Money, Money, Who's Got the Money?
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "MONEY, MONEY, WHO'S GOT THE MONEY"Two bank robbers hide in a women's boarding house.
17 total reviews
Comment from PeaceLoveLina
OMG!!! TOO FUNNY!!! My favorite character is Crystal! Lambkin! Aunt Irene (LilHippie) read this to me with her Russian accent!!! I'm going to show it to my best friend from school! She'll love it!!! Thanks again, Angelina
P.S.I could barely breath from laughing so hard!!!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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OMG!!! TOO FUNNY!!! My favorite character is Crystal! Lambkin! Aunt Irene (LilHippie) read this to me with her Russian accent!!! I'm going to show it to my best friend from school! She'll love it!!! Thanks again, Angelina
P.S.I could barely breath from laughing so hard!!!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Oh, sweetheart, you made my day! Show anyone you want to. Maybe you can get friends together and assign parts. I just finished rating your first poem on site and thought it so much more original that others on the same subject. I gave you what I hope to be one of many sixers.
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Maybe I will!!! Thank you so much!!!
Comment from joann r romei
I see how you set up the script business, i like it and this is very funny, the only thing is it took me so long to get into the characters head with fiction, that script is totally different, but i want to try new thing so , I'll try to learn from the master.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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I see how you set up the script business, i like it and this is very funny, the only thing is it took me so long to get into the characters head with fiction, that script is totally different, but i want to try new thing so , I'll try to learn from the master.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thanks for the compliment, joann. Sure wish I could get an agent.
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a hilarious script, Spitfire. I can really learn a lot from your superb skills in the genre. I love all of your really inventive characters and the great humor throughout. Just terrific. Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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This is a hilarious script, Spitfire. I can really learn a lot from your superb skills in the genre. I love all of your really inventive characters and the great humor throughout. Just terrific. Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
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Wow! You're going way back. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. A dream inspired the write. Also, there's a little part of me in every female character except maybe Sarge. Thanks for reading. I know the entries are long.
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You're welcome, Spitfire. In fact, I was looking at your formatting for your scripts and didn't realize I'd gone back that far. I thought I'd seen a later script LOL. Anyway, you're welcome :)
Comment from Realist101
Hi Shari! Thought I better start at the beginning! What an imagination you have my dear! I like this land-lady. But all of these guys are so odd! SO original. VERY good my friend. Still hurts to laugh, but that's okay! Hug, Susan
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2012
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Hi Shari! Thought I better start at the beginning! What an imagination you have my dear! I like this land-lady. But all of these guys are so odd! SO original. VERY good my friend. Still hurts to laugh, but that's okay! Hug, Susan
Comment Written 01-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2012
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Thanks,Sue for going back to the beginning. It went off the paying board today around three. There's a little bit of me in every character.
Comment from God's Writer
Very very intervestin statmnt frau Weidemann. An interesting tale that for some reason already seems started. Did I miss something here. Like another chapter or two. I will have to look after I get my computer running better. Interesting but seems to be filled by a lot of people not saying much at all. Seems kind of busy to me. I like it, but not enough here to really know any of them. Thank you for this wonderful story.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Very very intervestin statmnt frau Weidemann. An interesting tale that for some reason already seems started. Did I miss something here. Like another chapter or two. I will have to look after I get my computer running better. Interesting but seems to be filled by a lot of people not saying much at all. Seems kind of busy to me. I like it, but not enough here to really know any of them. Thank you for this wonderful story.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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This is the first chapter with the purpose of introducing the characters and their issues. As I write this I see where it does seem busy.
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I don't think I read the first one. So maybe that is why it seemed to jump right in.
Comment from LilHippie
Oh man, I love this. What a cast of characters you have created!!! Awesome. Halfway through I was already pissed that it was going to come to an end. But I have A Surprise for Kandy to look forward to! So well written! I love this collection of women. Awesome. I could picture it all in my head, all of them. I am already picking out a cast of actresses in my head (Yeah, I know, can't help it). Love it. Who is at the door? Don't answer that. You are so good. Hoping it rubs off on me. Dying to do a story now. Must do so soon. It will be the first time a story is read by anyone, created bedtime stories for my daughter (now 29) and my niece (now 13 in a few days) but never for anyone else's ears/eyes. This is marvelous (In the Billy Crystal/Ricardo Montelbaun accent!)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Oh man, I love this. What a cast of characters you have created!!! Awesome. Halfway through I was already pissed that it was going to come to an end. But I have A Surprise for Kandy to look forward to! So well written! I love this collection of women. Awesome. I could picture it all in my head, all of them. I am already picking out a cast of actresses in my head (Yeah, I know, can't help it). Love it. Who is at the door? Don't answer that. You are so good. Hoping it rubs off on me. Dying to do a story now. Must do so soon. It will be the first time a story is read by anyone, created bedtime stories for my daughter (now 29) and my niece (now 13 in a few days) but never for anyone else's ears/eyes. This is marvelous (In the Billy Crystal/Ricardo Montelbaun accent!)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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I love you, Lil, not only for the six stars but for the attention to give to my created characters. Have you picked a favorite yet? I personally like Loony.
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Hmmm, that's hard, but yes I do like Loony. I think I feel a little sorry for the stripper, love the Oy Vey lady cause she is annoying. Do not like the Crystal ball lady. Love, love love the bickering over the damn magazines, too funny. My best friend would be in jail in that case. She is a great one for taking those magazines! I really love stories like this. I HATE the perfect characters in their perfect home, and then OH GOD, something suddenly goes wrong in this divine heaven, YUCK! Give me a mixed bag of nuts in a not so perfect setting anytime, love it!
Comment from Cooper Watt
Thank heavens you said this was intended for a stage play! The entire time I was reading I was thinking screenplay, and thus thinking -- this is WAY to long of a scene with so many people, it'd never work for the screen. As soon as I read your notes on it being a stage play, then it all made sense and I could totally envision it and the larger-than-life characters.
I enjoyed the dialogue -- your characters' personalities are clear, flamboyant and fun! Looking forward to reading more.
Sincerely,
Coop.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thank heavens you said this was intended for a stage play! The entire time I was reading I was thinking screenplay, and thus thinking -- this is WAY to long of a scene with so many people, it'd never work for the screen. As soon as I read your notes on it being a stage play, then it all made sense and I could totally envision it and the larger-than-life characters.
I enjoyed the dialogue -- your characters' personalities are clear, flamboyant and fun! Looking forward to reading more.
Sincerely,
Coop.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thanks, Cooper. For some reason the site's formatting is given for screenplays only. But I'm into live theater, having directed a little and acting small parts in community theater a long time ago.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Your characterization is incredible. I can envision each one. The snappy dialog moves this play along; it's quippy, clever and humorous. Still laughing. This will be a fun production. I have no suggestions because I think it is perfect as written.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Your characterization is incredible. I can envision each one. The snappy dialog moves this play along; it's quippy, clever and humorous. Still laughing. This will be a fun production. I have no suggestions because I think it is perfect as written.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much, Elly. I'd love to play any of the characters, but my favorite is Loony. I just posted the next chapter or scene.
Comment from barkingdog
Her clothes are as skimpy as her brain(great description) and forty LOL
All are such characters. Crystal's costuming sets her character with her entrance.
Mac and cheese on Sunday. LOL
Kandy is watering fake flowers(where did you find these nuts?)
I think everyone has had the canary accident in their family. Ours was a parakeet.
Great with the old house being a character of its own.
Ashes=asses. Good one.
So the robbers are at the door?
Fine stage direction and I see the entire set and the crazy ladies in their costumes with such individual attitudes.
If the robbers choose to come here ... poor robbers is all I can say.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Her clothes are as skimpy as her brain(great description) and forty LOL
All are such characters. Crystal's costuming sets her character with her entrance.
Mac and cheese on Sunday. LOL
Kandy is watering fake flowers(where did you find these nuts?)
I think everyone has had the canary accident in their family. Ours was a parakeet.
Great with the old house being a character of its own.
Ashes=asses. Good one.
So the robbers are at the door?
Fine stage direction and I see the entire set and the crazy ladies in their costumes with such individual attitudes.
If the robbers choose to come here ... poor robbers is all I can say.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Thanks for adoring my characters. They were such fun to write. Will post the next chapter the day this one is through. And poor robbers is right!
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I'm ready. I see them figeting on stage to continue.
Comment from Louise Michelle
What a fun-filled romp, Shari, with a hoast of comical characters. I'd leave out the 'Ov vey' because I feel the line has a better punch with just 'I take one for ...'
This was a thoroughly hilarious read, even your stage setup and descriptions are packed with laughs. Loved dumb-o-crat. Thanks for the entertainment, witty lady. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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What a fun-filled romp, Shari, with a hoast of comical characters. I'd leave out the 'Ov vey' because I feel the line has a better punch with just 'I take one for ...'
This was a thoroughly hilarious read, even your stage setup and descriptions are packed with laughs. Loved dumb-o-crat. Thanks for the entertainment, witty lady. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Thanks for the six, sweet Lou. Okay, I'll take out the Ov vey. I use it later anyway.
