It Consumes My Breath
Dealing with Anger Issues.33 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
You are a master of creating a dark mood - great phrasing and word choices, like in The yellow tint in my exhausted eyes tells a horrid tale
good alliteration in phrases like curdling cry
excellent consonance of hard C sounds in crack and discolor
and good alliteration in before your being
and downfall into darkness Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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You are a master of creating a dark mood - great phrasing and word choices, like in The yellow tint in my exhausted eyes tells a horrid tale
good alliteration in phrases like curdling cry
excellent consonance of hard C sounds in crack and discolor
and good alliteration in before your being
and downfall into darkness Brooke
Comment Written 08-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2012
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WOW! Thank you for reading and reviewing this piece. I enjoyed writing this and I am pleased you enjoyed it...dark lord
Comment from Galadriel's Lyric
You speak so eloquently of this Anger beast. Your description of falling vicitm to it is very chilling indeed. You've created a cage for threader to dwell in as they get to know you and your darkness. This is awesome:
Stirring within the soul, the rancid monster lets out a blood
Curdling cry that shakes the foundation of my existence.
Well done write that bears your soul, flesh and bone.
~Galadriel
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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You speak so eloquently of this Anger beast. Your description of falling vicitm to it is very chilling indeed. You've created a cage for threader to dwell in as they get to know you and your darkness. This is awesome:
Stirring within the soul, the rancid monster lets out a blood
Curdling cry that shakes the foundation of my existence.
Well done write that bears your soul, flesh and bone.
~Galadriel
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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I thank you so very much for the continued support of my writing...dark lord.
Comment from Deejharrington
I think we need to bring back the Dark Poem contests, because this certainly would win, hands down. So many people have anger issues and it is easy to imagine someone just decides to give in to all the urges and let all hell loose.
deb
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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I think we need to bring back the Dark Poem contests, because this certainly would win, hands down. So many people have anger issues and it is easy to imagine someone just decides to give in to all the urges and let all hell loose.
deb
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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I thank you so very much for the kind words and support of my writing...dark lord
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from sailaway7289
Dark and intense, your poem speaks of dark emotions. Nice writing - I would hate to be in the presence of this person when they turned into the beast of rage. :-)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Dark and intense, your poem speaks of dark emotions. Nice writing - I would hate to be in the presence of this person when they turned into the beast of rage. :-)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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I thank you for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from ameen786
Hello Dark Lord, my friend, you certainly live up to your image, a haunting poem reflecting the conflict within, the verse has great flow and powerful phrasings, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Hello Dark Lord, my friend, you certainly live up to your image, a haunting poem reflecting the conflict within, the verse has great flow and powerful phrasings, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from rashi kumar
This is a very intense poem,
when we really need to soothe the evil in someone of our family or friends.
Very well-written,
exquisitely presented!
The phrases are very appealing.
Keep sharing!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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This is a very intense poem,
when we really need to soothe the evil in someone of our family or friends.
Very well-written,
exquisitely presented!
The phrases are very appealing.
Keep sharing!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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I thank you for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from The Stranger
well this particular poem is certainly written on a dark subject, guilt and remorse have led the subject of the poem to plead for leniency
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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well this particular poem is certainly written on a dark subject, guilt and remorse have led the subject of the poem to plead for leniency
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the very kind review...dark lord
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--"Dealing with Anger Issues.
It Consumes My Breath"
Intriguing title. Love your profile pic, by the way. :)
--"But I need to control you, caress you and soothe the beast you are.
The molten lava stirs within my cage, it consumes my breath."
Good words of strong imagery.
--"I give in to the beast and begin my downfall into the darkness."
Let me know of your escapades. LOL.
Jesus freaking Christ! This is some dark shit! ... Love it! LOL.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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--"Dealing with Anger Issues.
It Consumes My Breath"
Intriguing title. Love your profile pic, by the way. :)
--"But I need to control you, caress you and soothe the beast you are.
The molten lava stirs within my cage, it consumes my breath."
Good words of strong imagery.
--"I give in to the beast and begin my downfall into the darkness."
Let me know of your escapades. LOL.
Jesus freaking Christ! This is some dark shit! ... Love it! LOL.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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WOW! Thank you for the kind words, I am pleased you enjoyed my dark writing...dark lord
Comment from Anisa-
Very interesting and dark poem. Great job. I enjoyed reading this and found the art unique and fitting. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Very interesting and dark poem. Great job. I enjoyed reading this and found the art unique and fitting. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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I thank you for taking the time to read and review my writing...dark lord
Comment from cce29
you chose a good photo for the poem. the stanzas are separated nicely, yet they tie in together to the over all idea. your poem flows well, and your meaning gets across very strong
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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you chose a good photo for the poem. the stanzas are separated nicely, yet they tie in together to the over all idea. your poem flows well, and your meaning gets across very strong
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review my writing...dark lord
