Hedgerow Friends
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Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This was another favorite of the girls They kept awwing all the way through at the animals all helping the beaver. Very nice work!!
'There must.(extra period here) be one near,
I could have sworn there was another nit I noticed but I cannot find it now so hopefully it was already pointed out and fixed.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2012
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This was another favorite of the girls They kept awwing all the way through at the animals all helping the beaver. Very nice work!!
'There must.(extra period here) be one near,
I could have sworn there was another nit I noticed but I cannot find it now so hopefully it was already pointed out and fixed.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2012
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Thank you again, Patty for the nit pick, I do so appreciate the help here, I have taken it out now. It's great to know that your girls enjoy these stories. As they are aimed at children it helps to know that at that age they will enjoy them. Saying that, I don't know how old they are. I keep being asked at what age group are the stories aimed for, and quite honestly, I have no idea!! LOL! Thank you again! xsx
Comment from Jaxson Phoenix
I think it is perfect. It has a great story and it keeps your interest all the way through. It is sure to be a favorite of children everywhere. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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I think it is perfect. It has a great story and it keeps your interest all the way through. It is sure to be a favorite of children everywhere. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, Jaxson, for this lovely review!! I am so pleased you enjoyed it, thank you. xsx
Comment from guinea
This is very good. I think children will love it. Shows deep thinking. I did find a couple of errors.
he heard a someone talk.
the word he was lookinng for
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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This is very good. I think children will love it. Shows deep thinking. I did find a couple of errors.
he heard a someone talk.
the word he was lookinng for
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for this really nice review, I m so pleased you enjoyed it. And loads of thanks for finding those errors!! I go over and over my work, but somehow I missed those ones, I really appreciate your help, thank you! xsx
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This is such a cute piece. I don't know how you kept the rhyme and flow up for so long and have it read so well. Great job with this.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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This is such a cute piece. I don't know how you kept the rhyme and flow up for so long and have it read so well. Great job with this.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much Scarlet for this really nice review, I'm really pleased you enjoyed my story, Thank you! xsx
Comment from tinams
This is another very well told installment to your delightful children's stories that teaches about helping others. Well done Bodger :) Tina
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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This is another very well told installment to your delightful children's stories that teaches about helping others. Well done Bodger :) Tina
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Tina for this wonderful review, I'm so glad you still like them! xsx
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Leave it to the Beaver. This was a fabulous children's poem. I'm sure the kiddies will love it. Could even be set to song! So thanks for posting this cute little ditty here, and thanks so much for the 8 points and 82 member cents (and maybe more).
cheers
js
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Leave it to the Beaver. This was a fabulous children's poem. I'm sure the kiddies will love it. Could even be set to song! So thanks for posting this cute little ditty here, and thanks so much for the 8 points and 82 member cents (and maybe more).
cheers
js
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Thank you, never thought of it as a song, might have a bash at that! Hope you got the (and maybe more!) for this great review, I am so pleased you liked it. xsx
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Sandra, you have truly have outdone yourself with this chapter. The imagery you present has me feeling small enough to witness the things that all these wonderful characters are doing for Bodger. They remind me of my guy Cody.
This is so well written my friend. Another chapter you should be very proud of, cause, I know that I am.
Keep them coming Sandra,,,,,,,Jim xx
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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Sandra, you have truly have outdone yourself with this chapter. The imagery you present has me feeling small enough to witness the things that all these wonderful characters are doing for Bodger. They remind me of my guy Cody.
This is so well written my friend. Another chapter you should be very proud of, cause, I know that I am.
Keep them coming Sandra,,,,,,,Jim xx
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
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What a lovely thing to say, Jim!! Thank you! It is so nice to know you do enjoy my stories, even though they are for children!! The funny thing is, I get as much fun out of these as you get satisfaction out of yours, and for you to liken my little friends to Cody,and give it 6 stars is such a compliment, thank you so very much!! Always your friend, Sandra. x
Comment from Silverlock
You know I'm a sucker for your Hedgerow tales, Sandra, and this one's no exception. Charming, as usual :) the only tiny thing I'd change (personal preference, mind you) is:
He wanted just once to win the first prize, instead of
He just wanted once to win the first prize...what do you think?
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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You know I'm a sucker for your Hedgerow tales, Sandra, and this one's no exception. Charming, as usual :) the only tiny thing I'd change (personal preference, mind you) is:
He wanted just once to win the first prize, instead of
He just wanted once to win the first prize...what do you think?
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for your input, Silverlock, it does work better and I have just changed it. I have had some incredible feed back from FS reviewers, all of which have been constructive and so very helpful. You are all a great bunch of people and I am so pleased I am one of you. Thank you for such a lovely review, and many, many more thanks for the 6 stars! I really am so pleased you are still enjoying reading them, thank you! xsx
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You are welcome!
Comment from Hollyhock
I think I'm tired of saying, "Another great story"! But it is, I shall just have to find new ways to express myself.
The only bit I'm not happy about is the first two lines of the second stanza, because they're not really girls and boys, are they? Bodger is of their world so maybe they are strangers, but still animals.
One or two suggestions to improve rhythm,
"How long will it take?" enquired Tommy Mouse -
Sandra, here's a suggestion.
"Just at that moment he heard someone talk
It sounded like youngsters, all out for a walk/ enjoying a walk" - What do you think?
Anyway, I loved it, I am so looking forward to seeing everything in print with illustrations!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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I think I'm tired of saying, "Another great story"! But it is, I shall just have to find new ways to express myself.
The only bit I'm not happy about is the first two lines of the second stanza, because they're not really girls and boys, are they? Bodger is of their world so maybe they are strangers, but still animals.
One or two suggestions to improve rhythm,
"How long will it take?" enquired Tommy Mouse -
Sandra, here's a suggestion.
"Just at that moment he heard someone talk
It sounded like youngsters, all out for a walk/ enjoying a walk" - What do you think?
Anyway, I loved it, I am so looking forward to seeing everything in print with illustrations!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for these great suggestions, Hollyhock. I am going to change them The one I will have a problem with is the girls and boys, I felt uncomfortable with that too, I will work on that line. I am glad you are still enjoying these stories even more so when I get such helpful feedback. The illustrations in the first book, Hedgerow Capers, are amazing, Corrina from FanArt has done me proud, they are just brilliant. It's funny, now she has put faces to my names, I am imagining them when I write the stories as if they are real!! If you go into FanArt and click on corrinas creations, you will see some of them . Thanks again, Hollyhock, for the review and for the help! xsx
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Have put another suggestion on the original review, hope it helps.
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Hey!! that is brilliant, going to change it now! thanks a lot, you are wonderful!! xsx
Comment from misscookie
I'M NOT THE RIGHT ONE TO TELL YOU HOW TO IMPROVE ON THIS CHAPTER.
I FOUND IT TO BE A VERY NOT ONLY INTERESTING STORY TO READ.
BUT VERY EDUCATIONAL TOO.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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I'M NOT THE RIGHT ONE TO TELL YOU HOW TO IMPROVE ON THIS CHAPTER.
I FOUND IT TO BE A VERY NOT ONLY INTERESTING STORY TO READ.
BUT VERY EDUCATIONAL TOO.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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That is such a lovely review, misscookie, thank you. I did look up about the habits of the beaver and was amazed at how they build their dam and what they do to keep their winter food fresh. They are quite something. I thought I'd better get it right to a degree as beavers are more common in the US and Canada. We don't have them in England or Spain. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks again for your lovely review. xsx
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My pleasure.
