Comment from krazykats2011

Excellent

Beautifully done with this senyru. The whole picture is obvious with only a few short lines. The message is clear and precise. I liked the subject matter too. It is all too often that we all do this (to some degree)..I think human nature, maybe? Thanks for a great piece.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012

Thanks,kk. Glad you saw the whole from the part.

Comment from Eleanor Buron

Excellent

Nice sounds in this poem "whistles" "risky" "illusions" - Had to smile. You put a lot of thought to this one and it comes across sharply clever.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012

Thanks Elly, I keep changing a word or two from knowledgeable readers like you.

reply by Eleanor Buron on 14-Feb-2012

Hi, I've returned and find I'm way behind here - LOL Elly

Comment from ameen786

Excellent

Well, that's a sign of somebody coming out of wilderness; not me, I always play doubting Tom before falling for illusions; fun write my friend; if you don't mind me saying the word 'unknown' seems a bit awkward, how about 'risky'?

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012

I've had three suggestions on this. I've used them all. Now, I'll try risky. Why not?

Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

Hi, Shari.

I've never got the knack of a wolf whistle. My daughter was a real Tomboy in her teens and was great at it, but all her lessons were to no avail. Sob.

Fun self-effacement here, and I'm sure the guys whistle was well deserved.

Best wishes, 'earl the schmoozer'. ;-)

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

Thanks, Earl. Go back to schmoozing. I can't whistle at all!

reply by Earl of Oxford on 10-Feb-2012

I find it easier if I put my teeth in. Mind you, I still sound like a sparrow who's lost its voice ;-)

Comment from Tonulak

Excellent

Still getting the whistles! Why am i not surprised? Those young boys don't know what they're missing. Very cute and funny self-depricating humor.

"Hey, Little Red Ridin' Hood,
You sure are lookin' good,
You're everything a Big Bad Wolf could want!
Oooooooooooooooooooooo!"

Ted

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

THanks, my sexy saxy player for the compliments. Love your poem too.Especially the howl at the end. Looks like I pleases the wolf!

Comment from God's Writer

Excellent

Now don't cut yourself down. You are a beautiful woman and I can see young men being attracted to you. It would shock them if they knew your age. You left out your beautiful eyes. A very well written poem. True to syllable count. An enjoyable poem to read and review, Thank you for this great poem.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

Thanks HP, Thankfully, the picture isn't of me! Wish I could have found one of a man dressed as a woman. That would be hilarious. I did change the last line this morning based on the advice of a viewer. Tell me what you think.

reply by God's Writer on 10-Feb-2012

I think "unknown illusion" would be better, but go with what you feel is right. You wrote it and know what you felt. ILU

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

I like it. Let me check the poem again.

reply by God's Writer on 10-Feb-2012

I thought it fit better for your Senryu. I am glad you thought so too.

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

It's what you think you saw that counts, it's what you said. Covers are sometimes more exciting than what's in 'em. Great point about assumptions. I think I'll vote for Mickey Mouse. Les

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

Thanks, Les. Glad you saw through this. No pun intended.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Ha, ha! I wonder how many young boys and men make that mistake. It could be worse - could be a guy with long hair - now that would be a real disillusionment! Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012

Hadn't thought of that. Should have looked for a picture of a man with long hair. Maybe I will. Thanks for the idea!

Comment from FlamingSpade

Excellent

LOL love it! Saturday 1:30 is perfect for me. Do you have a beverage of choice? Wine? Cocktail? Coffee? Tea? Soda? I feel like I'm getting ready to meet royalty. :) Ginger

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012

Iced tea of water is fine. Can't drink. I have to drive home!
I'll wear my robes and crown. LOL. See you in a couple days. Be sure to find out if you have to call the front gate to let me get in. That's the rule here.

Comment from TammyGail

Excellent

Lolol.. I love this poem Spitfire, excellent work. This was clever and witty like all your poems. Great imagery used for this :) Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read and review.

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 Comment Written 09-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012

Thanks, Tammy. Wanted to post something while I review to make money.