Timmy and Tommy Mouse
Individuel poetry stories of the Hedgerow animals9 total reviews
Comment from Christina 201
Perfect rhyme and rythm and a lovely, quaint theme.
I am sure very young children will adore this on-going poetic story. Well done
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Perfect rhyme and rythm and a lovely, quaint theme.
I am sure very young children will adore this on-going poetic story. Well done
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Thank you for this lovely review and the 6 stars, Christina! I appreciate your going into my portfolio to read this, and I value your comments. xsx
Comment from Skyangel02
Congratulations on your seal of quality. I just read this delightful poem to my four year old grandson and you get his approval as well as mine. He had a big smile on his face and said "I like Timmy and Tommy mouse Nanna".
Thank you for putting a smile on the faces of many children young and old. Great work. :-)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Congratulations on your seal of quality. I just read this delightful poem to my four year old grandson and you get his approval as well as mine. He had a big smile on his face and said "I like Timmy and Tommy mouse Nanna".
Thank you for putting a smile on the faces of many children young and old. Great work. :-)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Skyangel02 for you really lovely review! I am so very pleased your grandson enjoyed this, it makes the writing of these stories so much more pleasurable, and thank you for the congrats, too! xsx
Comment from Sasha
Congratulations on receiving the Seal of Approval. This is the first poem I have read and found it absolutely delightful. I do hope you plan to publish. It would make a marvelous children's book.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Congratulations on receiving the Seal of Approval. This is the first poem I have read and found it absolutely delightful. I do hope you plan to publish. It would make a marvelous children's book.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Thank you so very much, Smurphgirl, not only for the congrats, but for reading my little story! I thought I would try to publish and sent the stories to a publisher to see if anything would happen, and to my surprise, they accepted it! The book is coming out later this year with illustrations! This is all down to the people on FanStory, who kept telling me to try. I owe so much to everyone here, and will always be grateful to you all. Thank you! xsx
Comment from Merajul
This is a beautiful poem. My 5 year old son joined school for the new session today.I told him the story , he is overjoyed. This is the reason why the poetry deserve all this ! Superb!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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This is a beautiful poem. My 5 year old son joined school for the new session today.I told him the story , he is overjoyed. This is the reason why the poetry deserve all this ! Superb!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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OH thank you, Merajul! I hope he is enjoying school. I am so happy he liked my story. If you would allow it, I will give his name to one of my little animals, I am writing one at the moment about school sports day, where everyone is a winner in one way or another. Thank you, again for the lovely review. xsx
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So nice of you ! I am humbled by your gesture . He is Sayem (read Sa'em, not good in phonetics),see if it fits the poem's need of sound & rhyme. Anyway thanks again.
Comment from ennahanid
This is pure genius and totally magical and congratulations on your Seal of Quality.
It was a pleasure to be pointed in this direction so that I got to read and enjoy this today.
With a happy smile...Dinah
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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This is pure genius and totally magical and congratulations on your Seal of Quality.
It was a pleasure to be pointed in this direction so that I got to read and enjoy this today.
With a happy smile...Dinah
Comment Written 08-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, Dinah! I was totally stunned, and my tummy is still going over! Thank you for looking for Hedgerow Capers, and for reading it. I am so pleased you liked it! xsx
Comment from misscookie
I love ch8ildren stoies and I must say You have a gift from God to write so well.
I enjoy the chacthers they are so much fun.
I love the movment ofyour stoy I have not found a dull moment
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I love ch8ildren stoies and I must say You have a gift from God to write so well.
I enjoy the chacthers they are so much fun.
I love the movment ofyour stoy I have not found a dull moment
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you, misscookie, you have really made my day with all your lovely reviews. I thank you so, so much! xsx
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My pleasure.
Comment from adewpearl
Sandra, did you accidentally release this from preview mode without realizing it?
I don't have a short story on my monitor, just one line that reads Timmy and Tommy Mouse With Their Friends
Thought I'd give you a heads up :-) Brooke
I see the whole poem is now appearing :-)
excellent rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like drank up their drink
love the alliterative character names
a delightful story : -) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Sandra, did you accidentally release this from preview mode without realizing it?
I don't have a short story on my monitor, just one line that reads Timmy and Tommy Mouse With Their Friends
Thought I'd give you a heads up :-) Brooke
I see the whole poem is now appearing :-)
excellent rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like drank up their drink
love the alliterative character names
a delightful story : -) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Brooke for pointing that out, is was on there so I am not sure what happened. I have redone it, so I hope it is there now. Fingers crossed. Sandra
Comment from randomzed
Needs work.
Needs length.
The title is 50% of the 'poem'.
The title had me.
I was ready.
Take me away please.
You only took me to the corner.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Needs work.
Needs length.
The title is 50% of the 'poem'.
The title had me.
I was ready.
Take me away please.
You only took me to the corner.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your review, I understand what you mean now that I look at it as a reader not a writer of the work. I shall add the second part to the first for the length and work on the title. And look at the overall poem for improvement.
Comment from pattipac
Enjoyed the message your humorous few words portrayed. I can see Timmy and Tommy carousing (mousing)with their buddies having a grand time. Not a care in the world save the mouse trap in the corner of the room. Choice of words few tells a rousing tale. Good job.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Enjoyed the message your humorous few words portrayed. I can see Timmy and Tommy carousing (mousing)with their buddies having a grand time. Not a care in the world save the mouse trap in the corner of the room. Choice of words few tells a rousing tale. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thankyou for your review. This is part of a series which looking at it now, I think I should add the second part to lengthen the story. Thank you for reading it and taking the time to review it.
