At the Bar Again
Ballad Contest Entry20 total reviews
Comment from TammyGail
This poem was great - very well written and expressed, beautiful imagery alongside your poem thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read and review good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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This poem was great - very well written and expressed, beautiful imagery alongside your poem thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read and review good luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you-it was a fun write. Glad you enjoyed it!!! Debbie
Comment from carveraye
I enjoied this. I kept singing it as I read it. It did seem like there was few forced rhymes, but over all nothing that I would consider negative to the overall feeling.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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I enjoied this. I kept singing it as I read it. It did seem like there was few forced rhymes, but over all nothing that I would consider negative to the overall feeling.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed!!! Debbie
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey deJohn
Back in the seventies, I used to fight in smokers that were back room brawls for money. Your poem has that same bawdy feeling to it. Nicely done
Bear
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Hey deJohn
Back in the seventies, I used to fight in smokers that were back room brawls for money. Your poem has that same bawdy feeling to it. Nicely done
Bear
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much. I hope the memories it brought back were good!!! Debbie
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a great ballad, well-written and amusing., I liked your refrain, it worked well. the poem is entertaining and certainly brought a smile. good luck in the competition, Giddy
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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This is a great ballad, well-written and amusing., I liked your refrain, it worked well. the poem is entertaining and certainly brought a smile. good luck in the competition, Giddy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thank you so much for your kind words and review!!! Debbie
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. I love the barmaid. Now that is a smart woman. I love the way the conflict ended. Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I love the barmaid. Now that is a smart woman. I love the way the conflict ended. Great work.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much-I had a bit of fun with this one!!! Debbie
Comment from liz10240
This is a fun read. Rythmn and rhyme are excellent and keep within the format of a ballad. You have managed to tell a cute story while keeping the rules of the poem intact. This was a challenging write, well done. Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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This is a fun read. Rythmn and rhyme are excellent and keep within the format of a ballad. You have managed to tell a cute story while keeping the rules of the poem intact. This was a challenging write, well done. Good luck!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thanks! This was written all in fun!!!!Debbie
Comment from ChowChow
Hope you make out okey on this contest. Its really a cute song lyrics poem. I can remember a few people in my life being like taht. Thinking of course that they were better. Really, it was the "drink" that always won. Very good sweetie. chowchow
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Hope you make out okey on this contest. Its really a cute song lyrics poem. I can remember a few people in my life being like taht. Thinking of course that they were better. Really, it was the "drink" that always won. Very good sweetie. chowchow
Comment Written 01-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thank s so much. I only entered as they didn't have enough entries to close the contest. It was a lot of fun once I got started at it!!! Debbie
Comment from barkingdog
I love the cleverness in this piece. Most of the characters are alcoholic beverages. And the disputes are so funny. Two whiskeys fight over who is best.
Amaretto may be a sleaze. LOL
Johnny Walker has a wandering eye and his girl Rosa is angry.
And they all were arrested.
I think you met the contest requirements, Debbie. What a fun post to read.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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I love the cleverness in this piece. Most of the characters are alcoholic beverages. And the disputes are so funny. Two whiskeys fight over who is best.
Amaretto may be a sleaze. LOL
Johnny Walker has a wandering eye and his girl Rosa is angry.
And they all were arrested.
I think you met the contest requirements, Debbie. What a fun post to read.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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I only wrote this because they didn't have enough entries to close the contest. It turned out to be fun and funny! Thanks,, friend!!! Debbie
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Really? Well, it is sure a lot of tongue in the cheek fun. :)BD
Comment from Bellringer
Debbie, Based on the contest instructions, it looked like you fulfilled the general requirements. Your characters are very original. The resolution was not entirely happy however for the rowdy crew was arrested--but it was a resolution. Generally, ballads are poems that can be set to music (or have a lyrical quality)--so, to me, meter is somewhat important in this style. I would suggest reading it out loud to feel/hear its flow and decide which lines need work. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Debbie, Based on the contest instructions, it looked like you fulfilled the general requirements. Your characters are very original. The resolution was not entirely happy however for the rowdy crew was arrested--but it was a resolution. Generally, ballads are poems that can be set to music (or have a lyrical quality)--so, to me, meter is somewhat important in this style. I would suggest reading it out loud to feel/hear its flow and decide which lines need work. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Thanks so much. I am really bad at meter. It is my goal to work on it next year-sort of a New Year's Resolution I guess. I will work on this a bit to see if I can make it better. I didn't join the contest with any hopes of winning-I knew they needed more entries to be able to close it, so I wrote this. It ended up being a lot of fun, but I agree with you about the meter. Thanks for reviews, encouragement and suggestions!!! Debbie
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My pleasure, Debbie. I want the best for you! You've come a long way in your poetry. Regards, Hector
Comment from me_tudor
This was a fun ballard to read. We need to get someone with a banjo to come up with a melody for it. I thought the barmaid was very clever. lol Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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This was a fun ballard to read. We need to get someone with a banjo to come up with a melody for it. I thought the barmaid was very clever. lol Great job!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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I wasn't going to enter this, but there weren't enough entries to close the contest. Once I got into it, it was fun!!! Debbie
