Lost in the Middle of Nowhere
Short story15 total reviews
Comment from writerwish
This is well done and kept my interest till the end. Although you used all narrative, you showed what she observed mostly and not what she thought or concluded. The ending was good for this.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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This is well done and kept my interest till the end. Although you used all narrative, you showed what she observed mostly and not what she thought or concluded. The ending was good for this.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much-Fiction is a totally new world to me. I have been a nonfiction writer and somehow got sidetracked into poetry. This is only my 4th fiction piece. I appreciate your kind review!!! Debbie
Comment from Permelia
I feel you did a great job describing a sleepwalkers problems. One of my brothers sleepwalked and as a child, sometimes our entertainment was following him as he walked downstairs, and down the hall to the kitchen, ect- but he never remembered the next day. We often wondered how he did in the Navy during WW2.-Your story was very entertaining.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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I feel you did a great job describing a sleepwalkers problems. One of my brothers sleepwalked and as a child, sometimes our entertainment was following him as he walked downstairs, and down the hall to the kitchen, ect- but he never remembered the next day. We often wondered how he did in the Navy during WW2.-Your story was very entertaining.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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I've been told I sleepwalk, but have never seen it myself-LOL!!! A teammate of my son had this happen in a hotel at a hockey tournament in Oklahoma City. When the police found him he was still fast asleep. Thank you for your kind review and the six stars. They mean a lot to me as I don't write fiction, but I had to for my class!!! Debbie
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
You did an excellent job. I was so glad she was just sleep walking,and nothing bad happened. You have a good ability to build suspense and had me on the edge of my desk chair.Very well written flash fiction.I wish you well in your class.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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You did an excellent job. I was so glad she was just sleep walking,and nothing bad happened. You have a good ability to build suspense and had me on the edge of my desk chair.Very well written flash fiction.I wish you well in your class.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much-your review means a lot to me as I am not a fiction writer, but had to do this one for class. Who knows-I may try it again sometime!!! DEbbie
Comment from TammyGail
The visual artwork is really cool I like it - Nice choice and the story I found very interesting .... You did a lovely job writing this ..... Thanks for sharing
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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The visual artwork is really cool I like it - Nice choice and the story I found very interesting .... You did a lovely job writing this ..... Thanks for sharing
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much-your review means a lot to me as I am not a fiction writer, but had to do this one for class. Who knows-I may try it again sometime!!! DEbbie
Comment from Queenise
This was enjoyable to read and the change of pace was good and the topic interesting. Caught your attention and held it until the end. Liked the way the end unfolded. Hope your assignment goes well. Blessings. Queenise
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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This was enjoyable to read and the change of pace was good and the topic interesting. Caught your attention and held it until the end. Liked the way the end unfolded. Hope your assignment goes well. Blessings. Queenise
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much-your review means a lot to me as I am not a fiction writer, but had to do this one for class. Who knows-I may try it again sometime!!! DEbbie
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Debbie, you're welcome. You should. Queenise
