Shakespearian lost love
Romeo no longer loves Juliet21 total reviews
Comment from debskatz
Hi apelle,
Okay... This one is certainly different and imaginative. Not at all what I expected. Cool that after everything had gone to hell, they got back together. Ain't love grand! lol
Thanks for sharing this interesting story with us & good luck in the contest!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2012
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Hi apelle,
Okay... This one is certainly different and imaginative. Not at all what I expected. Cool that after everything had gone to hell, they got back together. Ain't love grand! lol
Thanks for sharing this interesting story with us & good luck in the contest!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 16-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2012
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Thanks so much, I had loads of fun writing it:)
Adina
Comment from Chris Tee
I have to be honest, but this is a cracker of humorous flash fiction we have here old sport You put a smile on my dial for a long while sprinkled with chuckles in between.
Well done and good luck in the contest with this splendid work we have here my girl.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2012
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I have to be honest, but this is a cracker of humorous flash fiction we have here old sport You put a smile on my dial for a long while sprinkled with chuckles in between.
Well done and good luck in the contest with this splendid work we have here my girl.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2012
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What a great joy you have given me through your comment
Thanks so much
Adina
Comment from alexisleech
I really enjoyed this! What a great take on the Romeo and Juliet scenario, and one, I'm sure, that everyone can understand with it's many facets. I suppose it could be compounded by the idea that without love we are nothing, so if the icons of true love fall out, what hope is there for the rest of the world? Well done, and good luck in the competition. Alexis x
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I really enjoyed this! What a great take on the Romeo and Juliet scenario, and one, I'm sure, that everyone can understand with it's many facets. I suppose it could be compounded by the idea that without love we are nothing, so if the icons of true love fall out, what hope is there for the rest of the world? Well done, and good luck in the competition. Alexis x
Comment Written 16-Jan-2012
Comment from WilliamDeen
Ha! Nice work and an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. One item. You wrote, "With her delicate and sensitive ego injured Juliet locked herself in her room and threatened with imminent suicide by swallowing a large amount of barbiturates from the family drug cabinet." Think you need a comma after 'injured'.
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Ha! Nice work and an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. One item. You wrote, "With her delicate and sensitive ego injured Juliet locked herself in her room and threatened with imminent suicide by swallowing a large amount of barbiturates from the family drug cabinet." Think you need a comma after 'injured'.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
Comment from Gungalo
This is a riot, Apelle! In a brief write you have manage to tear the world apart and reunite Romeo and Juliet. Amazing. Great usage of words and a danged good handle on the rest of the world too.
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This is a riot, Apelle! In a brief write you have manage to tear the world apart and reunite Romeo and Juliet. Amazing. Great usage of words and a danged good handle on the rest of the world too.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
Comment from Rahul@ISM_India
This story has been very well penned
Very thoughtful,nice use of expressions,Very creative
perfect selection of artwork
LOved your work!Well done!
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This story has been very well penned
Very thoughtful,nice use of expressions,Very creative
perfect selection of artwork
LOved your work!Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
Comment from Krugerrand
Funny, modern take on the old story. I'm sure I've seen it played out just this way on Jerry Springer, on national tabloids, on twitter...
...but it seemed as (if) his romantic feelings have (tense - had) suddenly disappeared,...
Romeo and Juliet (Juliet's) brake (break) up took...
...where they made a living by picking up (can drop 'up') strawberries.
Good luck in the contest.
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Funny, modern take on the old story. I'm sure I've seen it played out just this way on Jerry Springer, on national tabloids, on twitter...
...but it seemed as (if) his romantic feelings have (tense - had) suddenly disappeared,...
Romeo and Juliet (Juliet's) brake (break) up took...
...where they made a living by picking up (can drop 'up') strawberries.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
Comment from Oblivion187
Other than the misspelling of brake (seemed like it should be break up) I loved it. I love sociological satires and going against the grain of cherished works. The melee that would ensue is quite riotous indeed. It would be a tabloid craze if this were a 21st century incident. People put so much faith in others love that if the two greatest lovers of all time couldn't stand the test, than who could. Especially like at the end the rekindling of the relationship amidst chaos. Fact is no one knows the facts and this is probably exactly how this whole event would play out.
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Other than the misspelling of brake (seemed like it should be break up) I loved it. I love sociological satires and going against the grain of cherished works. The melee that would ensue is quite riotous indeed. It would be a tabloid craze if this were a 21st century incident. People put so much faith in others love that if the two greatest lovers of all time couldn't stand the test, than who could. Especially like at the end the rekindling of the relationship amidst chaos. Fact is no one knows the facts and this is probably exactly how this whole event would play out.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
Comment from RazberryBullet
Interesting take on these two ;p
suggestions: Romeo and Juliet /brake>break/ up took up the first pages of all tabloids and organized talk shows...actors were left jobless forced to migrate to foreign countries, where they made a living by picking (omit>up) strawberries...Romeo casually walked by Juliet's window one starry night smiling cocky and (propitious--means favorable)to her
Needs technical work.
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Interesting take on these two ;p
suggestions: Romeo and Juliet /brake>break/ up took up the first pages of all tabloids and organized talk shows...actors were left jobless forced to migrate to foreign countries, where they made a living by picking (omit>up) strawberries...Romeo casually walked by Juliet's window one starry night smiling cocky and (propitious--means favorable)to her
Needs technical work.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have read many entries for this contest today and your's is very creative and fun to read. I enjoyed it and I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
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I have read many entries for this contest today and your's is very creative and fun to read. I enjoyed it and I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
