Comment from child of kyle

Excellent

In a few short words you gave a very powerful and well written reading. I liked the opening lines and the second, maybe less the third. It was very good. Hope you write longer poetry soon

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

Thank you.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

A heart full of hurt,

mended by six feet of dirt, <<< It's rare for a 575 to rhyme so this is a nice touch.... and a SHOCKING line!

unwashed pants and shirt. <<< PERFECT ending!

In just a few lines you told us a LOT about this poor guy. BRAVO!

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

Thank you so much for your review. I've never written any poems publicly. I especially never knew what a 575 or Haiku was until I wrote this. Glad you like it.

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

I just looked at your page and your review means even more to me now! For an inspirational person such as yourself to like what I wrote makes me very happy.

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 02-Apr-2012

WOW! Thx so much for looking at my page! I am honored by what you said. I see this is your first and only poem. I look forward to more!!! :)

Comment from squid152

Excellent

You nailed the Haiku, 5-7-5 This says quite a lot in 3 lines. Sounds like you are suffering a loss. That's a lot to say in three lines. Good luck!

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

Thank you so much! This was my first time writing a poem publicly so your review mean a lot to me.

reply by squid152 on 02-Apr-2012

You are welcome to FS Different Breed!

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012

Thank you again. Although I should let you know that the 575 haiku was not about a loss but about a gain. Although I was hopin it can be interpreted it many different ways.