In a Subjunctive Mood
a fun short script - easy read - in the bath!24 total reviews
Comment from Essence16
This was a very interesting and creative script. I enjoyed the storyline and i think that the details you used were very helpful. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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This was a very interesting and creative script. I enjoyed the storyline and i think that the details you used were very helpful. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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thx for reviewing!
Comment from Spitfire
I can see this on stage. Directors would love it. Only one character to deal with. Very humorous dialogue and actions concerning cleavage and "flat fried eyes" plus remarks about a bush. I think this would bring back memories and get many laughs.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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I can see this on stage. Directors would love it. Only one character to deal with. Very humorous dialogue and actions concerning cleavage and "flat fried eyes" plus remarks about a bush. I think this would bring back memories and get many laughs.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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well hopefully it was flat fried EGGS dear! thx so much for taking a peek at Subjunctive Mood ... it's a fun piece! (I also have a version with my MIME in in, mirroring what I'm telling in story, but thought it best not to be toooooo confuuuuusing!!! Blessings! Sharyn
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My bad. A typo. Eggs, of course. I loved the bit about subjunctive mood. As an English teacher, I understood the reference. Not sure, others would.
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I'm sure most didn't - but it's my private joke - besides, they don't teach English in American schools ... they don't even teach AMERICAN in American schools!!!! last of a dying breed I'm afraid!
Comment from jaeladarling
I love this! And that's saying a lot, since I generally skip over scripts. :) I love this:
"How come the movie star ladies can just lie in their bubble baths all day long with all their private parts totally covered in bubbles? MY bubbles always disappear!"
I've wondered that before too! LOL
Nice work!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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I love this! And that's saying a lot, since I generally skip over scripts. :) I love this:
"How come the movie star ladies can just lie in their bubble baths all day long with all their private parts totally covered in bubbles? MY bubbles always disappear!"
I've wondered that before too! LOL
Nice work!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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aah - good to know we contemplate the same "meaning of life" questions! thx so much for tackling a script - I virtually threw away the FS "Advanced Editor" (which is not at all advanced) and re-formatted the piece to make it not so formidable looking - hope it helped! And please do jump into more!!! (Did you already look at the other one of still on the Featured page for a little longer, "Not the Earth Mother Type"? I think you'd probably enjoy that one too! You're on a roll! Blessing - Sharyn
Comment from ShannyT
I love this idea. I can't wait to see the next part. It was really creative the way you had her in a bath tub, and her speech is totally like an 11 year old. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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I love this idea. I can't wait to see the next part. It was really creative the way you had her in a bath tub, and her speech is totally like an 11 year old. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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oh good! you'll love the next piece, where she's a 12-going-on-13 year old and has a LOT more to contribute about the fact that growng up SUCKS. THANKS so much for reviewing Shanny T!
Comment from mk
great monologue..I thoroughly enjoyed it. We have all been her (at least us girls) and you did a splendid job of capturing the spirit of an 11 year old. The snorkel and mask were a nice touch
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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great monologue..I thoroughly enjoyed it. We have all been her (at least us girls) and you did a splendid job of capturing the spirit of an 11 year old. The snorkel and mask were a nice touch
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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aaah yes, I enjoyed the snorkel & mask too - and my poor MIME will murder me for it! Thx so much for reviewing mk! Do take a look at "Not the Earth Mother Type" which is also on the feature list and gives great review $$ today! blessings! Sharyn
Comment from amada
I must confess I never read a script before. Oh yes, we like to go to plays but never realized the work involved. This is quite a story, sad as well. For sure you bring a soul.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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I must confess I never read a script before. Oh yes, we like to go to plays but never realized the work involved. This is quite a story, sad as well. For sure you bring a soul.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Well thanks Amada - so glad you decided to tackle a script! I'm on a campaign to make them easier for people to read, so good for you!! Please also peek at my other one while it's still on the featured page and giving good review $$ - "Not the Earth Mother Type" - I think you'll enjoy it! Blessings!
Comment from Larry Talbot
Simply brilliant.
Beautifully defined (and charming) character, outstanding use of visuals and dialogue that out and out bristles with a fearless charm.
I cannot make a recommendation about this piece, much as I would like to. I actually believe it is perfect.
Six stars for you. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Simply brilliant.
Beautifully defined (and charming) character, outstanding use of visuals and dialogue that out and out bristles with a fearless charm.
I cannot make a recommendation about this piece, much as I would like to. I actually believe it is perfect.
Six stars for you. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Larry - you have totally made my day! Thank you SO much for reading, understanding and enjoying! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from purrfect tale
Dialogue sounded exactly like an eleven-year-old kid, but I liked the other one much better. I don't really see a point to this one.
All princess(es) and movie stars have long hair. - if this error was on purpose cause she's 11, ignore. LOL
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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Dialogue sounded exactly like an eleven-year-old kid, but I liked the other one much better. I don't really see a point to this one.
All princess(es) and movie stars have long hair. - if this error was on purpose cause she's 11, ignore. LOL
Comment Written 14-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2012
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OOOPS thanks for catching! will correct! aah - this one is part of a bigger piece about a mother/child relationship with mother overshadowing child's personality ...
Comment from Heaven Bound
Nice job. It's interesting to try to put your story in a picture in my mind, as if it were on stage. Kind of hilarious in a way. Nice choice of people for the story.
Thanks.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2012
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Nice job. It's interesting to try to put your story in a picture in my mind, as if it were on stage. Kind of hilarious in a way. Nice choice of people for the story.
Thanks.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2012
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Thx so much for understanding the need to "visualize" a piece! So rather than "describe" action we have to "do" it! Blessings! do read the other piece on the Featured listings as well as it gives great reviewing dollars! "Not the Earthmother Type". Blessings!
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Read it yesterday. Gave you 5 stars on that.
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thx so much for that my dear ... I'm on a mission to get people to read more scripts - as you can probably tell!!!!
Comment from Erika Noren
Very nice, clever stuff! I like the character and the image you create of the era and setting with all the references.
Definitely sums up the feelings of mingled excitement and frustration at that age, which I remember all too well.
You're obviously an interesting person with a lot to say, very inspirational.
Erika
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2012
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Very nice, clever stuff! I like the character and the image you create of the era and setting with all the references.
Definitely sums up the feelings of mingled excitement and frustration at that age, which I remember all too well.
You're obviously an interesting person with a lot to say, very inspirational.
Erika
Comment Written 13-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much Erika - and bless you for reading between the lines of my script!
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That's the only way to read good writing ;)
