Mermaid queen
A Terzanelle, see foot note50 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Robina!
This is a beautiful poem. The picture and colors you used compliment the writing well. I just have one suggestion, and that is to make the font bigger so people with eye problems can read it better.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Nome
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
Robina!
This is a beautiful poem. The picture and colors you used compliment the writing well. I just have one suggestion, and that is to make the font bigger so people with eye problems can read it better.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Nome
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Eternal Muse
A great Terzanelle. I wrote one years ago and practically forgot its structure. Such a dream-like verse about a Mermaid. Excellent imagery and visuals. A top drawer poem that stays with a reader.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
A great Terzanelle. I wrote one years ago and practically forgot its structure. Such a dream-like verse about a Mermaid. Excellent imagery and visuals. A top drawer poem that stays with a reader.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from jdrhye
Wow....what a difficult style of poetry. I don't think I could ever be able to create such an in depth rules ... I'd get confused part the way through and have to start all over again!
The imagery is well laid out. It reads like a sailors ballad.
Bravo...congrats!
J
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
Wow....what a difficult style of poetry. I don't think I could ever be able to create such an in depth rules ... I'd get confused part the way through and have to start all over again!
The imagery is well laid out. It reads like a sailors ballad.
Bravo...congrats!
J
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Angela Post
I enjoyed your poem. It makes me want to be a mermaid! It is very calming and relaxing to read. This poetry type seems complicated. I like the phrase "between reality and a sweet dream". Nice work.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
I enjoyed your poem. It makes me want to be a mermaid! It is very calming and relaxing to read. This poetry type seems complicated. I like the phrase "between reality and a sweet dream". Nice work.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.
Comment from sharyl
I really love this poem. It's so soothing, you can almost feel the undulating ocean. I've never tried to write one of these, but I like this style a lot. Very beautiful and well done....thank you for writing.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
I really love this poem. It's so soothing, you can almost feel the undulating ocean. I've never tried to write one of these, but I like this style a lot. Very beautiful and well done....thank you for writing.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week. Thanks for the lovely six, much appreciated.
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully written is this poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection was outstanding and went very well with the poem. enjoyed the read and will be returning to read more.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
Beautifully written is this poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection was outstanding and went very well with the poem. enjoyed the read and will be returning to read more.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
If I knew how to swim I'd say take me there, but if I were a mermaid I guess I wouldn't have to worry about swimming. Alright, I'll come along. They actually make things you can wear that you can wear in the water and look like a mermaid.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
If I knew how to swim I'd say take me there, but if I were a mermaid I guess I wouldn't have to worry about swimming. Alright, I'll come along. They actually make things you can wear that you can wear in the water and look like a mermaid.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Well written, well rhymed, and well done.
You have managed the Terzanelle structure nicely and created a beautiful verse.
Good luck to you with the Poem of the Month contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
Well written, well rhymed, and well done.
You have managed the Terzanelle structure nicely and created a beautiful verse.
Good luck to you with the Poem of the Month contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.
Comment from Pantygynt
I am sorry to say this seems to me to be a case of the 'emperors clothes'. It does not follow either the rhyme scheme you have set down, or the rhyme scheme given in Wikipedia, which is different again. I appreciate that this has attracted rave reviews (I checked them out) but frankly, although it is an intriguing poem, they are are unjustified as the rhyming is incorrect. I know this will make me unpopular, but I can't help that. As an instructor on this site I simply cannot award more than four stars because, as it stands it is not a terzanelle and, were I to award it full marks it would make me look the fool.
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
I am sorry to say this seems to me to be a case of the 'emperors clothes'. It does not follow either the rhyme scheme you have set down, or the rhyme scheme given in Wikipedia, which is different again. I appreciate that this has attracted rave reviews (I checked them out) but frankly, although it is an intriguing poem, they are are unjustified as the rhyming is incorrect. I know this will make me unpopular, but I can't help that. As an instructor on this site I simply cannot award more than four stars because, as it stands it is not a terzanelle and, were I to award it full marks it would make me look the fool.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Terzanelle about the Mermaid Queen who mostly exist in our dreams. No one can proof without a doubt but she is still there real in our dreams.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
A very well-written Terzanelle about the Mermaid Queen who mostly exist in our dreams. No one can proof without a doubt but she is still there real in our dreams.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good start of the week.