Comment from Taffspride

Excellent

You had me hooked in the first paragraph. I must confess to chuckling in several places, despite the reasons for their career change.

Your story read easily, keeping your readers attention throughout.

The ending was so appropriate for this work. The Deadwood Saloon for a Bloody Mary, that made me chuckle the most.

Well done on writing such an interesting topic.

Iechyd da
Taffspride

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012

Thank you so much for the review and great comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. When I saw the picture, I didn't know where to go with it but they sort of looked unemployed to me.
Beth

reply by Taffspride on 19-Aug-2012

Do't you kind of wish they could be permenantly unemployed? Hope you enjoy your writing group as much as I do ours.

Iechyd da
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Comment from Crystal Carey

Excellent

Well it is true no matter how many cures human kind comes up with, there will most definitely always be violence, and prejudice. I enjoyed your story very much it was fun to read, and very descriptive.

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 Comment Written 19-Aug-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012

Thank you so very much for the review and comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read this.
Beth