I'm so happy for you. No one should ever
have to go through life with "love" and
knowing the good feelings of loving.
This is very beautiful and the artwork is
stupendous.
Great entry.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for your lovely words.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a pretty love poem that correctly meets the 5-7-5 criteria required, with a bonus of some rhyming. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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This is a pretty love poem that correctly meets the 5-7-5 criteria required, with a bonus of some rhyming. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
Comment from cce29
Great photo and title for your poem. Also, you followed the prompt well. Yur poem flows well, which is hard for a lot of people to do in a 5-7-5. Yur poem is very true, about how it feels to find love. And if it's true love, the quick beating heart never goes away. It's a great feeling. I wish you luck in the contest, and look forward to reading more of your work
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Great photo and title for your poem. Also, you followed the prompt well. Yur poem flows well, which is hard for a lot of people to do in a 5-7-5. Yur poem is very true, about how it feels to find love. And if it's true love, the quick beating heart never goes away. It's a great feeling. I wish you luck in the contest, and look forward to reading more of your work
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind appraisal.
Comment from santapola
I like the way you even rhymed your seventeen syllables with this enchanting write, very enjoyable. My only criticism and it isn't really one it try not to put red fonts on black background it may look nice but it is difficult to read.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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I like the way you even rhymed your seventeen syllables with this enchanting write, very enjoyable. My only criticism and it isn't really one it try not to put red fonts on black background it may look nice but it is difficult to read.
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Ahhh yes I didn't think of that. Thank you for your critique.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written a rhyming short verse which is very beautiful well done good luck in the contest I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Yes this is well written a rhyming short verse which is very beautiful well done good luck in the contest I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Jill, much appreciated.
Comment from Eliza M
Stunning presentation of this evocative little poem. You really conjure up that exiciting rush of powerful feelings that abound in the first flush of love. Syllable count works fine and reads well as rhythmically (4) in this case.
Good luck! Liz.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Stunning presentation of this evocative little poem. You really conjure up that exiciting rush of powerful feelings that abound in the first flush of love. Syllable count works fine and reads well as rhythmically (4) in this case.
Good luck! Liz.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind review. That's the way I saw rhythmically in this case. :)
Comment from EMB
This is yet another good entry into the contest. However, I kept getting stuck on the syllable count of rhythmically. It sounds like three: "Rithmickly" But that could be my weird way of pronouncing it.
Nice one.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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This is yet another good entry into the contest. However, I kept getting stuck on the syllable count of rhythmically. It sounds like three: "Rithmickly" But that could be my weird way of pronouncing it.
Nice one.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Hmmm I see what you mean. I pronounce it "Rith-mic-al-ly" I wonder. Thanks for pointing this out and for your review.
